Pirate Mage

First of all, the whole story is full of gossip; Secondly, the character's personality is extremely childish, like a child playing house.

Is writing a novel a dream? What do you think?

It's a lot of nonsense. It's obviously 1+1 equals 2, but it has to be written as 1+1 equals 1+0+1+0. Finally, it has to be emphasized that it is not equal to 3 but equal to 2. It's such a bastard that I can't stand it after reading a few chapters. I suggest you try it if you are not too tired.

This is really the messiest pirate I have ever seen. This is just a branch. The leader is just playing with wool. What a waste of goldfinger.

There is no sense of immersion at all😰,

I just read Chapter 19, and I have to say that it's really a lot of nonsense. There are a lot of words, but it's all nonsense, and the protagonist's IQ seems to be a bit poor.

I hope the author writes less, because but, so, there is no sense of substitution in such words. Although I don't know how to write novels, I have read other people's books and found that some novels don't have these in them, because they look like sentences composed by elementary school students.

Chapter 4, author, can you read it for yourself and use some brainpower? Obviously that person called Dasqi's name directly, you still need to make up a reason? Moreover, One Piece is a hot-blooded manga, not a conspiracy manga.

You remind me of another author - Yiguan Shengxue, which is full of introductions, explanations, analyzes and psychological activities, and is very long-winded.

It feels like you can write a chapter in just a few sentences. It's all water and it's too difficult to read.

Is this a novel? There are so many inner dramas that I can't even understand them 😰 After watching the free version, I don't know if the speaker has even 10 sentences! Is it all from your heart?

The author is really verbose. What I wrote was all messy stuff. The key is that I started charging a long time ago. It's just a money scam

Perseverance is the stupidest way to write it. The person who wears Naruto works harder than Gai, and the person who wears Pirates trains Luffy harder than Garp. With this kind of perseverance, he can actually become a soldier or something. The protagonist of this novel makes veterans admire his perseverance even before he cheats when he first enters the military camp. Was he still so miserable before joining the navy?

How should I put it? It's like a primary school student's diary. The whole article feels like a running account.

To be honest, I am a person who reads mindless white articles. But I couldn't stand your book until Chapter 18. I don't know how to put it. In fact, I can still accept your setting, but I really can't accept your writing style. The whole article is nonsense. It can be explained clearly in a few sentences. You have to be there because it gives you a headache.

I have read a lot of books and rarely give reviews. This time I couldn't help but give a bad review.

Can anyone count how many so there are in a chapter?

Writing a novel is like a verbal account

Aren't you done writing about warriors? If you don't add magic, you can play a Mao mage!