Stealing the Show in a Manga on the Brink of Collapse

Not bad. The writing style was slightly flawed in the early stage, with a strong student tone. Sometimes the plot that should be quite enjoyable was a bit unsatisfactory, but it gradually improved later on. In terms of creativity, in this kind of forum article, this aspect is considered special. After all, it is an auxiliary perspective. And there are all kinds of ingenious ideas in handling various relationships, which looks very comfortable. Then there is the direction of the plot... The author seems to be really not good at expressing the changes in the character's emotions. When writing about knives or heart-warming scenes, it still feels a bit cold and stiff, but this kind of thing has improved a bit later on, and overall it is still interesting to watch.

Just this height difference and age difference, cool! The smallest in the school but a very talented monster, healing + telekinesis control, delicious ٩(◦`꒳´◦)۶ Ahhhhh, I really like the cat character as the main character. I really don't want it to be too offensive if the shot is a bit dark. [Adoration] The chapters are a bit short at the moment, only 40, which is not enough, ah ah, falling in love with serialized books is my destiny [crying] Also, the author is so cute that I am so cute. Teachers who like to send emojis are cute little cakes [shy]

Good-looking and good-looking🥰 ˆ😊ˆDisadvantages: There are too many large paragraphs of text in the first few pictures. My eyes hurt when I read them at first, but this one is still easier to accept. Then there is too little! If it's not enough to read, the author should work harder! ੧😭੧ ღ💌ღ Advantages: At present, I think the writing is relatively good. The large sections of text in later chapters have been significantly reduced, making them easier to read. The author is also very active. Those who like the author to be more active and answer questions can take a look😘༄ This should be considered a long review, right? And it's the first one😚ヾ

It still feels very good, but it's not pleasant to watch as an infant now, hahaha. The description is very detailed and has a sense of picture.

First of all, the theme of this book is very good. I personally like to read this type of book, but I think there are some shortcomings. It can be seen that the author really wants to write the protagonist's character. Now in my opinion, the image of the male protagonist is relatively clear, and the image of other characters is not perfect in transformation. For example, Gu, I didn't understand it a bit. In the early stage, he was a little cold and then he was a little special to the protagonist. , The author said that he wanted to write about the feeling of amusing children, but the connection here is not perfect, the transition is a bit too fast, but it has a rather greasy feeling. In addition, in terms of plot, some descriptions can actually be less detailed, and the forums and comics can be appropriately reduced, otherwise the readers will be a bit tired. In addition, the four protagonists are on the battlefield. I think the scene of the fight is not reasonable, especially when one person is seriously injured? It just feels a little weird, but it's obvious that the newcomer's writing style is very good! Keep up the good work, you can improve! [Sending Hearts]

It looks good, but there are too few discussions about the protagonist in the forum. I thought there was no such person before. The protagonist appeared as if he did not appear. Only five sentences were mentioned, and two sentences were still negative comments. When the forum described appearance, everyone except the protagonist was mentioned...

It's very beautiful. I don't know why no one has watched it. The rating is so low. The author's expression is very awesome. I feel like there are only two weeks left in the next big game of chess. It shocked me. It was very beautiful when I saw this.

It's very interesting. I like the story where the older brother controls the younger brother but has no CP ~ The male protagonist is a shota maomao, very cute

Generally speaking, the writing is okay, but I feel that the interaction between the protagonist and Gu Jinchuan is a bit too close, and it is easy for people to misunderstand that they are a couple. After changing this point, I think it will be fine in 8.7. It's well written, keep up the good work! But the narrative could be a little richer. . Of course it's also very good. In fact, the author can try a foreshadowing pen,

I kept crying. When I saw the ending, I really felt that Xiaobao was so wronged. He obviously has money, power, parents and brother who love him, and he also has very good qualifications. However, he is still a little baby, but he has to take on responsibilities that are not his own and become the savior. But it ended in a bit of a hurry, but that's understandable. It's just a pity. Dad, mom, brother, Rin, Xiaolong, and probably many, many more people will end up living in pain. Some meaningless questions (may contain minor spoilers), did Xiaobao go home in the end? Has everyone freed themselves from guilt and started a new life? Do bad people or things get the punishment they deserve? Did Xiaojiu finally prove himself and the planet?