The Kingdom of Locke: I'm a Loli Fan

It is one of the few books on Tomato that writes about the world of Locke Kingdom, and overall it looks pretty good. The overall evaluation can be given to 4 stars. The protagonist joins the black witch group at the beginning, and his ability is super power (even his heartbeat can be paused.) In the early stage, he mainly focuses on developing the black witch group, and there are relatively few elf elements (like Luo Ying, Devil Ding, Duck Jiji, Snow Shadow Doll, etc.). If it does not follow the main plot, the heroine may be Little Locke? The protagonist is written more like a human being. To be honest, it doesn't matter if the protagonist is the boss of a black witch group and it's a bit bad. Also, isn't it too fast to write that the protagonist wants to establish a constitutional monarchy at the beginning, and then later writes that the protagonist wants everyone to be equal? Then there are the branch plots interspersed in the middle. There is nothing wrong with opening a fast food restaurant, but it is a bit too homogenous with other other world novels. The part about killing the poachers is a bit inexplicably connected to the main plot of the game (see the description, does the protagonist fly directly there?) Overall, it's a level with flaws that don't hide its flaws. The rating should be 8~9. For the time being, it can be regarded as one of the best fan fictions in the world of Locke Kingdom on Tomato. The rest of the writing is okay, and the author has basically found his own feelings. New readers are advised to start reading after the Black Witches split, around Chapter 34, and skip all the speeches in Chapter 38. The low stars in the comment area are basically due to problems with these chapters. Did you actually change the introduction? What else can I say? The character of the protagonist is fine, so I gave it five stars. I would have given this introduction five stars if I had written it like this. There is no need to mention that the protagonist is Jiahao in the comment section. The protagonist of One Punch Man is transformed into a native of the motherland. This is what I want to see. Another point is that the good guy protagonist and the villain protagonist killing elves are completely different concepts to me. In the past, the protagonist rarely did anything that was right for the kingdom and was a pure and good citizen. Now that he has successfully turned into a villain, it is different.

It's pretty good. It's not as exaggerated as some people say. There are indeed some places where the writing is not good and there are some minor poisonous points. For example, the protagonist is very powerful alone, but he keeps correcting it in daily life, and the bad guys are not like bad guys, and the good guys are not like good people (I personally don't think this is a bad point). At the moment, I just hope to launch the Yellow Turban Uprising as soon as possible [laughs]

It's a pity that the mobile game has exploded. The author could consider writing a peach-picking plot that would be a hit [face covering]

I suggest that the title of the book be changed to "I am in Locke and Dang Jia Xu". The following is the original text ["The next best option is to rely solely on the force of numbers. Drive the people in the villages you defeated to the front of the battle, and let them rush to the front, using their lives to consume the arrows and spells of the defenders. When the opponent runs out of ammunition, your main force can press forward to harvest." "Or you can simply tie the family members of the defenders to chariots and force them to open the city."]

So delicious... The protagonist should rule the world... There are too many poisonous points

It's interesting, but it's big. Red is not suitable for Locke. Don't mess around. Some systems are okay, but some systems are not. Just like in the extraordinary world, people have different talents and resources. I ask you the same resources to cultivate people with extraordinary talents and people with poor talents. If they fight for a while, who do you think can win? Some worlds are not suitable for red, just like Warhammer. If you go to Warhammer to become famous, do you think you can do it? Just like Locke, I am an ordinary person. My whole family was harmed by nobles. When I grow up, I will become a great magister and come back for revenge. Then you ask me to be tried by law. Then my enemy is a legion commander. He has accepted twenty great magisters and is still loyal to me. Do you think you will come back to me to seek justice?

The king forces you to kneel with worldly authority and false reputation, Noxus wants you to stand. The same goes for the protagonist, who wants to make people stand up. It's well written, it's eye-catching at least.

Overall, it's okay, but it's a little bit toxic, and you can actually make changes after reading the comments. After all, you should listen to most readers' suggestions. If you don't like reading it, don't write it. Unless you have written an outline, and you don't have the ability to change it, I think it will be changed to five stars in the follow-up or continue to be deducted, right? As for the quarrel in the comment area, I think it is unnecessary. To use an analogy, let others call their dog bite. If a dog bites you, you will definitely want to beat the dog to death. Even if the dog you raise at home bites a thief, in some places the dog will be killed because it bit a person. This is like someone saying that it is okay to beat a person, but beating a dog is abusing the dog. As for not biting, the dog is going to bite you, so what's wrong with you hitting him? Do you want him to bite you? As for beating him to death, he was just using too much force to protect himself, and the owner of the dog was also a trafficker. He may have not only bit one person, but also helped the owner catch someone.

Start chanting: Are day and night equal? Are the righteous and the sinners equal? If man is born weak, from which god should the weak find peace? O triple-faced soul, please listen to my question. If the power and wealth of the strong can cover up their crimes, who can judge them? If the weak must survive at any cost, who can vouch for them? If the purest souls can make mistakes, who can comfort them.

The most unique point is that he considers issues from the perspective of Locke at the bottom, turning the black wizard group into a reformist group, which objectively promotes the development and reform of the system. In addition, the description of the sacrifice of jealousy is impressive. Even in Lokrian, the revolution will be bloody.