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He Yi had always thought she had been handed the Overpowered Heroine script.
Her master had been a dominating big shot in the world of the occult while alive, and after his death, she had become a dazzling second-generation official. Her friends were all exceptional people, and she had a handsome fiancé whose personality suited hers.
And she herself was a ghost-path genius with a Yin Bone and a Pure Soul. She had once summoned a shaman and called upon a deity to battle a drought demon, then pointed her heart toward the clouds and cut down a dragon's soul.
At sixteen, after seeing her master off, she inherited his legacy and took the title of "Master," becoming the thirty-sixth He Yi of the Shu region's shamanic tradition.
The year she received her university admission letter, she thought she was about to unlock a new map and open up a whole new world.
But on her birthday, she suddenly discovered that she didn't just have the "Overpowered Heroine of the Occult World" script. She also had the "Rich Family's Real and Fake Heiresses" script...
*She is the third peerless beauty between the mountains and rivers of Shu, unrivaled in grace and bearing, and the undisputed leader of her generation in their world.
A little scene:
Many years later, a group of powerful ghosts gave their underlings this advice:
The big shots puffed on their cigarettes, looking gloomy. "When you go out, stay away from women with dimples and strings of beads and bells on their hands. Especially if their surname is He. She, she isn't a respectable person!"
He Yi: I fight zombies, curse old monsters, and make ghosts dance in square-dancing routines, but I know I'm a respectable shaman!
P: Overwhelming strength, no petty infighting.
PP: The older sister is not a villain. There are no awful people within this little family; they stand united against outsiders.
POP: The everyday life of a frail, sickly great shaman who can punch a crack into a solid wood table, working hard to earn money (merit) to support her family.
Finally, the one-line summary is meant to give everyone a clear sense of the heroine's strength. Tigers are a nationally protected species, and we He Masters obey the law!
Content warning: Both leads are drama queens. The heroine is a steel-hearted straight woman who loves gossip, can fight, adores beauties, and works diligently to uphold the prestige of a He Master. The male lead is a human-shaped jealousy jar whose characterization shifts to suit the situation. This dramatic couple is just what you need.
Message: Do not neglect good deeds just because they are small, and do not commit evil deeds just because they are small.
Because after reading Empress Hui's book, I fell into the author's trap, so I entered the author's column to make up two completed articles, one was "Salted Fish in the Qing Dynasty" and the other was "This True Daughter of Gold". How can I put it? In these three books, it is obvious that the author's thoughts and writing power can be seen. The author's articles have a very obvious yearning for family, friendship, love and other beautiful emotions in the world. The protagonists and most of the supporting characters in these articles have upright views and unique personalities. I speculate that the author incorporated his own characteristics and desires into several characters when creating them. For example, the female protagonists in the article are both physically weak and handsome, but they are cared for by close relatives, and they have childhood sweethearts, etc. Perhaps because of these characteristics, although the author writes about Jinjiang's cliché themes such as Qingchuan, true and false daughters, etc., There is still a big gap in texture from other cliché and cool articles, such as values, authenticity, sense of logic, etc. These are the characteristics of the author.
Looking at these three articles in chronological order, the writing style has made great progress. I don't know whether it is due to self-reflection or the guidance of a big boss. From the beginning, the story of Xianyu showed its aura but the logic jumps and the rhythm is abnormal; to this one, the aura is still the same, and the overall situation is laid out, and the sense of logic is improved, but it is still often out of touch, and there is a slight stream of consciousness in some places; to the story of Empress Hui, the creativity is perfect, the characters are more full, and the rhythm is generally stable and attractive. Of course, these are my personal reading experiences, not that of a professional.
