Pirate's Navy Fist

Let's talk about some connections between this book and the original work first. To put it bluntly, it doesn't have the flavor of the original work. I don't know much about One Piece. I'm basically at the level of a passerby. I probably think that the white bandit is the only one in the world. The most ridiculous part of the book is that Akainu is a person with weak physical skills. In fact, Akainu's physical skills surpassed Oden's, and he was able to hit his head with a counterattack. He got up quickly after being hit by the Rip Island attack, and his recovery surpassed Garp. During the war, he was more seriously injured than Garp, but he took off the bandage earlier. Speed, Akainu also quickly pursued Jinbei after being blocked. This speed was also extremely fast. Being attacked by Foil and Marco, he successfully dodged, similar to Katakuri's precognition. Basically Akainu is an all-around player. If you know more about it, you will know that the prototype of Akainu is Oda's favorite idol, and Oda will only like this character. The strength cannot be weakened. The second reason is that the author lacks self-awareness. All other labels are good, but hot-blooded and calm are completely inappropriate. The reason is as follows. When the protagonist meets Akainu, he talks and acts like a junior high school boy. I won't go into details, but I've criticized him enough. There is no calmness at all, only dullness. Not much to say, I'm tired, this book is too pulpy, I suggest you finish it quickly and write a new one.

Zefa does not have overlord domineering, and in the entire navy, only Garp has overlord domineering.

This is not Roger. Roger's smile when he died. Author, you don't understand it at all.

It would be better not to write the paragraph similar to the preface, because the first impression feels like a fairy tale, so it would be better to remove it

The protagonist's name is Jiang Feng! ! After saving Roger, he could bring people back to life as soon as he had the ability! ! Damn it, there's really a reason why I didn't get good grades in books.

The author of this book is a pseudo-pirate fan, and he has not studied the original work well. Judging from the writing, I feel like I used to write fantasy novels, and reading the whole book gives me the feeling of rushing into a fantasy novel.

The downfall is the use of the sword. Shouldn't a person whose physical fitness is better than Garp's and who also has space ability be like Whitebeard and break the space with one punch? In the end, he was playing with the swordsmanship of two knives.

His space ability has been turned into rubbish. Devil fruits are only developed after the brain becomes bigger. As an earthling, you still have no brain power. 🐔

I vomited after reading a few chapters. What is this writing about? Why don't you change your name after being reborn? You still use the one from your previous life. It's a rubbish book.

Those who say Garp has a domineering look, I beg you to stop showing off and look at the life card, please? The entire navy has the look of overlord during the Warring States Period

Just the name of the protagonist will probably drive away 90% of the readers...

I don't care if someone criticizes me or scolds me. When I read pirate novels, it seems really weird to use Chinese names. Although they often call me Feng, but when speaking in the third person, they use Jiang Feng. I feel like I just can't fit in.

The protagonist is mainly domineering in physical skills, supplemented by time and space abilities. He is good at swordsmanship, but he is only a swordsman and will not become a great swordsman. The protagonist's combat power is at the level of the Four Emperors, so this book does not have a plot to crush the Four Emperors. The Yonko is very strong, and the Shichibukai will also be very strong. The characters in this book will only be written to make them stronger, not to weaken anyone.

I can't stand it when I see the name of the protagonist. It's obviously a Western fantasy world, but Jiang Feng's name is full of contradictions.

Brother author, you only start charging after 300 chapters. With more than 2 million words and 2,000 recommendations, I am really impressed that you can keep writing. After watching it, if it looks good, I will support it in the future.

Time and space are written like this, garbage, don't read it, 88

I would like to suggest that the main character's name should not be too oriental, especially if it is also in a Western format, Monkey D. Feng, and the narrator is always called Jiang Feng. My suggestion is that the main character should be given a name from the pirate world. A Chinese name is fine, remove the relationship between Garp's relatives, and then think of a nicer Chinese name. Jiang Feng, like Ye Chen and Ye Tian, ​​is a bad name.

The title of the book is: Baquan should be in the taijutsu stream

Author, you have written down two great abilities. This is the first time I have seen a protagonist with time and space abilities who are so useless. If you don't talk about anything else, just talk about the protagonist's teleportation ability. Is that a space teleportation? Even if it is limited to a range of twenty meters at the beginning, within this range of twenty meters, the protagonist is invincible, right? Even Garp can't hit the protagonist. No matter how fast Garp is, can he pass through space faster? Look at the Fourth Hokage in Naruto. How much fun can they have with just one flying thunder god? Moreover, the flying thunder god's teleportation is not as convenient as the protagonist's, and there is also the protagonist's space blade ability. Please, even if the protagonist's physical strength is poor, then it is the power of space, which belongs to the power of God. A flying thunder god can dominate the world, and Obito's power can spread throughout the entire ninja world. That is the real power of space. When it comes to the protagonist, it is difficult to describe it in one sentence. Regardless of the protagonist's own strength and stamina, space and time are forces that belong to another dimension, and they are powerful in themselves.

What the hell, you can't slash without air? Poisoned me to death

When I saw the pirate, I came in immediately. It didn't take long. This young author didn't know martial arts. Come, lie, come, sneak attack. I advised him to be a rat tail juice and not to be clever.

Most of the settings of the navy do not have the domineering and domineering look of the overlord. The navy with the domineering look of the domineering king definitely wants to become the king of the navy.

Is this the fruit of time and space? The author doesn't understand time and space at all, okay? Vacuum, partial cracks, placing a leaf directly in your brain, placing weapons directly in your belly, brain, space-time confusion, space folding, you have not developed any of these abilities, mirror space

The sense of substitution is too low. I keep using the original name. There are many poisonous points. Even if I write it with my butt, it is better than yours.

I signed the contract after reading chapter 300 of the catalog, tsk tsk tsk

This,,, is as fucked up as someone telling me that Danzo betrayed Konoha

I have to say that this book is really not very good to read. At least I think it has a lot of poisonous points. If you only practice swordsmanship half way, you will not understand it.

If you have space, the Zhenzhen fruit will defeat you.

If you write the same article, you probably haven't read One Piece, so what are you writing about?

Is there a female protagonist? Is it a single heroine?