The Calamity of Origin

I'll just share my personal observations based on my experience; whether the author makes changes and how they are ultimately up to them. After all, anyone who's been in this industry for a while knows that readers giving pointers to authors is a major taboo. After reading the first chapter The writing skills are good, but the plot is still disorganized.

Hello everyone, this is the author, thank you for your reviews. Writing about an indigenous protagonist is not easy, but I will try my best to write each chapter well, striving to create a "three-no" work: no cheesy plots, no clichés, and no simplistic plot points. Looking forward to your support. *Bows deeply*

The pacing is too slow, and the protagonist, an indigenous character with little autonomy, isn't to my liking. Actually, the indigenous background isn't the main issue; the most important thing is that the protagonist is autonomous, opinionated, purposeful, and has aspirations. I hate stories that just follow the crowd and unfold the plot without any direction; it offers no guarantee for the reader, and even a small flaw can ruin the entire reading experience.

Because of differences in values—referring to the so-called romantic subplot between the protagonist and Lin Xiaoman in the book—I abandoned it. Actually, this book has been on my bookshelf for a long time. I put it down after reaching the part about Old John's life-or-death battle, but I found it again while cleaning out my bookshelf these past few days.

Someone has to sit on the sofa. This space will be reserved for future advertising rentals.

After reading the description, the map seems a bit too large... It's likely to collapse easily in the later stages.

Real fan +1 The book is great, keep it up!

The first few chapters portrayed the protagonist as a seasoned veteran, but he almost got tricked and killed right afterward. Are Reapers really that worthless?

After reading the first few chapters, I had no desire to continue. The protagonist was clever and cunning at the beginning, which only highlighted his foolishness and lack of self-awareness later on; he even went back after escaping. The author made the characters' intelligence suddenly drop, and I couldn't continue reading.

The beginning was a bit messy, and the world-building wasn't well established (it wasn't until the time of West Star City that the basic structure was completed). The theme is not clear, and the power system and the protagonist's development direction are not explained in the beginning (which easily gives people a cliché feeling). But Qidian (a Chinese online literature platform) never buries novels that only have a bad beginning; you must have problems later on.