The Heavens Descend

After reading about 60 chapters, I wanted to leave quietly, but I felt it was a pity. Let's put it briefly. First of all, let me state that if the author writes invincible articles, then you don't need to read the following, just treat it as if I didn't say anything. Actually, the story is a good one, the author's writing skills are good, and the writing style is just okay. Overall, this book can achieve very good results even if it is not popular. But why does a good hand end up with only 2 million+ words and 200 monthly votes? In fact, so many people criticized the plot and even made vicious personal attacks on you, the author. I feel that most of them are irrational manifestations of hatred of iron and disappointment after high expectations. I can feel the author's helplessness. Maybe you don't even know what the problem is, why so many people don't understand the addition of these characters, and why readers lose their minds and attack you personally. There are two main points: The first is that the plot is written with no brainer (I am not scolding you). When I saw Fatty, the neighbor, appearing in the first scene, I thought it was just a backdrop, and then Fatty suddenly upgraded from a backdrop to a supporting role with lines... Then in the second round, in order to save three people, he actually took off the ring to attract a vampire in "Blood God" mode... At that moment, I felt that the book was going to be over, because I didn't understand what kind of spirit could allow a second-round show to be so self-sacrificial in a real "game" of life and death, not to mention that one was just a neighbor, and the remaining two were just meeting each other for the first time. Imagine that your parents and relatives suddenly don't know you exist, and the world doesn't even know you exist. Yes, they won't be sad, but you don't care at all? At that moment, I didn't even think that the protagonist was the Virgin, a hero who "acted bravely for justice". But an extremely cold-blooded hypocritical monster... Looking back, the more I feel that the protagonist can only live by his "halo": he can be regarded as a partner after knowing him for 8 hours (that's really not how the word partner is used). This is gullible. When buying a house, the man named Lan obviously deceived the protagonist into thinking he was a fool. This is not a question of whether there will be losses, this is a question of the most basic respect. In fact, it was only thanks to the "Halo" that the protagonist was not killed by zombies, and then the protagonist happily accepted it... Accepted it... I dare say that this scene is very poisonous to many people. There are not many examples in the following chapters, but they already reflect the author's lack of rigor in the plot, as if he can't speak clearly enough. The second point is that the setting is seriously deviated or even contradictory. Lao Yinbi is always a lone wolf, but Lao Yinbi in your novel always has teammates and partners. Isn't this trying to kill himself? The word "Lao Yinbi" comes from "PlayerUnknown's Battlegrounds", and Lao Yinbi definitely doesn't play in a team. I don't need to explain why, right? If you really can't expand the plot from the perspective of a lone wolf, you can really give up the setting of Lao Yin Bi. I believe that 99% of readers read the book because of the nature of the lone wolf (Lao Yin Bi), and then what they saw was a lone wolf with a partner. What do you think about it? As a result, the protagonist's character has lost its accurate positioning, which makes people uncomfortable to watch. I took a look at the post about "The Fat Man from the Wu Family" and wondered if it was the author's trumpet. The words "How can the plot be unfolded by one person throughout the whole process?" Really made me speechless. There is no plot in "Resident Evil", "I Am Legend", etc.? How many AAA masterpiece games have the best storylines and are they online games? Why are American blockbusters so attractive? It's not because of personal hero ideas! As long as you level up and hunt for treasures every day, the results of this book will not be too bad. On the contrary, the setting was not stable, and the supporting characters were forced to play, resulting in scenes that were not prioritized. This was the main reason for the film's decline. In fact, what readers want to see is just how awesome the protagonist is, not how the protagonist leads others to be awesome. Live alone, be obscene, be cautious, slander your enemies, or even slander your own kind. As long as you don't 404, many people will pay. A great author can become a god just because he wrote a book about urban scumbags (to avoid advertising, I won't mention his name), what are you afraid of? Finally, there is really no need to have so many female supporting characters. Whether they are blessed with good luck or are plagued by misfortune, they all have no regard for appearance. On the contrary, excessive emphasis on appearance will only reduce the ingredients. Didn't you see that everyone who got scolded after "Fortress" plummeted at the box office? It is impossible to change anything in this book. It is already 2 million+. I hope the author can study the setting issues carefully in his next work. To be honest, this work is a failure, but I have never seen an author who failed in the second round (except for those who failed at the beginning), especially when a good start suddenly failed without any signs, which is really a pity. If the author opens a new book, I can try again. End: Come on, author! I hope you can succeed sooner, write better novels, and become a god soon.

