Double Crown [Interstellar]

First of all, I finish the story of Spreading Flowers. I feel like this is probably the end. In fact, the ending is very good. I have been looking forward to this article for a long time. After all, I think it will be very good. I recently thought about it and found that the main text is finished, so I started reading it. The core of the story is actually a theme that I quite like, interstellar + western fantasy, with a bit of apocalyptic elements, and the theme of bursting out hope in despair and not bowing to fate, which I have always liked. Then let me talk about what I think is a big flaw in this article: the lack of picture and atmosphere. This kind of driving novel with a future fantasy color needs to build a world view. In particular, the main plot of this article is directly the decryption and exploration of the entire world view. The shaping of the world view is particularly important, so it is necessary to use words to build a world to show it to the readers. This is what this article lacks. The world view described in this article is only a setting. To use an inappropriate analogy - games, the game plot has CG cutscenes. The scenes behind the characters directly explain the background of the story and show us the appearance and style of the world. The character drawings are a supplement to this basis, including their clothing, expressions and demeanor. , Are displayed directly in front of the player, so the game plot text can be a large number of character dialogues, psychological descriptions and next actions. However, novels have no images, only text, so the author needs to be able to use words to achieve the effect of images and construct scenes, characters and the world. This article is very lacking or even non-existent in this aspect. For example, the core one, the Kuroshio, what is the shape of the Kuroshio? What does the area look like after the Kuroshio infestation? When looking at the starship from a distance, observing at a close distance, at the edge of the black tide, and when Lanno went deep, I personally think that these scenes all need to be described. They don't need a lot of description, but at least one thing must be mentioned. It is mentioned that the ore of the resource star is gone. Why is it gone? What is the state of the eroded planet's ground? How did the buildings on the planet disappear? Crush? Or just disappear? If it is crushed, there may be corresponding powder residue on the ground. If it disappears directly, the ore under the ground will disappear. Are there any signs of collapse on the ground? Is there a cavity without collapse? Will there be no holes filled in by the Kuroshio? Is there any difference in the soil quality when you dig down? In addition, it seems that the area directly turns black after being eroded? So is space filled with some black matter? Do you feel anything different when you breathe? What are the senses of sight, hearing, smell, taste, and touch involved in it? (In short, there is no description. I made a wild guess after Lanno landed on the planet and it was dark.) These picture-like descriptions are all things that can strengthen the shaping of this world view, enhance the sense of reality and interest, and allow readers to directly see what it is like from the text. The description of the black tide in the article directly focuses on the mental impact it brings, and the feeling of the mental impact is not very clear. It only hurts, and eventually goes crazy. Does it usually bring any other effects? What about thinking, emotions, and behavior? Will your perception of the world be different? I feel that this crazy process has not been written down, which makes me feel very regretful and shortcomings. If you feel that it is difficult to create a concrete scene, you can fill it with a sense of atmosphere. Once the atmosphere is in place, the scene is not that important. Unfortunately, the atmosphere of this article is not very satisfactory. The monsters on the battlefield do not have a sense of oppression and terror. The lack of description of the five senses of the soldiers facing the monsters and the lack of description of the specific appearance of the monsters account for a large part. , The tragic situation of the intelligent race is lightly brought out, which directly leads to the inability to convey the sense of despair and urgency when the race survives and dies, which in turn leads to the tragic and firmness of many races when they fight against despair, as well as the hope and final victory that emerges from despair. These are not so dazzling, and the overall feeling is very flat, which is too flat for this theme. Oh, by the way, there are also key scenes. I am very concerned about the structure of the Holy Dragon Palace. Lan Nuo set a fire there. Where did he set it? What are combustion aids? At that time, he was angry, desperate and crazy, and he still wanted to see if anyone would find him. So where was the place he chose? Why did Ji Mingyu discover it first? Is it day or night? Why is there no one there? The inspiration and idea for this scene is great, but what does this scene actually look like? With just a few words "Burning the Royal Court", I really can only think of Lan Nuo setting a fire in a yard and standing there (.) And what does Senhai Orchid look like? I didn't make it very clear either. Ah, it seems to be too long, and there are some other bits and pieces that I can't remember. Indeed, there are some repetitive and wordy issues that many readers have responded to, which is a bit. In short, I think the author's core idea is quite good, but the writing power is not enough to shape and describe it well, so I have to keep thinking about it while reading. What does it look like, but in the absence of information, the things constructed in my mind must have too much personal imagination, so the final result is that the world in my mind is already the result of my own construction. This should not appear in this kind of novel where the plot revolves around the world view. Come on, author, it still feels too immature.

Finished with flowers. I would like to tell friends who are interested in this article that this article is more of a drama style and cannot be regarded as a slap-in-the-face article. The author's writing style is indeed somewhat different from most of Jinjiang's writing, but I adapted well. In my opinion, the keynote of the whole text lies in the growth and transformation of the protagonist. The slap-in-the-face plot doesn't take up much space, and I didn't find it very satisfying. Also, reading comments on previous chapters can really affect your mood. This article is not watery, it is just more detailed in many places.

