Lord of Secret Fire

The creativity is very good, and the writing skills are also good, but the author doesn't know how to grasp the readers. Readers have needs in reading novels, and they seek spiritual satisfaction. You must constantly satisfy the readers' spiritual needs in the writing, that is, make the readers high. According to my observation, no matter what you write, about 20 to 30 chapters, there must be text that makes the readers high. Take the Lord of Mysteries as an example. His first volume is very boring in terms of plot. What is attractive is his setting, but this is not enough, Tarot Club will It makes readers high, there are many imitations, the setting is very good, and the plot is also good, but without the Tarot Society, which can satisfy the reader's spiritual needs from time to time, it will look very boring The spiritual needs of readers are roughly divided into two types, fantasy and emotion. Fantasy is setting and description. The setting is easy to understand, and the description mainly satisfies the reader's fantasy of the atmosphere. A simple example is a horror novel, whose atmosphere satisfies the reader's fantasy of horror Emotion, mainly the plot is high The tide is the peak of emotion. When the reader's own emotions are mobilized to the peak by the text, it can also satisfy the reader's spiritual needs and attract readers. For example, the death of Kakyoin in Jojo and the transformation of the clown And the author, I have read thirty chapters of your book, but there is no attractive setting or good text. My writing skills allowed me to read from the first chapter, but I couldn't hold on after chapter 30. Maybe some people can't go on until chapter 30, and some people can go longer than 30 chapters. I think most people can't hold on for long. As I said before, 20 to 30 chapters is a rough period of fatigue. You have to keep attracting readers. Instead of counting on the setting thrown out at the beginning to make readers finish your boring and lengthy plot, no matter how the writing is, once the plain plot is prolonged, readers will feel boring and tired. At this time, you can either throw out new settings (plug-ins for the protagonist are also counted, anything that is not in the previous article is considered a new setting), this Make the setting interesting, or let the plot changes to attract readers Look at what you wrote, pull out all the others, and only look at the plot you wrote. The protagonist travels through time, is taken to the police station, discovers that he has special abilities, kills a heretic, the official mysterious force appears, and the protagonist is taken home. Do you think this is attractive? Apart from these plot settings and writing, how attractive are you? How attractive are the three together? Have you ever thought about this? For me, you have neither satisfied my fantasy about technological civilization (you can't use flying motorcycles and flying skateboards to express technological civilization, maybe the author didn't want to express it), nor have you satisfied my fantasy about grand scenes or the protagonist's style (to be honest, the protagonist Killing that guy didn't look very stylish to me, just like the protagonist hit him by mistake). Future Civilization, you wrote it like a modern city, and the introduction said that the protagonist is very powerful. To me, it looked like a standard plug-in for the protagonist in time travel, and it didn't look stylish, and the protagonist didn't show any attractive characteristics. To sum up, it doesn't discourage people from quitting, and it doesn't attract people either. If you make the scientific and technological civilization more fanciful, for example, the skateboard looks like a lollipop, and the police don't come on a motorcycle but on a jellyfish, I don't think this is very attractive. This appearance is not easy to write, so it is better to write a more fantasy appearance. It would be nice if the scene where the protagonist kills that guy was written with more style, and the protagonist himself has more characteristics, rather than being an ordinary person

It is well written, and the science fiction world in it is really good, with a cyberpunk style, which is really great. It has a slight flaw. The distance between extraordinary people and ordinary people is not well grasped. Since the author said that there is magic in the third era, but it has only been a hundred years since the world collapsed, many people have forgotten the existence of magic. Extraordinary people and ordinary people are two different worlds. I think this is a bit incredible...

Some things just feel like they are written in one stroke. I always feel that the word count is low. Since technology and mystery have been developed, then another world should also be developed. Since there are pagans, there are also defenders. You should focus on writing some unknown underground worlds. The chapters should at least have ups and downs. It is fun to read. Since it is an ordinary day, then why write it? What is written is not one Chapter two. You have written so many words now. It feels like the details are too much. No matter you join a country or an organization, you must at least keep developing. Since you are traveling through time, you want to gain power to protect yourself and develop your abilities. You have written the world as too peaceful. So how did a peaceful world develop so many high-end military technologies? I hope you can see my comments and plan well.

Chapter 126-137, I only have one feeling: Bah, disgusting

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I have just traveled through time and have superpowers. Shouldn't I be careful? If I see a cultist, I will use my life to act recklessly. The protagonist is really not smart.

Get away, it's too poisonous! ! The protagonist has just traveled through time and saw a man sleeping in the lounge of the police station. After that, he acted like a fool and tried to commit suicide. The problem was that the cult picture kept crawling on the table and had no interaction with the protagonist. Then the protagonist acted like a fool and committed suicide, provoking various provocations and leading the evil god behind the cult to kill the protagonist. Really poisonous. The feeling is just inexplicable.