Although I have seen the progress of Empress Hui's article, I still want to make some suggestions on this article. After all, I am still looking forward to the revision mentioned in the article. First of all, I am very happy that the author can challenge himself, break out of the structure provided by history, and start to lay out his own world. In fact, it is quite obvious that the author has carefully dealt with the cause and effect story line and world view, because the author's logic is quite clear, but the disadvantage is that these things are not conveyed to the readers very effectively. Maybe the author's idea is to hope that readers can understand or figure it out by themselves, or just make inferences and guess what they mean. But in fact, it's a bit of a taboo in storytelling, the stream of consciousness. It means that the author feels that he has made it clear and clear, but the readers cannot get it at all. This problem is more serious in the Salted Fish chapter, such as the palace fight scene and the like. Empress Hui has made great progress, and there are also this problem, such as Qingli's explanation. But fortunately, the overall story line does not have a stream of consciousness, and there are only some minor problems in the supporting character copies. How to put it this way, appropriate white space can give people unlimited imagination, but too much white space or white space in key places will only make people look uncomfortable. For example, what is the relationship between Ali, Zhili and the female corpse? Who is the Mother Goddess? Why did Yi Hesheng kill gods? Why did he need to sacrifice the swallows? If the mountain gods insulted the idols forty or fifty years ago and disappeared, then why were the swallows born? Did the mountain gods die to protect the swallows or did Xuanwu turn over to protect them? Why did the great uncle sacrifice? It was said that it was to atone for the plot. Did he deliberately not kill Yi Hesheng when he sealed him with death, or was it all his fault that Meng Po entered the mortal world, and that Han Bao was born and so on? ; King Xuan's blood beads were just to attract helpers at the beginning, but Uncle Master deliberately lured Han Bao to inform the world? So what is the live broadcast for? To prepare mentally for the upcoming disaster that the world will face? To be honest, I initially thought it was designed by King Xuan to let everyone know about the existence of ghosts, cause panic among humans, create a gap between the special department and the government, etc. Anyway, there are too many settings and unclear places in the story line, which gives readers a feeling that the framework is very large and the pit is very deep, but it is not filled in. It is interesting but empty and has no clue. If the author wants to revise the article, I think each case needs more pen and ink to detail it. After all, this is a pleasant article of Jinjiang length, not a one-and-a-half-hour mystery movie. I watched the latter three times and it didn't take me too much time to figure out the logic, but I may need to watch the former to have a hearty feeling.
Another problem is that the world is currently too big. The author has a perfect God's perspective to describe it, but the reader is a completely blank third party. At the beginning of the chapter, a lot of information about the characters, settings, structure, and plots poured in. It was very confusing. I had to read more than ten chapters to sort out the relationship between the chapters. And it can be felt that the author particularly wants to bury the foreshadowing in very early places. Some foreshadowings can stretch half the article, and there are many details. Without particularly detailed descriptions, there are so many problems. Moreover, the first and second events in the early stage are quite complicated. There is so much information that it would be a bit tiring to read logically. If you are reading for a long time, you may forget the early foreshadowing. In addition, there are a large number of typos, missing subjects, and wrong names of characters in the mid-term, adding to the confusion. If it were me, I would suggest slowing down the pace and lengthening the front line. Few characters will appear in the early stage but the background will be explained carefully. A few particularly simple cases can be designed at the beginning to let people gradually get into the atmosphere.
The rhythm of the story about Empress Hui is actually pretty good, probably due to the historical structure of the Qing Dynasty itself, but it was still a bit rushed in the later stages. Anyway, it can be seen that the author has his own thoughts, creativity, and relatively strong literary skills, and is working hard to improve in every novel. But if possible, I hope to edit this article slightly. After all, I really like the setting of this article. I also know that the author is struggling with illness while working hard on writing. Although I know that the author has low platelets, I don't know whether it is a hematopoietic disorder such as leukemia or an immune system disease such as lupus erythematosus. Since I have two relatives and friends who have suffered from these two diseases, when I saw the author's description of the physical condition in his words, I couldn't say that I felt the same way, but I probably paid more attention to the author. I sincerely hope that the author can overcome the disease. I also hope that my thoughts after reading will be encouragement and support for the author in his life.