After reading the whole book, I feel that although the dragons in the dragon clan seem to value Lance very much, they are actually just unwilling to admit their mistakes. In the previous life, they decided to completely give Lanno's crown to Lance, so that no one would know that they recognized the wrong "king", plus what the Dragon Clan did in this life. It seems to me that they know everything, it's just that they don't want to, as if they didn't do anything wrong as long as they don't admit it.

The whole text is like a poem. Some emotions are not expressed decisively, but it does not mean that they are not intense enough. Underneath is their fervor. I reviewed this book again three years later. I really like the metaphor of Lanno being compared to a butterfly. The free butterfly flies across the sea. I can't forget the golden roses blooming in all the oceans of the endless starry sky, and Hildegard's words, "I began to miss my hometown."

Wow, although the ending is very dull, this kind of dullness is the most beautiful thing in that era. I always feel so sad when it ends. Maybe it's because of the cute Shark, maybe it's because of the smart but stupid Lan Nuo, maybe it's because of the god Zheyue who descended to earth... In short, it's still very sad. Although their story will continue, after all, I started watching it from the first chapter of the series. . . . . Woo woo, I can't bear to say it. In the final analysis, I just can't bear it. Can the author, Mommy, make a sequel to Lanno's original novel In Our World? I want to watch the love line ww because the love line is so short that it's worth the sugar kuso throughout the whole process.

I feel guilty and distressed more because I love the Kraken. The offender is calm and the victim is in more pain. This is unacceptable to me and the if line is also very sloppy... The holy dragon suddenly died (I think it is really easy for them to die directly)... There is no mention of the Kraken. In fact, the writing style of Da Da is very clear and delicate, but sometimes it is precisely because he is delicate that people feel a bit wordy. In addition, the gorgeous words will make people tired to read. In fact, I can accept it this way. The only thing I can't accept is the sloppy if line. It feels like it has been slipped. This chapter is not even a line, it is like an emm outline. I don't know if anyone understands. All the words are very sloppy. They are all to explain the results. It feels like a running account. I have always accepted good things before, but I am really a little disappointed here.

Painful stream of consciousness occurs a bit too often. The world view is very shocking. The content contains both the heavy pressure of history and a lot of interesting daily life. I like the rhythm. The natural daily life and details will give me a feeling of flesh and blood, which is very fulfilling. It has a strong fantasy flavor, with many interesting creatures, as well as friends with chuunibyou and Gong with a strange mental state. The battle scenes are not grand, and most of them are descriptions of spiritual power, but all the narratives are still grand and dreamy. The emotional line is really stretched, the number of offensive appearances is only a handful, and there is no deep bond even in the later stages. In short, the emotional line is neither sweet nor exciting. Although I personally yearn for the God who ignores everything and watches everything, but the presence of God is unimaginable, although it is not actually the case. But Shou is really powerful, and he himself is also very exciting. As for the crematorium, it's enough for me. Maybe the real reality will be more crazy, twisted, and illogical, but there are characters and background settings in the article, so let's be dragged away by the author.

I felt worthless and distressed for the sapphire dragon Lannuo who died alone. No one loved him, no one cared about him. He left with pain and misunderstanding, and he didn't even get any positive feelings in the if line.

[Long review of late-night review] What struck me most in this article was the discussion surrounding the "meaning of the crown." As it is said in political textbooks, rights and obligations are equal. The knight's questioning of the crown in the article seems to be saying, "Princes and generals would rather live together." The person who steals the power sits high on the tower, while the real owner of the crown has suffered pain and suffering. This sharp contrast, which is explained in the text, is the highlight of the entire article. At the same time, it is also telling us a truth - any "right" must be accompanied by responsibilities. When you enjoy the benefits brought by this right, you will also bear responsibilities. Finally, thank you for presenting us with such a good article. [Spread flowers]

Finished, the process of chasing articles is very happy and tiring at the same time My wife's writing is very characteristic and stream-of-consciousness. The progress of the article is mostly driven by the internal thoughts of Lanno or other bystanders. In some places, I can't find personal pronouns and names and I can't figure out who said or thought these words. But the words are brilliant and brilliant, and I feel that my wife really worked hard to describe the feeling and atmosphere. My wife's grasp of the push and pull of the emotional crematorium is also quite good (although it seems a bit long when I am following the article. The entire world view is based on the mysterious elements of Kuroshio fantasy. It is understandable that the stream of consciousness is a bit ahead of the times. The only flaw is that the emotional line is a bit weaker than the long and large main line (it may also be a feature). Overall, it is very nice. It is a good match with the copywriter. I look forward to my wife's future works~