Preface to the Mountains and Rivers

The author's writing is very good, but there are several shortcomings 1. The author still prefers Yang Xing. 2. I feel that there are no qualification flaws in the book. It is also possible that the author just wanted to write this and didn't know clearly. 3. The conflict is too calm. I think the biggest conflict is Luo Yu's marriage.

After reading some, the author's writing is quite good. I still want to say a few words. Today's online novels are still mainly about refreshing novels. After all, they are relaxing and pastime activities. No one wants to learn any principles from online novels. In other words, refreshing and novel novels have been widely circulated since ancient times. The author wants to deviate from the current popular trend of online novels, and the readership will be very small, so don't think about becoming famous with one book. I don't want to dampen the author's enthusiasm for writing, but the fact is that the book may end like this. I hope the author is mentally prepared. Not all persistence can lead to success, and you have to choose the right direction if you work hard. Writing is inherently a boring thing. If there is no positive feedback from readers for a long time, most authors will not persist, but they still hope to leave a complete story... That's it.

The first volume is about Yang Xing, the second volume is about Zhou Yu, and the third volume is about Huo Qing. It's hard to tell which one is the protagonist, or if they are all protagonists. Now it's just a matter of southern Xinjiang. In the future, the plot will be richer and the map will be wider. It will be too complicated to cover Nanyang, Luoyang, Yiling, Shuzhong, and Baiyue. One map and one main line. Also, Yang Xing's emotional experience is too tragic.

I came to see you from Zhihu. In short, keep at it!

Looking at it from Zhihu, the author who is on the verge of breaking out has a word to say. Nowadays readers like cool articles. If you are not a master, you should not write articles with slow plots and slow development. Readers do not have the patience to wait. In my opinion, the novels at the top of the rankings are basically invincible novels. Look at those protagonists, no matter where they suffered a little setback, they would just start driving and pretend to be cool all the way. Even if you encounter some difficulties, you will immediately solve them by pretending to be cool. The difference between invincible writing and pseudo-invincible writing is that invincible writing is to directly kill the villain with one punch, while pseudo-invincible writing is to take a long detour and seem to pay a small price to kill the villain. Even so, there will still be readers who are not satisfied with it. The kind of novel written by a master that starts from scratch and develops slowly, just read it. As a newbie, don't believe in the master's tricks, and don't think that you are a banana or a squid. Online novels are not literary works, they are commodities. Don't be superstitious about writing. Writing has its own uses. Suppress your own writing, write without thinking, don't stop typing with your fingers, and type faster, so your burden can be lighter. I remember there was a book written by a newcomer that ranked high on the rankings. The male protagonist took his sister out and met a passerby. The passer-by girl just came up and asked her something that was not too harsh. The male protagonist slapped the passer-by girl on the face and specifically described it as "bloody marks". In my opinion, the male protagonist is almost a psychopath, but readers in the book review section expressed their delight. Admit it, this is reality. If you pretend to be noble, you should not write online novels.

The author's writing is quite good, and the emotional line is a bit like that of Zhang Xiaofan, who killed the immortal... The various forces are competing against each other, and the character's growth and transformation are all traced, and it feels natural. The article is reasonable but not pedantic, and the world situation is also divided into camps. Each character has his own position and pursuit. A very rare group drama, the writing gets better and better in the later stages. What I saw at the beginning is comparable to the leader of the cultivation sect.