Wow, I don't know if you can read this comment. Wow, it touches my heart so much. I beg you to write a few more books. Wow, I've been looking for such a good novel for a long time, but I haven't found such a good-looking novel.
Oh my God! I love this book so much! ! ! Why did you only write one book? Why is this book so short? ! It's so painful... I've almost lost my eyes on JJ these days and I can't find a book with a similar setting... I won't consider finishing Hui Fei and write another one for the college entrance exam. I beg you and I'm crying! ! !
I suspect that the heroine is the reincarnation of Po Meng
Ouch! If you are really bored, you can read it to pass the time. If you are serious, don't read it. The logic is dead.
"Three times milk tea" is a big bug for the author~
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It feels like the male protagonist rarely appears and there aren't many romance plots.
I really like big books. Is there any one of this type?
I finished it in one go~ The big books are all very interesting to my appetite. I have caught up with the book on Hui Fei and updated it~ I am planning to go see Red Mansions again.
Woohoo, wow, finished reading! ! I love it so much, so reluctant to part with it!
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Because after reading Empress Hui's book, I fell into the author's trap, so I entered the author's column to make up two completed articles, one was "Salted Fish in the Qing Dynasty" and the other was "This True Daughter of Gold". How can I put it? In these three books, it is obvious that the author's thoughts and writing power can be seen. The author's articles have a very obvious yearning for family, friendship, love and other beautiful emotions in the world. The protagonists and most of the supporting characters in these articles have upright views and unique personalities. I speculate that the author incorporated his own characteristics and desires into several characters when creating them. For example, the female protagonists in the article are both physically weak and handsome, but they are cared for by close relatives, and they have childhood sweethearts, etc. Perhaps because of these characteristics, although the author writes about Jinjiang's cliché themes such as Qingchuan, true and false daughters, etc., There is still a big gap in texture from other cliché and cool articles, such as values, authenticity, sense of logic, etc. These are the characteristics of the author. Looking at these three articles in chronological order, the writing style has made great progress. I don't know whether it is due to self-reflection or the guidance of a big boss. From the beginning, the story of Xianyu showed its aura but the logic jumps and the rhythm is abnormal; to this one, the aura is still the same, and the overall situation is laid out, and the sense of logic is improved, but it is still often out of touch, and there is a slight stream of consciousness in some places; to the story of Empress Hui, the creativity is perfect, the characters are more full, and the rhythm is generally stable and attractive. Of course, these are my personal reading experiences, not that of a professional. Although I have seen the progress of Empress Hui's article, I still want to make some suggestions on this article. After all, I am still looking forward to the revision mentioned in the article. First of all, I am very happy that the author can challenge himself, break out of the structure provided by history, and start to lay out his own world. In fact, it is quite obvious that the author has carefully dealt with the cause and effect story line and world view, because the author's logic is quite clear, but the disadvantage is that these things are not conveyed to the readers very effectively. Maybe the author's idea is to hope that readers can understand or figure it out by themselves, or just make inferences and guess what they mean. But in fact, it's a bit of a taboo in storytelling, the stream of consciousness. It means that the author feels that he has made it clear and clear, but the readers cannot get it at all. This problem is more serious in the Salted Fish chapter, such as the palace fight scene and the like. Empress Hui has made great progress, and there are also this problem, such as Qingli's explanation. But fortunately, the overall story line does not have a stream of consciousness, and there are only some minor problems in the supporting character copies. How to put it this way, appropriate white space can give people unlimited imagination, but too much white space or white space in key places will only make people look uncomfortable. For example, what is the relationship between Ali, Zhili and the female corpse? Who is the Mother Goddess? Why did Yi Hesheng kill gods? Why did he need to sacrifice the swallows? If the mountain gods insulted the idols forty or fifty years ago and disappeared, then why were the swallows born? Did the mountain