One Piece: Capone Bege

I haven't read much yet, and to be honest, the beginning is a bit toxic, the characters are half-hearted, the effort is in the wrong direction, and the writing style needs to be improved. _(:з∠)_ 1. Your control over practice is very weak. If you cannot quantify the training volume of the protagonist, then just write, swing the knife until you can no longer lift your hand, or swing the knife until you pass out. Tens of thousands and tens of thousands come with just one mouth. This is a big problem, and details determine success or failure. 2. Oda has proven that the role of the Fortified Fruit lies in the legion, but there is no way to reach the top by simply taking the legion route. This is the real test of this fanfic, how do you improve it? The most effective thing is to improve the two-color domineering, especially the armed color. Perhaps, you can use the Fortified Fruit as a space or a fruit, then put a Pluto in your body and pull it out for a shot when you want to use it? Perhaps you have become a big boss. The reserves and quality of your weapons are greater and stronger than those of ordinary people. At the limit, you can match the defensive power of the Yonko level, and have absolute suppression against ordinary big pirates? Maybe the big boss can be even bigger, comparable to giants, bigger, tougher, stronger and more armed? Maybe you can magically modify your body, and Castle Man evolves into a Transformer. The cannon no longer sticks out of the body, but part of the body is the cannon? Use your imagination, Devil Fruit is the key point, let your imagination run wild. Instead of transforming from a person with Devil Fruit advantages to a swordsman. This is really boring, and it's easy to write down. There are so many people who faint with swords. Why can you become a swordsman? 3. It's still the issue of transformation. Why do you just leave your abilities undeveloped? Big Mom, Blackbeard, Whitebeard, Kaido, the Three Generals, Sengoku, and the Old Golden Lion. These people all relied on their domineering and devil fruit abilities to reach the top. In addition to swordsmanship, the red-haired man also has an overlord color that can cause substantial damage. Relying on swordsmanship alone, you can become a lone ranger like Hawkeye at most, but you can't become a great pirate at all. Most people who stand at the top have the power of walking natural disasters. Why don't you think more about how to make the Fortress Fruit have the power of natural disasters?

Is the Fortress Fruit so weak? I feel like I can't withstand bullets when I write this? In the Nima anime, Becky was beaten to death by Big Mom. Is it okay to write it so weakly? Is the Fortress Fruit that weak?

I haven't read it yet, so let me tell you my personal views on Fortified Fruit. Personally, I think the Fortified Fruit is a very perverted fruit, but it's a pity that it was taken away by a person who only knows that there is power in numbers. Development direction one: shrink. Since you can shrink people and put them inside your body, why can't you put your shrinking ability outside your body, so that all long-range damage is almost ineffective. If Lieru was hit by artillery fire and shrunk to the size of a pebble, it wouldn't do much damage if it exploded. Facing the Fire Fist, the Great Flame Ring turned into a fireball and scattered it with one slap. The effect is to shrink the person who receives the attack. After awakening, the person who is touched can be shrunk. (The childish fruit can turn into a toy as long as it is touched. Why can't I make the enemy smaller?) What you have to face is a city crushing you. Direction 2: Fortified City. The physical body is strengthened, and abilities can be stored inside the body. When injured in war, the ability can be used to repair the fortress and strengthen the defense effect of the weapon. Defensive flow, trying to get closer to Kaido. If you want to break through a well-defended city, your military strength must be several times that of mine. How much stronger is your strength than mine?

There are no rubbish Devil Fruits, there are only rubbish Devil Fruit users. This sentence is here to deceive fools. Are an Animal Phantasmal Dragon Fruit and an Alpaca Fruit comparable?

The author personally ruined a selling point of the novel. Becky is a gangster himself. He can develop gangster power and gradually annex the dark world, monopolize the dark market, become the uncrowned emperor, accumulate strength and gradually conquer the world, but you let him become a pirate. Pirates fan, or else Either become a pirate, or become a navy, or join the revolutionary army. Unless the writing is particularly good, otherwise I will be too tired to read it. Finally, Becky has a different path and a different selling point, but the author did not realize it and returned to the original work to become a pirate.

Moonlight Moria was still very domineering when she was young

When I saw the fight against the Dread Pirates later, the protagonist and his gang collectively lost their wits. I don't know what the author was thinking. Everyone knew to guard against the navy picking up the leak, but the protagonist acted recklessly. There was also the betrayal of the woman. Damn, there was no emotional drama at all. The woman died. The protagonist had to live or die. Shen Nong was poisoned to death. Goodbye.

From the beginning to the end, he said the harshest words every time and was beaten by the navy the most. He ran away and waited for the rescue. Also, the Jiancheng fruit developed a thick skin. It was not very thick in the early stage and could not be broken at any time. The space control was not as strong as Jiancheng. When I saw the result of Jiancheng coming, I was speechless when I teleported with a knife and fought with people

Just this fruit ability is not helpful to the protagonist at all, and it has only a few weaknesses! How is the protagonist going to become stronger, just because he has been unable to reach the level of cutting iron for more than ten years? Or are we going to forcefully write it in the later stage to make the protagonist become a super swordsman against the will of heaven? Forget it, the power system collapsed at the beginning, and there was no sense of attraction at all. I guess few people will watch it later! It's okay for a newbie, but it's not attractive at all compared to many Pirates fans! It's not easy for an author to write so much.

There is a way to kill Big Mom. When he was suffering from bulimia, he was given a Devil Fruit. If you eat two Devil Fruits, they will explode. This is an iron rule. The world of pirates will definitely die.