Dropped Stories (Didn't Quite Work for Me)

1 重 Going Back to My Dad's High School Days Three Thousand SnowstormsDanmei (BL)631k WordsCompleted 153.3kFavorites286.8kClicks/ch78kGifts

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It's not because of the so-called second child in the comment section, it's just that the ambiguous period makes people speechless. I thought that the ambiguous period was about the tug-of-war between the two parties. Now it's hard for me to see that Shou has any thoughts of tug-of-war. The reaction with Gong is not as volatile as during the passionate stage. It is said that Gong chased him because of the pheromones, but it was more like he reluctantly joined Gong because of the pheromones. He kept retreating except during the estrus period. If it weren't for his motherly love for Qin Shiwu and thus his indirect interaction with Gong, he would really be like a scumbag who dumps people after using up their pheromones [holding his chin]

2 从 From Republican-Era China to Here Nian LuanDanmei (BL)625k WordsCompleted 55kFavorites65kClicks/ch45.6kGifts

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The author's writing has improved, but he still doesn't handle certain details very well [cheek-holding] [cheek-holding] One is that the narrative of the plot is a bit complicated and the pace is too slow, and the other is the character dialogue. Although the dialogue between the characters may be confusing and logical in daily context, this is generally the case in the text. The dialogue does not fit the context and the emotions of the characters, and it reads awkwardly and draggingly, especially when they are arguing, and it is even weirder when matched with the rhythm of the writing [cheek-holding] [cheek-holding] [cheek-holding] In the plot of the ancestral hall, one person interjects a sentence, like a quarrel in the market [split][split][split]

3 蛇 Damn It, I Barged in the Door Upside Down. Ionization Is Greater Than HydrolysisDanmei (BL)399k WordsCompleted 20.2kFavorites14.6kClicks/ch8.4kGifts

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The writing is average, and the plot is too jumpy. It feels like the protagonist randomly refreshes a scene to start a plot, a conversation happens and then nothing happens [cheek-holding][cheek-holding][cheek-holding]

4 与 Parallel to You Returning Geese in Falling SnowDanmei (BL)558k WordsCompleted 47kFavorites33.5kClicks/ch167kGifts

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As of 20 and taking 10 home, it was still good-looking. I thought Guihong Luoxue had improved, and the writing was better than when I wrote Rabbit. However, it turned out to be the work of my own crazy xp. The previous character descriptions and plot logic are all very good. Since 20's basement was discovered by 10, the story logic has become messy and confusing. For more than 20 consecutive chapters, you lie to me and I lie to you, you hate me and I hate you. Occasionally, I find that you love me and I love you, but you always beat me and I beat you. The motivation of Chen 20's behavior has never been explained clearly. The background of the story and the principle of dreaming, scene changes, and psychological description are all in a mess. It feels like writing where you dream. The one who is sick is not Chen 20, but Gui Hongluoxue who let himself go while writing the article. Chen 10 also touches on it later. The story cannot suddenly reverse, but there must be some foreshadowing to make people feel that there is a reason, and there is a trace to follow, right? It feels like Gui Hongluoxue slapped his forehead and said: The logic here is too smooth, let's reverse it! Then it became that 10 deliberately lured 20 to the bait, and 20 deliberately let 10 fall into a dream. The reason also felt like it was made up, and it was too uncontrollable. Chen 20 kept saying, don't worry, believe me, I have a way. Chen 10 has been doubting whether this will work or not. In the end, no one knows what Chen 20 can do and what trump card he has left for himself. Every time 20 said there was a way, I wanted to ask, Gui Hongluoxue, did you really write 20's final solution? The shortcoming of Gui Hongluoxue is that it cannot use psychological description to explain the logic of the character's behavior. This was the case a few years ago, and it is still the case a few years later.

5 鹈 Pelicans Taste Humans [Entertainment Circle] Strawberry JackfruitDanmei (BL)209k WordsCompleted 18.2kFavorites19.5kClicks/ch9.2kGifts

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The front part was pretty good, but a little Liu suddenly appeared in the back, and the emotional line was delayed without development. In addition, my friend Lao Shi always comes up with ideas, always emphasizing his identity as a psychiatrist and also emphasizing psychological counseling. As a result, he says and does things that really smear the image of psychological counselors, which is simply gossip. For a counselor to gossip about a client like this proves that the counseling is poorly done.

6 还 Is There Such a Good Thing? Yi Cong YinDanmei (BL)583k WordsCompleted 342.9kFavorites318.5kClicks/ch668.2kGifts

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There are more descriptions of the environment than the descriptions of the characters. I don't see much of it, but it feels bland. It's more about the scenes than the people. I feel it's unnecessary.

7 叶 Ye Xingsi, Give Me Fire Smoking Cat and WineDanmei (BL)325k WordsCompleted 3.9kFavorites2.2kClicks/ch6.7kGifts

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This is the most regretful novel I've ever read in Cigarettes and Wine. It's not about the writing style or the logic bugs, it's about the fact that I felt that at the end, the protagonist didn't seem to love me anymore. Even if the final outcome is a mutual confession, I still can't get rid of the empty feeling of "Mom and Dad are divorced". The two of them broke up before they had been dating for long. They didn't pursue each other, and they didn't want to accept their feelings. The emotional intensity was suddenly gone, and it didn't come up in the end. The key point of the broken mirror and reunion is not only the broken mirror, but also the "circle". If the circle is not powerful, why do people think that they can stay together forever? It makes me feel that if one day they have enough life, it would be normal for them to want to separate.