No wonder the book with almost three million words doesn't have many monthly votes or recommendations. I rarely criticize a book directly, and this chapter can prove it. But this book is really disgusting to me. It sets the tone of lyb's lone wolf. It's just a brainless fat guy who forces his teammates to hold him back. There are disgusting things like being forced to take a bank card by a woman. He has more than 10,000 points and is chased and beaten by four or five thousand points. A fighting skill of more than two thousand points is not as good as a sword of one thousand points. It would be fine if it were originally set like this. The key is that you also highlight the rarity of one point. If others start a round, it will only be a few hundred points. Your ten-fold strengthening progress at the beginning is still so impressive. It gives the impression that a wretched man is holding a treasure without knowing it, making readers anxious. This article of yours is so serious that it will make everyone just like immature children. At worst, it will be read as a novice article. But in Shuang's novel, I don't know where Shuang is, and the protagonist is frustrated and stupid throughout. The reader feels anxious and feels uncomfortable. It doesn't have the logic of a suspenseful novel, and it doesn't have the excitement of a refreshing novel. The whole process is extremely frustrating and disgusting. It feels like a reading experience like watching a wretched guy picking his nose. The reason why I wrote this comment is because I feel aggrieved, so I wanted to vent my emotions, not for anything else. Reading exciting articles is to vent my emotions. If you make me unhappy, I can only vent my emotions in book reviews. Of course, if you have the nerve to say that your plot is amazing and not a piece of writing, then I have nothing to say.

Come on The theme of this book is Battle Royale Logically speaking, the main god space should be very cruel. The protagonist is invisible again. That means you shouldn't have teammates. Since the author wrote about teammates and routine fat guys. Then you have to write it well. Of course, I only saw the fat man part and gave up. I don't know what the future development will be. I'm just talking about the previous one. The teammates written by the author have almost no effect. On the contrary, they are stealing heads. Certainly. This is viewed from a self-interested perspective. I don't have much regret for my teammates. But let's talk about it. The protagonist is almost invincible in the world of vampires. Garlic does. Silverware is available. And absolute invisibility. You can kill all the vampires by yourself to maximize your points. Where are your teammates? Can't kill vampires. The protagonist gives garlic. Fat man aspect. The protagonist has become absolutely invisible and is powerful enough to dominate. You told me you wanted a cover? The idea is to take the benefits yourself and force the fat man to pretend. Let the fat man attract the fire. But you tell me. First. You said you wanted teammates. So. . Do you have trust in your teammates? Do your "teammates" know your strength? That's why I say it's a false Virgin. And Fatty, this is completely a routine. A completely avoidable routine. Knowing that the game is about to begin. And asked him to come closer. Let him be transported into the game together. Let's not talk about whether the door is so easy to be broken open. Let's talk about how the protagonist feels after being strengthened. Brother, do archers have no sense at all? Totally avoidable. Don't do this. Sometimes it's okay to have a lively supporting character. There is no problem in rescuing people. There is no problem in helping people. But have you ever thought about it. What type is this book? Are you able to control your writing skills? It is said in the article that you get points for rescuing people. I had no problem seeing the first world. But the vampire world. . Let's not talk about whether those "teammates" are saving people or not. Even if it counts as saving people. Wouldn't it be nice to kill a few more vampires that they killed? Some people told me that I called this book a false Virgin. Why not call Mystery the Holy Mother. First, this is not a scolding. This is just a positioning. Second, everyone knows whether the mystery is the Holy Mother or not. Third, the most important point. Writing problem. I can see that the author really wants to work hard to create a good fat man. But it's a pity. Can't control it. It seems like a routine character. The previous book reviews were a lot of criticism. This time. Come on.

