The Supporting Male Character Never Planned to Derail the Plot

⭕ Set to attract ★★★★★ ——Brother's BL + sister's GL, the ancient Feng Aotian from the brother's perspective, the main plot of brother and sister looking for relatives + love and peace (world upgrading), in short, it is a story where the brother controls the sister, controls the younger brother, and rushes to each other, which is relatively new. ⭕ Plot rhythm ★★☆☆☆ ——The early stage is good, but the details in the middle and later stages are not appropriate, the transition is unnatural, and some plots are a bit boring. ⭕Character creation ★★★★☆ ——It's very lively, but it's a little hard to remember the repeated settings when there are too many people. ⭕ Emotional transition ★★★☆☆ ——Actually, the change is a bit sudden, but it's okay to have been together for so long. The loyal dog Green Tea 1 × the fishing system dom0, the younger brother is a love-minded, and the older brother is pure doting, all potential setbacks are eliminated in seconds. ⭕ Smooth writing ★★★☆☆ ——Basically no problem is enough. ⭕ Overall impression ★★★★☆ ——The narrative needs to be improved, but I like the setting so much. The combat power/hole cards are always there, so there is no sense of crisis, it's more relaxed. ⭐ Personal rating 8.9 ——Thank you for finishing this book, keep up the good work

Recommend a good book, the plot is very interesting, the background setting of ancient female videos, it seems that the author really likes this kind of novel about the heroine who is promoted by the academy to be favored by the group. The younger sister's CP is the same sex, and the brother's CP is also the same sex. Seeing that the latest chapter is still dealing with the brother and sister's vests, it is quite dragging anyway. There is no role for another male protagonist in this chapter, which is not completely absent. It feels like it is about the brother slowly discovering his feelings. In fact, the author could have written another novel from the younger sister's perspective. My brother is more comfortable or not, but my sister is really happy. You can write articles about group favorites who like to read the brother's perspective. Those who like to read cool stories about two male protagonists or sweet pets should endure the embarrassment, because it's not that fun. There is also the phenomenon that the main characters on both sides of the brother and sister have duplicate characters, making it difficult to distinguish who is who.

The development of the plot is not slow, not boring, and not watery. Don't be misled by the ratings. It's a very good article. Xiao Su's image is also well portrayed. He is a person who is keen on raising cubs and controlling girls. Hahahahaha, the system is also good, but it would be better with Twelve. Haha, I also really found the plot when Master Hua found Xiao Su, the first disciple of the sect is my brother? I'm looking forward to the plot of meeting my sister later. Don't be misled by the ratings. It's a very good article and the author's writing is not bad. Hurry up and you won't lose money if you invest.

I'm here to contribute a long review ① [Character creation] The personalities of the two protagonists are relatively distinct, and it can be seen that they are written with care, especially the possessiveness of Twelve, which is a special point for me. However, the label says micro-group portraits. I feel that for micro-group portraits, the shaping of the secondary protagonists in this book is not very obvious. The author did not put much effort into the description of the secondary characters, and I can't feel the three-dimensional vividness of the secondary characters. ② [Plot] I personally think the pace of this book is relatively fast, and the author's connection is okay, so it feels like it's not dragging out, and the writing is smooth and natural. I like this kind of fast-paced writing, but there are some places, like the ten-year process of becoming a god, that I think can even be written in more detail. The plot can be richer and more detailed. ③OverallThe advantages probably outweigh the disadvantages. I mainly read fairy tales. I have basically read all the two-male immortal novels on the market. The setting alone is amazing. This one is a double-strength one. I felt so happy reading it. Ps (Boss, please take a look at this book. I am very picky about articles. This book is really good. There are too few people following it. Please support this book. At least it should be finished for me and don't drop it)

I like the character design very much, and I'm really looking forward to the scene where the protagonist meets his sister. I just need to reflect on why the new books I'm looking for are all with 5 or 60 chapters. They're too short, and I cry.

Let's talk about the plot first. It's very novel. The protagonist, the demon cultivator, doesn't copy other versions of the demon cultivator who do all kinds of evil. It can be seen that the author has carefully polished the overall setting. However, the collective amnesia plot in the middle and later stages, to be honest, I don't like it very much. It is indeed very logical. There are a lot of characters, and most of them only appear for a short time. From my point of view, the author wants to write the feeling that everyone is his own protagonist. Well, it echoes the final ending. However, as a reader, the relationship between the characters is easy to be confused. Many characters have their own shining points, but they are not distinct enough and appear not often enough, so it is easy to forget. The author can actually reduce them a bit. In terms of the author's writing style, it's pretty good. I could read it smoothly before Chapter 180. After Chapter 180, I forgot too many characters, so I didn't read it so smoothly (Note: I only spent 4 days reading it). Overall, the writing is flawless and the plot is logical. There are too many characters and most of them have very few appearances. It is easy to get confused and forget.

I don't know why the rating is so low, but this book is really good. First of all, the plot is not sluggish and the pace is very comfortable to watch. The character of the protagonist is also very good. [Blow kiss] My language expression skills are not good, but the portrayal is very good.

So far, I think this article is really good. The plot is not draggy at all, and there are a lot of laughs. You can read it when you are depressed. There is also Xiao Su's white hair. I really like this kind of thing (｡>∀<｡) It's still a fishing style but innocent. I particularly like this type that is both good and fun-loving. It took me a day to tie it up. Of course, there is still a lot of room for improvement. For example, in fighting scenes, when Twelve is dueling with the demon king, he can use some short sentences or add more fighting verbs to make it more immersive. There is also an introduction to the famous scene where Twelve and his sister are "playing". You can also use more verbs to describe the scene, which is not too difficult. It needs to be pointed out directly that Twelve has no killing intent. It is best for readers to experience it directly from the description. That is, instead of directly saying what Twelve is like, write about how he lets go. You can practice it specifically in the future. I hope this book will get better and betterヽ(=^･ω･^=) ps: I'm not saying that the author's writing is not good, nor am I writing in disguise. I'm just giving the author some suggestions for improvement and improvement.

The author's writing style is very good. I've read about Jing Dian, and I'm about halfway through it. So far, it's great. It's in line with my taste, and it's a bit cool. It's just that this attack is too brother-controlled until now. I hope I don't have to use it [Adoration] Sorry, amnesia is really my thunderbolt, and it is the biggest thunderbolt. It is more thunderous than knives and abuse articles, so I gave up when I saw it.

Very nice! I just like this kind of unpretentious writing style! The plot has ups and downs without dragging on. I haven't finished it yet. I almost ran away after reading the emotional line. All in all, it's super interesting and highly recommended! ! Not too cruel, just a light and sweet text, sweet and reassuring [shy]