The author feels like the weight loss expert Lord of the Stars to me. There are a lot of settings, and the plot development is extremely slow. It takes a year to write the plot and the result is not even a month old, and the results feel like eunuchs.

Change your name to the Lord of Constipation, he is always pooping

I booked it all, but I regret it a bit. The author is slow to update, the chapters are full of nonsense, and he always wastes more words on useless places. After reading it, I feel that the subscription money is wasted. For example, the banquet attended by the protagonist and Fang Zimo was like this. The protagonist was inexplicably thinking about this and that, saying a few words to people, and a few chapters passed. It was of no use. It was not worth knowing what to express. It was written purely to make up the word count. And when dealing with the Dark Tower, the protagonist is not very capable but has a big temper. I regret subscribing!

It looks good, the ability system is very novel, and it's fully supported. I hope the author doesn't write it to pieces.

When I saw the Poison Count chasing the protagonist in Chapter 101, I seemed to understand why so few people read this book. The protagonist was too soft-hearted. Others suggested that the protagonist, an ordinary person, could be used as a shield for a while. I can understand that the protagonist couldn't bear it, but then the protagonist gave up the little advantage he had created due to his special ability for a waiter who accidentally broke in, and put himself in danger. This is unbearable. This is an ordinary person you don't know. You can barely understand it if he is your parents or relatives. Is a stranger worth your life to save? Poison, do you think other people's lives are more precious than your own? Or do you think this is the protagonist and you can do whatever you want? I'm sure that few people will read what you wrote. Not many people like to read this kind of loving protagonist. In fact, I quite like this type of book, hey! I don't want to give up, so if I hold on a little longer, if the main character is still the same in the future, then I'll give up!

It was so boring. I wrote 40 chapters before going to school the next morning. I didn't know what I was doing. I had already finished several fights. This is really so watery. I wish I could tell you how it feels after taking a sip. I can tell you whether it is dry or thin, how long it has been and what color it is 😅

When I first watched it, I was totally confused. The main character didn't know anything and still committed suicide to attract monsters. I had an inexplicable feeling that he deserved to die...

The writing is eye-catching at first, but what's next? The plot is slow, and the description of the characters is really poor. I play the game every day, and then it drags on, which makes people confused. The world view has not been written well in the first sixty or so chapters, come on.

It has been proven to be true in the last few epochs. There are magic gods and everything, and they have been compiled into textbooks. How come the fourth epoch is still hiding the extraordinary, even if it is a little magic? If it is hidden like this, then the knowledge of the previous epochs must also be hidden as the knowledge of the extraordinary world. Otherwise, we know that the fighting spirit and magic are flying all over the sky in the previous epoch. In this era, we can only have mecha cannon gene medicine. To be honest, who can believe it?

The subject matter is good. It's just that the plot arranged by the author is a bit blunt. For example, Pig's Foot just gained the ability and casually tested the followers of the evil god and used his own mental power. As a time traveler, he has never read the novel? Why do all the passers-by die without any idea? Or did he know that he was a pig's trotter who sought death and some author lowered the evil god's IQ and strength?

It's long-winded, the protagonist is a bitch, and the characters have no brains. This book can be skipped without a brain, but if you read it with a brain, you will be angry, irritating, and angry.

After reading Chapter 18, I am completely confused. The author is really stubborn when he writes a novel like this without any basic fans.

I don't want to complain about the pace of the plot, the setting, or the writing style. . . The problem is that the author's plot advancement is too blunt, almost speechless. The first two times he spied on others for no reason, was discovered, and then got beaten up. . . Later, in order to advance the plot, I said that emotional abilities cannot be discovered by others. How did you discover them before? What are emotions? What's the logic of not reporting it for the sake of not reporting it? Where is your logic? I also know that there is something wrong with the logic and then I explain it so much that I am really speechless. . . It's not that the plot can't advance in this direction, but you have to connect it well, and at least make the logic in the book consistent. If you are an official organization, you should write like an official organization. Write your identity according to your identity. Whatever plot you want to write, you should make the plot logically consistent with your characters. Do not advance the plot in order to advance the plot and cause the characters you write to make the audience feel confused. Advance the plot in order to advance the plot.

Yes, I like the development of both the main line and the sub-line.

It's too ink-filled. It takes about a hundred chapters to introduce Fei Fei, and there are a lot of other things written in front of it. Building the entire world is long and complicated. Personally, I think it would be better to slowly throw out the settings as the main line progresses.

The title of the book was changed to Lord of the Secret Water. Counting dozens of them, they are still in the water.

There are too many pages that have nothing to do with the protagonist, and it's too cumbersome. Farewell