As soon as I saw the beginning of the second round, I gave up decisively. The reasons are as follows, 1. One of the characteristics of Infinite Literature is that you can escape death under the restrictions of the rules. Even if it is a cheating Infinite stream, you said that the protagonist is a randomly selected participant? At the beginning, a light enveloped the entire mall, and then the protagonist entered. How did the fat man behind him get in? Are you kidding me? Can the rules designed by the author be broken just to suit his own needs? Then you just wrote it as The Journey to Another World without ever finishing it? If you just type randomly, it will be faster if I just subscribe and get paid? 2. Lao Y Bi, the author may have misunderstood Lao Y Bi. Do you know what Lao Y Bi is? If you don't know, you can take a look at Samsara Paradise. If you still can't see clearly, you can play chicken or something. Have you ever seen Lao Ybi have teammates? Someone who has teammates is called Lao Yibi? How bad is your thinking that allows you to outshine your teammate to more than two million words? Without your teammates, you can't continue writing? This may be because the author does not know how to describe the psychology of a lone wolf, so we can also understand the question and answer in the first point above. Also, even stealing a few grenades in the first round was revealed to be the Lord of the Rings, but in the second round, just drag the ring to attract attacks? Then why are you hiding it? You just start with 5300 points as a great master who can control everything, so the protagonist obviously has an IQ, but the author has no control over the brain and forced the protagonist to be a fool? 3 The invisibility of the Lord of the Rings is invisibility, not divine power. Even if it can block smells, sounds, and eyes? You can see the essence of things with just your eyes. If you don't know your strength, you can follow the Avatar to his home without being discovered. Are you not invisible? Are you directly in a different space? The core settings are like this. I don't know how popular people are who can read more than two million words. Wouldn't you feel aggrieved? The main text of the invincible abuse of the unlimited stream The passerby team style of the open stream setting Very poisonous.

It's getting more and more disgusting. If you want to be an old cunt, you shouldn't interact with so many people. I write like a fool. If you don't have the strength, you have to pretend. If you have the strength, you still have to pretend. I really believe it.

This book is a routine: Go in, someone wants to mess with the protagonist, and the protagonist walks away halfway. Teammate zz just ignores him. He becomes invisible, kills monsters, and then kills the people who target the protagonist. At the same time, we fight the boss together. We win and provoke some people. The teammates reply to the message and are not suspicious at all. Repeat, repeat, repeat

I was a little touched after reading Chapter 49, and I can't help but feel unhappy about it. First of all, it doesn't matter whether the protagonist is alone or in a team. This book is quite humorous and is the highlight. When I saw some of your plot treatment in Chapter 49, I suddenly found it boring, so I brought it up for you to take a look at, in my humble opinion. The supporting character Zhang Weida lived for 49 chapters and died. This man, for his own benefit, wavered around, was a wallflower, and did not care about the life and death of others. He sold information to the RB organization in an attempt to protect himself from a large organization. I originally hated a character, but after reading this chapter, you asked the protagonist to abandon his development and torture him little by little. In a desperate situation, he even smeared himself with the flesh and blood of zombies to cover up the smell, and resisted the protagonist with difficulty and stubbornness. Thinking back, this supporting character seemed to do these things just for five words, to survive and become stronger. Although the method is dirty, it cannot be said that it is incomprehensible and cannot be tolerated by nature. After all, in the main god's space, choosing this path is always in danger. Then I think about what the protagonist has done, and suddenly I feel that you have spent nearly 50 chapters creating a useless protagonist who talks nonsense. In the face of crises and opportunities, there is no outstanding performance. Compared with Lao Yin, Gou Sheng is not outstanding. It can only be said that he has such equipment and normal operation under such conditions. In the Lord God Space, which is always in crisis, it would be unwise not to seize every minute and every opportunity to make oneself stronger. Having said the question, my suggestion is that you take the time to write a hundred words at the end of the chapter, starting from Zhang Weida's performance, and let the protagonist reflect on himself. An ant is still living an ignoble existence, relying only on luck and nonsense. The protagonist can be replaced by a pig, and it will not affect the perception. This will not affect the follow-up, on the contrary, it can save some face for the protagonist. Of course, if the protagonist continues to be like this in the future, it may be counterproductive. That's it. I hope the author will change it after hearing it. Of course, I will laugh at it if I sneer. After all, everyone has different ideas, but I firmly believe that people like Zhang Weida, whether real or fictional, will and should be better than the protagonist and live better than the protagonist.