gods die to protect the swallows or did Xuanwu turn over to protect them? Why did the great uncle sacrifice? It was said that it was to atone for the plot. Did he deliberately not kill Yi Hesheng when he sealed him with death, or was it all his fault that Meng Po entered the mortal world, and that Han Bao was born and so on? ; King Xuan's blood beads were just to attract helpers at the beginning, but Uncle Master deliberately lured Han Bao to inform the world? So what is the live broadcast for? To prepare mentally for the upcoming disaster that the world will face? To be honest, I initially thought it was designed by King Xuan to let everyone know about the existence of ghosts, cause panic among humans, create a gap between the special department and the government, etc. Anyway, there are too many settings and unclear places in the story line, which gives readers a feeling that the framework is very large and the pit is very deep, but it is not filled in. It is interesting but empty and has no clue. If the author wants to revise the article, I think each case needs more pen and ink to detail it. After all, this is a pleasant article of Jinjiang length, not a one-and-a-half-hour mystery movie. I watched the latter three times and it didn't take me too much time to figure out the logic, but I may need to watch the former to have a hearty feeling. Another problem is that the world is currently too big. The author has a perfect God's perspective to describe it, but the reader is a completely blank third party. At the beginning of the chapter, a lot of information about the characters, settings, structure, and plots poured in. It was very confusing. I had to read more than ten chapters to sort out the relationship between the chapters. And it can be felt that the author particularly wants to bury the foreshadowing in very early places. Some foreshadowings can stretch half the article, and there are many details. Without particularly detailed descriptions, there are so many problems. Moreover, the first and second events in the early stage are quite complicated. There is so much information that it would be a bit tiring to read logically. If you are reading for a long time, you may forget the early foreshadowing. In addition, there are a large number of typos, missing subjects, and wrong names of characters in the mid-term, adding to the confusion. If it were me, I would suggest slowing down the pace and lengthening the front line. Few characters will appear in the early stage but the background will be explained carefully. A few particularly simple cases can be designed at the beginning to let people gradually get into the atmosphere. The rhythm of the story about Empress Hui is actually pretty good, probably due to the historical structure of the Qing Dynasty itself, but it was still a bit rushed in the later stages. Anyway, it can be seen that the author has his own thoughts, creativity, and relatively strong literary skills, and is working hard to improve in every novel. But if possible, I hope to edit this article slightly. After all, I really like the setting of this article. I also know that the author is struggling with illness while working hard on writing. Although I know that the author has low platelets, I don't know whether it is a hematopoietic disorder such as leukemia or an immune system disease such as lupus erythematosus. Since I have two relatives and friends who have suffered from these two diseases, when I saw the author's description of the physical condition in his words, I couldn't say that I felt the same way, but I probably paid more attention to the author. I sincerely hope that the author can overcome the disease. I also hope that my thoughts after reading will be encouragement and support for the author in his life.
Wow, I don't know if you can read this comment. Wow, it touches my heart so much. I beg you to write a few more books. Wow, I've been looking for such a good novel for a long time, but I haven't found such a good-looking novel.
Oh my God! I love this book so much! ! ! Why did you only write one book? Why is this book so short? ! It's so painful... I've almost lost my eyes on JJ these days and I can't find a book with a similar setting... I won't consider finishing Hui Fei and write another one for the college entrance exam. I beg you and I'm crying! ! !
I suspect that the heroine is the reincarnation of Po Meng
Ouch! If you are really bored, you can read it to pass the time. If you are serious, don't read it. The logic is dead.
"Three times milk tea" is a big bug for the author~ cup
It feels like the male protagonist rarely appears and there aren't many romance plots.
I really like big books. Is there any one of this type?
I finished it in one go~ The big books are all very interesting to my appetite. I have caught up with the book on Hui Fei and updated it~ I am planning to go see Red Mansions again.
Woohoo, wow, finished reading! ! I love it so much, so reluctant to part with it!