Konoha's Ximon Fubuki

When he was two years old, he could draw and express that he wanted to be a ninja. He knew about chakra and training, haha... Seeking death.

I don't want to disturb you, but I still think I should say a few words. The book is called Konoha: Ximen Fubuki, but you created a sword fairy system. That's fine, it's just a wrong name. But what the protagonist does has nothing to do with sword fairy. A three-foot green blade, all tangible and intangible things in the world, no self, all over the world, nine heavens and ten places, let me travel, time, space, fate, cause and effect, can't stop me even half a step, this is what I call the name of the sword fairy.

Incense (๑‾᷅^‾᷅๑)

Just because Shiro is a boy, I want to read this book. After reading many Naruto fanfics, I have turned Shiro into a female character like a vase. She looks at the protagonist with such pitiful eyes and shyly looks at the protagonist. She wants to say nothing but leave me alone. It's so shocking. When I think of the pitiful eyes of a man, I am really speechless and choked.

The biggest shortcoming is that there is no burning point at all, and the first few dozen chapters are as light as water. I can't stand it anymore.

So... Is this no longer updated? (●—●)

Never write about transformation, even if it's about gay people. It's disgusting to think about a man turning into a woman.

Most of the books with smart systems are poisonous. If you write like this, you will be a noob and mentally retarded. People are not reading books to argue with the system. You don't need to read the following plots whether they are exciting or not. There is fighting but no fighting, and the plot has no plot and is not funny. It is a three-dimensional book. If you can't stand it for an old bookworm, you will definitely give up the book after three chapters.

I don't know why it's so embarrassing to watch.

I don't mean to say nice things. I know that the author wants to hear words of support and appreciation from readers at this time, but these are the real poison. The author has persisted for so long and written so many words. If he gives up his persistence just because of the abuse from readers, then I don't think there is any need to continue writing. On this reading website, it seems that everyone has room to pursue their dreams, but in the end it is still a very realistic world. ①Do not revise the manuscript and upload it directly. I think this is a big taboo for all online article authors. Except for some authors who deliberately write trivial articles to cheat money, if you really want to gain recognition from readers, then it is necessary to modify and save a certain number of words before uploading. I have probably seen the chapter where the protagonist helps Uchiha Itachi. Most of the plots before this are full of errors and omissions. I will not talk about the same old story, but just talk about the plot of the Uchiha family. Why do you think that as long as you become the culprit of the destruction of the Uchiha family, you can decide who to keep at will? According to Danzo's character in Hokage, he would not do this and would probably eradicate the root cause. In addition, although the third generation seems to be a kind old man, according to his animal-taming way of training Naruto, he will not be merciful to the so-called Uchiha. The article has huge loopholes, not just one. Real life may not require logic, but novels do. If you don't change it, and don't save the manuscript, and upload it as soon as you write it, then this will be what you write, and you may know how many people have reviled the author. ②Disadvantages of system flow. The routine of adding a system is correct in itself, but many authors enrich the system, leading to the failure of superfluous things. What is the system? In fact, it is a golden finger. What do readers want to see? In fact, the protagonist uses a golden finger to pretend to be sexy and do things that he usually can't do but really wants to do (not just things that he can't do). It is not impossible to complicate the system, but it will lead to the situation where two protagonists appear at the same time. Nowadays, the most taboo in online literature is dual protagonists. Moreover, the system you set is still talkative. The system can even control the body of the protagonist when the protagonist is mentally trapped. The result is conceivable, even Shen Nong who opened Wushuang may be poisoned to death. There are two simple points: the setting is wrong and the plot is illogical, but I found that the author did not correct his mistakes at all. I don't understand what is the point of writing a novel without thinking about it? I am also writing a novel myself, and I have saved 100,000 words. Even now, I often change the content of the first few chapters. I treat my articles like my own children. Let me put it harshly, your novel is an orphan, with parents but no education.

I saw Ximen Chuixue coming in to take a look, it should be Dugu Nine Swords

The system elves are now poisonous, and they became poisonous in just one chapter as soon as they appeared.

I insisted on reading fifteen chapters, but I couldn't afford it. I was really poisoned to the bone.

In fact, the biggest poisonous point of this book is that the protagonist has been practicing swordsmanship since childhood, practicing swordsmanship, practicing swordsmanship! Then use the sword to exterminate the clan. Does the author think that the Third Generation and the Leaf Village are all sand? It's clear who did it, and yet he could still write about it so viciously. I admire the author so much!

The beginning is so long-winded that I feel awkward and can't stand it anymore.

Reading the comments persuaded me to quit the series, I slipped away.

Recruiting for supporting roles can be either original or your favorite characters in the original work. It is best to state whether it is original or not. The character name fits the plot. Don't ask for Li XX or Wang XX. You can add some settings appropriately, but I will make appropriate modifications according to the plot.