Dou Po: Xiao Yan, I Am Your Second Master

The writing is still good, but I saw the author's comment in chapter 144. If you write about the world in the future and plan to fight the Emperor according to Tudou's setting, will it be equivalent to the Supreme? To be honest, Tudou's setting is very contradictory. Dou Sheng has a sea of ​​fighting energy, and the Supreme has a sea of ​​supreme beings. The Three Small Difficulties of the Supreme roughly correspond to the nine-turn sainthood stage. In the original work of Dou Emperor, there is a ten thousand feet Dharmakaya. According to the description in the Great Master, the Supreme Dharma Appearance is so high. Moreover, Emperor Dou can command an area of ​​heaven and earth. The Earth Supreme is also described in this way in The Great Lord, but the Supreme is not so powerful.

The poisonous point is that the general in the dwarf, if you accept a five-star Dou Zun who was seriously injured during his life and died for a long time, you can directly instill five-star Dou Zun into the eight-star Dou Emperor, and then be suppressed by Yun Yun himself into a two-star Dou Zun. This is very poisonous. The protagonist is slowly upgraded there (although the upgrade is very fast), and the others are upgraded so fiercely. Yun Yun was much lower than the protagonist when he first appeared, and now he is one step higher than the protagonist. I can only say that the protagonist is a pure clown. If any of the supporting characters need to be upgraded in the future, just find the Lord of Skyfire (the old man lying under the lava lake of Canaan College) to fill him with fighting spirit. If you can have this plot in the cultivation stream, I can only say that you are a human being. There was also a plot about subduing the strange fire that was not handled well, it was too deliberate. The protagonist, a seventh-level alchemist, made alchemy for his teacher, and almost killed his teacher. The problem was pointed out by Bai Lao who was not an alchemist. As long as the anxious atmosphere was exaggerated, because the protagonist was eager to save the teacher and was anxious, I would not feel that it was a drama.

A wave of emotional scenes sent me away directly I even said I didn't know how to write but I still wrote it, and the main character was written as a dead dog.

The idea is good, and it can be seen that it was written with care, but I feel that the author is really a newbie, and his writing skills are seriously lacking. He cannot write the dialogue between the characters at all, chats awkwardly throughout, and cannot reasonably arrange the conflicts between the characters. The turns are blunt, and the character creation is not clear and characteristic, let alone the characters. The facial makeup is changed, and there is no facial makeup. After reading it for a while, I felt that the protagonist could be Xiao Li, Xiao Li could be Xiao Zhan, Xiao Zhan could be Xiao Lin, Xiao Lin could be Li Ma, or anyone. There is no identifiable characteristic, which makes people have no desire to read after reading the first chapter.

1. The two paragraphs with Yun Yun in the Warcraft Mountains and the Yunlan Sect, I said I didn't know how to write and then forced myself to write them, and Yun Yun was completely useless. 2. It was decades ago. The Alchemist Association, Black Corner Domain Sect, Jialan Academy, etc. Were all the same. In the first few pictures, someone asked why Fa Ma was ranked fifth or sixth decades ago, and why it hasn't increased in decades. I'm still thinking that not everyone is talented and can advance to higher levels over time, and I really can't fool myself anymore. 3. The protagonist is the protagonist. Although it would be very comfortable if there is no villain to provoke mindlessly and then pretend to be slapped in the face, but now as a person, I have a friendly attitude towards the protagonist. It is not good to hear that when I see the protagonist, I will become a licker. I just refined a few elixirs, and with a little talent, the academy wanted to give the Fallen Heart Flame to the protagonist like a pug. It's ridiculously smooth. When the protagonist goes to a certain place, the locals have to offer the most precious skills, strange fires, and various resources. The treasures of heaven and earth that haven't grown out of the ground are about to appear prematurely. It is said that the protagonist of the novel has a calamity constitution, and there will be difficulties wherever he goes. The protagonist solves the difficulties and gets things, but this is not the method. This book has no system, but it is no different from the system. "Hey, sign in to Jialan Academy, and publish the task: Join Jialan Academy, show your talent and refine some suitable elixirs, reward: Fallen Heart Flame."

To be honest, if you can't write an emotional scene, don't write it, just c. The protagonist gives me the same feeling as Teddy. He likes a girl when he sees it, but he doesn't understand his talent?

If you don't know how to write emotional dramas, then don't write them. Ignore those disgusting readers. Tell me what the purpose of writing the character Yun Yun is.

The choice of Yun Yunchun as the heroine is useless.

Brothers, help yourself if you need it (make up the numbers later)

Who is the heroine of the author? Can you tell me