The stupid protagonist in the first ten chapters really poisoned me, and I didn't plan to read it any more. The golden three chapters were average, but they became more and more poisonous in the following chapters. I was afraid that I would be poisoned to death if I read it again. Some people will say that if you don't read it, why bother spraying it? I just want to help the book friends who come later avoid poison. The protagonist is clearly ruthless in terms of behavior, but the psychological description is that of a virgin, which is too awkward.

This book is very poisonous. This is a saying that many people say, but where is the poison? Let me tell everyone (including newcomers) I have begun to dislike this book (if it were not for the book shortage) To be honest, the woman named Lan would be better off just writing it. Of course, this is the author's book, and I am not qualified to teach him to write a book So I am telling Everbright readers directly that this book has a weak plot and low IQ, especially the secondary characters who appear. They are very stupid, very stupid, and so stupid that they bubble up If there is really a book shortage, I have a book list here. You can go to my homepage and read other books. This book is not suitable for reading in the book shortage. After reading it, I have no other thoughts except to criticize it. Really

Chapter 6: Persuading people to quit, where is the bottom line at the reincarnation scene? On the one hand, he prevents others from taking revenge and will die together, but on the other hand, he says that they have no bottom line. Doesn't he know that it is his own obstruction that allows the evildoers to continue to do evil? When you come up, you turn on the stealth device. When can you hide your footsteps and smell? I think you are invisible➕invincible.

It's so poisonous that I couldn't stand it until I reached chapter 98. I just found out how to get bloodline and then I immediately gained enough points. It's so brainless. Zombies rely on their sense of smell. If you become invisible and the smell disappears, why don't you go to the sky? Well, that's even more invincible. I'm talking about an organization with such a big enemy. Once I get to the protagonist, I have to reduce my intelligence. I want to ask, how can the enemy survive if the IQ is so low? It was originally a good subject, but it was ruined by writing an invincible article.

I don't want to read it anymore after reading chapter 15. The first part was pretty good, but suddenly a fat guy was forced into it. It felt quite disgusting. Forget it, I won't read it anymore.

The beginning was very innovative, but unfortunately I didn't keep it. I felt that the protagonist would look much better if he were a real old Yinbi, a single-player player, and a lone ranger. In the end, first he was an inexplicable fat man, and then some kind of dragon group... Oh, to be honest, I feel that the Lord of the Rings is so powerful that I don't need teammates anymore. I want to get something that hides my identity, drill it into the real world, and then enter the game Lord of the Rings area where human monsters can't be found. What are you afraid of?

The first Lord of the Rings. To be honest, I suspect that you hired a ghostwriter for the plot of The Lord of the Rings. It is fundamentally different from the second world. Fat Man Character: He is not a neighbor who is not even an ordinary friend. He is not familiar with each other. He only knows each other's names. He has a low IQ and cannot tell whether the WeChat ID is a WeChat business. The protagonist has to pay for the things he buys when he meets. Forced Virgin: The fat man and Mao Mei are in a coma. The fat man is going to die. If his position is exposed, he must be saved. If the vampire's R is four more seconds, the protagonist GG will change from the cautious lyb at the beginning of the chapter to an old fool.

The author has always wanted to write the protagonist as lyb, but the author doesn't understand what lyb is at all.

