The War of Slaughter

Thank you all, really thank you all, you have opened a way for me to make progress. Sure enough, you can grow best when others point out your shortcomings and mistakes. After reading everyone's criticisms of my new book, I suddenly realized that there are so many shortcomings. It turns out that I have always been immersed in my own world, and I am arrogant, so I am complacent about my articles! There are too many shortcomings. I have been writing books for more than a year. From a novice who knew nothing and didn't understand anything, I slowly made progress. Today, I just woke up at this moment. If you just build things behind closed doors, you will never be able to build aircraft or cannons. Thank you all, and thank you for the Qidian platform. Our readers in Qidian are really very insightful and culturally literate! I love you, thank you! Thanks again!

Due to changes in the editing team of Qidian, the work has not been signed until now. Please rest assured that under the perfect outline, this book will be completed perfectly. I also ask for your support. I am not asking for money, but I hope that readers will be willing to read my story!

Let me talk about my thoughts after reading. The book uses a lot of narrative descriptions, and there are very few psychological descriptions and facial expressions, giving people the feeling of a running account.

The data is really miserable... I looked at the insider out of curiosity. I don't know if this is a novel or a fairy tale world? ? One of the prince's personal servants was described as being very wretched and timid, the guard knight was described as being mean-mouthed and arrogant, and the other, who was not a guard or a knight, was described as incompetent, cowardly, and talkative. . . I really don't know how much the king doesn't like to see this prince when he arranges such three top talents to take care of and protect him. For the forced arrangement of the plot, I am speechless. . The so-called assassins are just like fools. I don't know what kind of enemy would arrange such a thing... After the guard knight rushed up from behind and posed, he jumped out and introduced himself "I am an assassin." . But he put the prince he really wanted to kill next to him, and no one went to kill him. . . ... I don't know what to say, I feel so embarrassed. . .

Being able to write so much shows that you want to keep writing and be liked by others. However, you have to understand that not only is the author famous and has a large number of loyal readers, but the opening chapter of the novel must be attractive. Regardless of the setting or anything else, there must be something attractive, otherwise it will be difficult to get ahead. And your first few chapters don't feel engaging enough. As a type of Western fantasy, it is not necessary to use a translation accent to express the flavor of Western fantasy. To be honest, the translation accent can be used for ridicule, but it cannot be used throughout the whole story. Here you can refer to Lord of Mysteries. Since I haven't read a few, I can't tell you the shortcomings of your novel, but I can give you some suggestions. After all, I have read a lot of novels. Restrain your desire for expression. Maybe you have a lot of good things to write, but you must know what to write and when, and don't try to write it all at once. Pay attention to logical rigor and avoid big loopholes. There must be a main line, and don't make people feel that the protagonist has no purpose and is blind. Characterization is difficult. The simple method is to label, that is, to create a character. You can add one or two female characters. The character must be liked by readers. It must have characteristics and the positioning should not be repeated. Don't blindly harem (if you have a harem), let each character have the meaning of his existence to prevent the vase from disappearing. If there is a female protagonist, you can trade in stocks, but don't waver all the time, which consumes the reader's patience. The protagonist's character cannot have major flaws, and don't be like the protagonist of a novel. Pay attention to the description of the characters' movements and expressions, but it is not suitable to do too many at once. The same actions and expressions should not be repeated too much. It is best not to have the shrugs and wry smiles that are currently annoying to readers. In fact, I don't recommend that new authors write non-time-travel protagonists (unless they are in a modern setting), because it will easily lack a sense of substitution. Secondly, please ask for more recommendation votes. There are no clicks now. Many people like to look at the recommendation votes to judge whether to open and watch it.

Um, is this a military novel? Why does it feel like a Western fantasy?

It's messy. It gave me a headache at the beginning. Yes, the pace of the online article is fast, but you don't have any foreshadowing. Are you too direct? It's very confusing for readers to read. It's so difficult to remember the names of each person. There are a lot of people who say they can't remember it at all. The character portrayal is not vivid and feels dry. Frankly speaking, there is still a lot of room for improvement. Keep working hard!

I won't go into what the book friends said in the reviews of this book. Winter? White Walkers? It seems to be a foreign TV series, right? The description of the characters and their surroundings should be as natural as possible, not too stiff, it gives me a headache... As for the rest, book friends have said, try to be as natural as possible. I feel like you are a little nervous when writing? Maybe it's my misunderstanding. Being too serious will make people feel rigid, well, you know.

I don't like these Western fantasy things. Nowadays, there are no masters writing Western fantasy. It's annoying to look at a bunch of messy names.

The writing style is concise and not attractive enough. I can't tell what the shortcomings are! Come on! Give you a vote! I'll order a chapter for you then!