Harry Potter Holy Grail System

After reading the first four chapters, I feel very subtle. I am very familiar with the setting of HP and heroic spirits. I don't know how other people feel. Personally, I find it very boring and boring. Let's just talk about the fourth chapter, a competition. It seems to have written a lot, but in fact it contains too many settings and explanations. After reading these pictures, I feel that there are a lot of words, and I don't feel that they are very watery, but I just feel that nothing has been said and nothing has been explained clearly. I only know that there is a system that has some connection with Sherlock Holmes, and the rest is...

Brother dei, I started reading from the beginning. The beginning of your book is quite good, but the last few articles have made the world view too big and easy to collapse. It is best to be simple when writing HP...

After reading the content before it was put on the shelves, I retract my previous comments and am a little disappointed! If you don't read this book specifically for Harry Potter, you will find it interesting and quite readable. However, the title of this book should not actually be called Harry Potter: The Holy Grail System at all. It should be changed to The Knight and the Journey of the Holy Grail System in the Film and Television World. The main line deviates greatly and has nothing to do with Harry Potter. It just borrows the setting of the HP Wizarding World and simply makes a hodgepodge on the timeline. In the beginning, it expands and integrates Detective Sherlock Holmes, Crawford, Van Helsing, and the sea. I started the plot of The Pianist, got involved with Garfield, had a cat car similar to My Neighbor Totoro, the Sun Staircase Virus, and the Dark Lionheart Society (later turned into the Umbrella Corporation), and then started the Hogwarts plot, but did not give up on getting involved. The magical version of the artificial intelligence Jarvis immediately appeared, and it felt like Sherlock Holmes and Stark had merged... As soon as the semester was over, the Knight's Breathing Method appeared. , The protagonist also has fighting spirit, blood clan sacred weapon, water element incarnation, especially a descendant of a white dragon from the Wings of Frost next door who accidentally entered (he worked hard to travel through the plane to feed the tiger eagle - gave the protagonist's pet a dragon egg dinner + soul changer spirit), and then the pig's feet went to Nepal and the gold-touching captain Hu Liuyi and the others to explore alien spaceships, and saw the plot of China's dark cooking world, and Lin Jiu... From a human perspective, this book also has some novel points, such as the setting of the protagonist, Goldfinger (excluding the Holy Grail system that comes back to life), the strange double wands, the setting of Gryffindor's arsenal, the expansion of King's Cross Station, the story of Nagini's mother and daughter (excluding the story that her mother was born in Chenjiagou), the "Humengos" curse that is opposite to the Animagus... Etc. It is still very attractive and very interesting. So in terms of the overall feeling after reading it, although the author is very knowledgeable and has unique insights, the reader is very tired. The plot is always a hammer here and there, and in many chapters, he always writes some large-scale settings and explanations, which deviate from the theme. It makes people feel that they are not reading a novel, but a paper, especially when they are playful and playful. For Harry fans, they appreciate and admire the breadth and depth of the HP world. However, if it is simply filled with the integration of other film and television works, the main line is confusing, and elements from other fandoms are added into the same book like crazy jokes. It is trivial and complicated, and it is meaningless, because the mysterious curiosity and yearning of Harry Potter or Hogwarts have been lost, and there is no desire and sincerity to make people read, then it will be boring and boring. I am an ordinary HP fan, so my opinions are mostly from the perspective of the Harry Potter world. My views may be a bit narrow. Please forgive me for not being rigorous enough. I wish the author will write better and better!

Finally a new book is out, keep up the good work. Otherwise, I would have sent the blade! 🔪

To be honest, after becoming a semi-heroic spirit... You can live for a long, long, long time, and you can still stay young... So... I have a bold idea.

This book has nothing to do with wizards. It just borrows Harry Potter's worldview to expand and connect other worlds.

I probably drew the green eyes of the basilisk. Personally, I still think the large area of ​​green is super weird. Am I a fake snake farm? Qwq

The setting is good, but there are too many things involved, but the author can't control it, so there is no interesting chemical reaction. It looks very dry and boring.

Could the author break it into more paragraphs? It's so painful to read. . . .

Can the segments be divided better? Looks so tired 😔

I think the part about China is really interesting. Why not consider Mr. Rong as the protagonist? Will the author consider this next book?

It feels very messy and I can't stand it at all.

In fact, Holy Grail is not very good. Many books are not very good after adding Holy Grail elements.

I would like to ask how a street writer like Ben Gongjue can get great love from editors 😢. The data is a bit miserable

Happy New Year, come on! Remember to pay attention to safety*^_^*

The passage from Isaiah excerpted by the author actually has nothing to do with Lucifer. This passage was originally about the arrogant King of Babylon, not a fallen angel? Moreover, there is no angel named Lucifer in the Bible. In Canaanite mythology, there is a star god named Lucifer. This man envied the Sun God's authority and light, and launched a challenge. In the end, he failed and was beaten from the sky. As for the red dragon described in the Book of Revelation with seven heads and ten horns and a tail that holds 1/3 of the falling stars in the sky, it should refer to Satan. What's wrong with Lucifer?

When I first read it, I saw that there was a lot of English just to make up the word count?

How to say it! There is a lot of useful information, but there are too many unfamiliar things, which seems to be troublesome. Thank you very much.

So the protagonist is a barbarian and not a mage?

The earth is a hundred times larger, a hodgepodge of more than N worlds, and the author's uncontrollable explanations make people feel very confused, but this is also the author's greatest characteristic. However, as far as I am concerned, it is quite enjoyable to read without most of the explanations. I strongly urge the author to put unnecessary explanations at the front of the work.

Please play less English in the future. Qidian Audio Books cannot recognize English. It's very uncomfortable to only read words one by one.

This book should be written by the author out of joy

I feel a little dizzy after watching this, and I can't understand the events clearly.

So the question is, how to increase contribution points?