I don't know why, but I didn't want to look at the pig's feet when I saw that for some inexplicable reason, they brought a fat man that they weren't very familiar with. . Drunk

Poisonous weeds, and the kind that are extremely poisonous and disgusting.

The main attraction is the battle royale, but there are a lot of poisonous spots. There are all kinds of mentally retarded plots to persuade people to quit, so forgive me for only sticking to about forty chapters!

I have read Chapter 105 of this book. All the supporting characters are mentally retarded, and those organizations are even more mentally retarded. Basically: "You and the people in our organization have a battle royale. If you live and he doesn't, you will kill him. I will send people to kill you. Do you still dare to resist? Do you want to die? I can't beat you." But you can't kill me. If you kill me, you will be in trouble with the organization behind me." At this time, Dragon Soul came out: "You can't kill him. Although he wanted to kill you and your whole family, he didn't kill him. If you kill him, you won't give me face. If you don't give me face, I will teach you a lesson." ***This battle royale game is just for fun. You can also find out who the last survivor of the game is. The various organizations don't just kill whoever they want. Seeing that the three organizations that the protagonist is currently fighting against are all because you participated in the battle royale with people from a certain group of us, if you survive and he doesn't, then you die. Then you are so cynical, you don't even want evidence, and you will be killed if you are told to. The Survivor Alliance doesn't even dare to give a shit, so why are you writing about him? And that Dragon Soul, the protagonist saved your Ryuko, and didn't even say thank you. Later, he said that the protagonist didn't give you face and wanted to teach the protagonist a lesson, and she was still Ryuko's sister... It was all about true love. I couldn't stand it anymore, so I ran away.

I feel that the background of the story does not match the characteristics of the characters. It is weird. Inception persuaded me to quit.

After reading Chapter 230, I had an idea: Will the protagonist get the time stone and travel through the past? Resurrected his sister, and then founded this mysterious organization. Because he experienced the realm of God in the nightmare world, he collected infinite gems to realize this realm of God.

I feel so angry that this novel is quite good. It is better than those novels about the Holy Mother's Heart Report, novels that are interrupted for no reason, and novels that are too dark or too positive. Although the novel has some problems, it is much better than other novels. Well, let's leave it at that. I hope the author can publish some good infinite flow novels (like Samsara Paradise)

No matter how the writing is done, the author has worked very hard. After all, coding is still tiring, so I stopped when I saw the charges. As for this article, let's not talk about the writing style, just take the setting as an example. It's really unattractive. I'm pretending to be traveling through the heavens to complete tasks, but I'm playing a mindless, procrastinating, novice routine. In the end, I just want to say that after reading so many chapters, it's just about a large group of people working against each other, working alone, and working together as a team in various scenes. It has basically nothing to do with the plot. I recommend reading the Reincarnation Paradise of Waste Mosquito for homework. Although they write things that have nothing to do with the plot, other people's portrayals of various characters and descriptions of various scenes can connect me with it quite well.

Take a bubble! I have been diving, driving at a customized speed, and am recuperating. The author will keep booking until he enters the palace!

Is it true that only Samsara Paradise can read Mugenwen now?

I felt relieved when I saw someone telling me to quit. . I was really disgusted. The author also explained that I was stunned until the chapter where the fat man was whitewashed. Hmm. . . Then it hung up. . False Madonna. Little routine. I won't spray you anymore. . After all, writing a book is not easy. . The main purpose of talking about it is to release the disgusted depression. . Please forgive me if there is anything wrong. . It doesn't matter if you delete the comment.

Let it fall apart, let it fall away, this book is really rubbish I use my post-booking title as deacon to vouch for it. If you want to say yes, please use a higher title to confront me. To be honest, I regret it very much. This is fucking written by the author himself. The further you go, the more nonsense the logic becomes. Friends who want to fall into this trap should think carefully.

