Who Could Turn Down a Samoyed?

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[Orange Candy] I've got it. [Orange Candy] I've got it. The little couple will be together for a long time.

This is a type that I would not choose to collect. The paragraph is too long and can be divided into paragraphs appropriately. I saw typos and wanted to catch them, so I selected a large paragraph at once. The description is also very strange. In some places, "him" can be used instead of the person's name, which will make the reading more coherent. But the author used the person's name. The following is from a reader's perspective In the first paragraph, "As a struggling college student," can it be changed to "As a struggling college student?" In the second paragraph, Chen Xi kept staring at me. Wasn't he giving a speech earlier? Didn't he keep looking at "me" during the speech? Imagine how weird it is. Would it be more natural to change it to "Chen Xi peeked at me several times during the speech?" In the third paragraph, "Although this is the first time I have met Chen Xi in person, Chen Xi is very famous in our school." Can the second "Chen Xi" be changed to "him"? In the fifth paragraph, even if you are waiting at the door, would it be better to read it instead of standing there or standing at the door? When standing, you are very upright. Can you change it to standing there, with an upright posture? After describing the face, describe the body. Otherwise, it will be strange to read in a staggered manner. Also, I really can't imagine the action of "coldly taking the phone"??? Excuse me???? It's just lunch break and I still have to go to work. I won't take a closer look. In addition to the questions I typed out, there are also many strange feelings that I can't name, but I don't know how to describe them. The writing style of first-person writing is very important. If the plot is not smooth, it will be difficult to retain people. The introduction is also very strange. If you change the perspective, you can space it out slightly. You can also use a dash. The introduction was confusing to me. It was only after reading the content that I realized that the introduction has two perspectives, and the ending is very abrupt. Above

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