Let me tell you my opinion The protagonist is really naive and stupid Why should he come out when he is staying well in the sect? The protagonist has been asked to take charge of alchemy several times but is unwilling to do so. He wants to stay at Shuwu Peak and is he coming out now? Just to follow him and become a bitch? The leader really just let him go. All the people in your sect who can make alchemy are gone. How can you still let him go? This sect really means that if you want to join, you can join, and if you want to leave, you can leave. It is clear that the sect is full of waste, and the protagonist can make elixirs just when he is coming to the fore, and the results have come out. What is your relationship with Elder Luo? You don't know how to get along with your apprentice after being provoked by just a few words? And these mortals, you don't let them change their surnames, you build houses for them, and you buy food. Are you their nanny? A person who has been raped by your aunt since childhood, don't you understand? The protagonist's apprentice looks down on mortals, so does the protagonist look down on them? Instead of raising these mortals like pigs, the protagonist is even more disgusting than his apprentice. To help the poor, we must first help our ambitions! Do you still want everyone to be fed? When the protagonist is about to come out, the goddess is gone and I have a licking dog to come out and lick with me. How can I highlight my loyalty to the goddess

How come there are so few people watching such a good work? Are online articles just about cool articles? Only stories with connotation, depth and logic can become classics. Thank you to the author for bringing such a good work 🙏

The subject matter is very good, the idea is very good, and the writing is very good, but the narrative points are too scattered and unfocused. It is too divided into other characters, and it never forms a main line. It is a bit like Jin Yong's martial arts in the past, and the grand narrative story, but the author is obviously beyond his capabilities, and the pace is too slow. It is not for you to write a cool article, but at least it must be focused.

I have always envied such writing style and writing style, but I couldn't write it myself, so I can only work more on the plot structure. I was really surprised to see such literary talent at the starting point, but even if there are voices of dissuasion, I still hope that the author will persevere. If the story is well narrated, coupled with such writing style, after the book is completed, it can be carefully crafted and then moved to the physical book market. Whether it can be sold is another matter, but it is also good to leave a masterpiece for yourself. In short, I like this style very much. I hope the storyline is not too cliche. I will read it carefully. Come on!

There aren't many coins left on the account. I haven't logged in to this account to read books for a long time, and I don't plan on recharging, so I have no choice but to reward this. Whether you continue or give up, I am satisfied with the previous story. That's all.

What a great book. There are very few articles about cultivating immortals that can be written in such a down-to-earth way. There are also many worldly feelings and helplessness among monks. Good work.

It's very comfortable to watch, I like it very much! The only thing that is a bit lacking is that there seems to be no foreshadowing? Not enough dramatic conflict? I have absolutely no expectations for the plot that may happen next. I don't know what the protagonist is doing. Is he trying to become an immortal? I don't think he is particularly sexy! Come on, author💪I hope to write a few million more words😁😁

It's so fake. A 16-year-old has a beard as long as one finger. Why don't you tease me

To be able to write such an excellent work, the author has rich experience knowledge and talent. It's just a pity that not more friends can enjoy this book.

Okay, let's not refer to Feng Yun's emotional line. Do we like Feng Yun because we like his emotional line? How many people scolded the heroine? Real-life interpersonal communication is already very tiring, and you still have a heroine who comes and goes. I'm not bad at writing. Is it so difficult to write a clean book? I have to be a monster.

Let me speak from my personal point of view. There may be two reasons why this book cannot attract readers. One is that the setting is not rich enough, and the other is that the atmosphere of cultivating immortality is insufficient. The huge world view and rich and detailed settings can greatly increase readers' interest. For example, the content of exercises, spiritual plants, alchemy and weapon refining can be enriched. There is a domestic stand-alone game called The Great Immortal Cultivation Simulator. If you are interested, you can check it out. In the words of the cultivation area, there is no immortal flavor. For example, in the current chapters, the bows and arrows, beacon towers, and battle formations are no different from ordinary armies. There is no atmosphere of immortality. At least make it localized, for example, change bows and arrows into long-range magic weapons, change beacon towers into spiritual vision towers that can transmit information and expand the observation range, change battle formations into formations, and form formations according to directions. Multiple formation eyes provide spiritual support for a formation pivot. Only the formation pivot can launch an attack. The formation eyes share the damage equally. When the stability of the formation is destroyed, the formation will fall apart (actually it is also the game content of the simulator)