First of all, there is the issue about Mao Mei and Satomi Onijima. Some people think that they are redundant and think that the old cunt does not need companions. But if this book allows the protagonist to be alone throughout the whole process, how will the plot unfold? The protagonist does not show up in the game and does not communicate with other people. To put it bluntly, the most basic hatred value of online novels cannot be created, right? Every time you enter the game settings, the survivors appear in one place, and a chapter or two is spent introducing other old survivors, in order to create some conflicts. If the protagonist has no communication throughout the whole process, enters the game invisibly, fights monsters to level up, and waits until he is invincible before crushing other people, even a great master cannot have fun writing like this, right? If you post something about this, please think about it for yourself first. The second thing is about the protagonist's forbearance... In the early stage, he had a magical weapon, but he didn't have enough strength. What's wrong with keeping a low profile? If the protagonist does not provoke other people, he will not be polite when others provoke him. Writing according to this idea, it is also said to be forced to keep a low profile... Well, maybe it is because my writing skills are limited and I have not written a convincing feeling. From the author's point of view, of course, I can let the protagonist not be noticed by others in the early stage, arrange for him to go smoothly, and stay peaceful and low-key until he fully grows up. But is this really interesting? The artifacts that the protagonist currently possesses include the Lord of the Rings and the Book of the Blood God, which have no lethality. The shooting skills, weapons, fighting skills, and Alice's physique are very powerful and can almost defeat other survivors. However, the protagonist has a more convenient artifact like the Lord of the Rings and doesn't need it. He also has to compete with people head-on... Then I guess more people will say that the protagonist is forcibly reduced to intelligence. This is almost completely contradictory to the view that Mao Mei and Onijima Satomi are redundant, right? Of course, the protagonist will not always rely on the Lord of the Rings in the future, but at least until he has redeemed his bloodline and has enough strength to protect himself, right? Finally, I talked about letting the protagonist forcibly reduce his intelligence. I don't think I asked the protagonist to make any stupid choices. As for some funny performances in daily life, this kind of plot can be regarded as a manifestation of intelligence... Then I really have nothing to say... … The comments in the book review area are basically those that I didn't read very much in the previous books. It's hard to agree with others when it comes to writing novels. No matter how you write, there will always be people who find points that don't suit them and insist on criticizing them. Old authors have long been accustomed to it, but I have been paying close attention to this one because I really want to write this novel seriously. Book Review Some comments in the section are valuable whether they are well-intentioned suggestions or malicious trolls. For example, the silly and cute character of Fatty in the early stage was revised in time because of the comments in the book review section. Unexpectedly, similar characters have become toxic now, and have attracted people from the Association for Caring for Fatty... I apologize here, I am really ashamed of being fatty. There have been a lot of bad reviews in the book review area recently. There must be something wrong with the writing in the book. It may be that the writing is not good enough to make critical players realize the rationality of the protagonist's choice. I will definitely accept improvements in the future, and those who make comments will read it well. I will also clean up the malicious sarcasm on time. The performance of the book may not be very good in the future, but at least I have tried my best. It is enough to have readers who like it. That's it.

The author is not writing a book for readers at all, but for self-pleasure; the author does not need to consider the situation of the protagonist when writing a book. He does not deal with things properly, and every day he is kawaii, beautiful, and in the harem; for the author, women are justice and truth, and there is no need to consider the living environment of the protagonist. , And there is no need to consider how the protagonist will survive in such a precarious situation. For the person in the book, he is not the author. He is not as forward-looking as the author. The ending is known from the beginning of the book. Since there is no danger, just pick up girls. As long as a girl looks good, no matter what she does, it is just! I would like to ask the author if you have never seen a woman? Or did you write ** when you wrote the book? Do you understand logic? Do you know what is precarious? Do you understand that there is no guarantee that there will be tomorrow if there is today? Do you understand that your butt determines your head? You write a book for readers to read, not for pleasure! The reader takes on the role of the protagonist and can he see the ending at a glance?

This book is poisonous, and I have already died from the poison. I am writing this post so that others who come after me will be careful.