My Hero Academia Way to Survive

The storyline is getting better and better and very interesting

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Seedlings, I didn't expect it to be in the first person, so it's okay. May I ask, is this my British single world? Or will several worlds blend together? Or travel across all realms?

Space elements are also elements. You can create transcendence by yourself.

The conceptual personality of thunder attribute? Space. Time? Element system is invincible. I haven't seen this book friend's theme...

The book is good, but another random character seems to be superfluous.

To be honest, I don't understand how the personality of the protagonist, Element, was developed so weakly.

Keep writing well, not many people write this!

So did the protagonist kill someone? ? ? [Why are you still struggling with this issue] By the way, the burning is okay, but some of the rhythm is not stuck. I suggest using more updates and word count to make it up 😁😁😁

Mixing first and third person, it really gives me a headache (´;;`)

The protagonist's personality is still very weak. What kind of readers do you want to attract? You will definitely get a bad result if you do this. I guess it will be a eunuch. After all, it is really difficult to have the perseverance to write. To be honest, foreshadowing is very disgusting, especially when the protagonist is very weak.

It feels good, and I give you all the recommendation votes. I hope to be able to conceive the plot better and support you! There aren't many Little Hero fanfics, but even if there are, this one is still pretty good.

If I don't write about you properly, why should I go and start a new book?

What you actually wrote was in the third person. But at the same time, the word "I" appears frequently. Of course, understanding the author's meaning is to describe the inner activities of the protagonist. Then punctuation marks must be added here to distinguish them. Obviously the author does have a lot of descriptions of psychological activities with [] added. But why don't you add [ ] in the part where the word "I" appears? Also, about the protagonist's abilities. There is no problem in using the Six Styles in close combat, it is commonplace. But when it comes to Rasengan, the problem is a bit big. First of all, the Rasengan is not a wind-type ability, it is a simple change in the form of energy, not to mention that the origin of the Rasengan is Tailed Beast Jade. The Rasengan used by the protagonist you described is more like the Wind Release and Rasen Shuriken, but it is too much weaker, and the wind blades are not subtle enough. It can be said that the Rasengan as understood by the protagonist, or the Rasengan as understood by the author, is absolutely unable to use the Odama Rasengan, or the moment it is used, it is discovered that it is a Rasen Shuriken that explodes at close range, and then the game is over. There are no other big problems. For example, the protagonist is too weak, but it can be understood that the author is writing about the growth of the protagonist, and this is indeed the case in the article. I hope the author can think carefully about the two questions I raised.

I don't know whether the author is going to make the protagonist innocent again, or add some personal stuff. It is impossible for a country to have only those powers on the surface. If it were a normal world, there would definitely be a reason why the police behaved that way. This depends on the author's imagination. If you are going to explain it directly as this is a hot-blooded comic, I can only say that I am disappointed. I want to see the author's imagination and go one step further, which will make me happy. Otherwise, I can only watch it as an ordinary fan.

It's a bit too fast. Is it going to catch up? In fact, you can write more about daily life or quick wear.

It's okay... Much better than other Woying fans... But the name of the character's ability and the heroine are a bit awkward... And about killing people... I think you can't kill people in the original work... You'll be fired.

Write a long review about the senses of this article up to the eighteenth chapter. Well, I was very surprised when I saw this article at first, because the other Wo Ying fans in Qidian are too poisonous... [Actually, there is an article called King of Heroes (?) That is okay, but they are all locked... Let's talk about the advantages first. The ability to shape the protagonist is really good. As for the description, it is already very good for a newcomer, and the portrayal of the transformation of the protagonist is also okay. What moved me the most is the latest chapter, Brother Ming's thoughts - yes, it's you, Brother Ming, look at what you have done, it's not easy for Uncle Ou, okay! Don't you want to be as skinny as the Hokage's second pillar? Next is the analysis and shortcomings of each chapter: The first chapter gave me a very good feeling. The description, theme, and character creation were all very good. Except for the plot in the middle, the description and dialogue did not keep the rhythm right. The second chapter does a good job of describing the pursuit of a calm and high-IQ protagonist, but it is still about the dialogue description. If you read it too quickly, it is easy to miss the dialogue between the imaginary enemy and what the protagonist says... And then comes the key point—— (ノ=Д=)ノ┻━┻Kasui, why did you write about the Rasengan? It would be fine if the protagonist was a funny person or someone with a naughty personality, but it would be a big deal if it turned out to be a high-IQ, indifferent protagonist who is a bit like a second pillar! And, just like Midoriya, [his feet moved involuntarily], it was very exciting! Moreover, the protagonist you are writing now is still an egotist. I should not have imagined that... The third chapter still has a problem with the dialogue, which is too copied from the original work... And I personally think it would be better to have Ben Xuan Ji appear in the middle. Otherwise, it would be weird to have an important original character at the beginning who is unknown to the protagonist... Chapter 4, the description of Ben Xuanji... Kasumi-kun, it's time for you to practice how to write about girls... (By the way, Rashomon feels okay? Maybe the real second pillar? 233 Chapter 5, the same problem as above … Let's talk about the last few chapters directly. I can't accept killing people (mainly because I'm a bit incapable of accepting the killing in the Korean world. I remember a friend recommended a Japanese fanfic called Misaka Tsukasa. The protagonist dropped out of school because of killing people, so I stopped reading it... Orz). The combat description is still a bit weak (in my personal opinion). I suggest you learn more about the rhythm of the squid and the character description and layout of the three scum (only for male characters), as well as the combat aspect. But the inner activities, I think, are the most outstanding aspects of Kacui. And I saw a single chapter! Happy! If Card Curse can be put on the shelves, I will give you 10,000 coins!