The World of Ten Directions, All the Ways United into One

On the whole, it's okay, and it's logically self-contained, so it's okay, but there are some inexplicable things in the 100 pictures, and it's not even good. In Chapter 92, a portal fell from the sky, like a meteorite, and hit a woman's body, annihilating the woman's soul in an instant. "Liu Feng'er, you were directly killed by me, so you owed a cause and effect. When I realize the Tao and transcendence, I will resurrect you and give you a golden body and Tao fruit..."? ? ? Then a few men and women came, and it was a bit inexplicable that the pig's feet fulfilled their wishes, and they said they were destined. Moreover, the concept of cause and effect is a Buddhist theory, which is not found in Taoism. Taoism is about responsibility, and it is the responsibility of children and future generations. And for no reason, the protagonist practiced in another world and killed many people when he was a general. They were innocent to a certain extent. They were just soldiers. It is very baffling to start talking about this at this time. Then it needs to be resurrected. . . . (Don't involve too much morality when writing novels, otherwise you will be confused in the circle of morality. Unless you have a clear central point, you can focus on this central point later, and you only need to write about this central point once. If you write too much, it will become a soliloquy. I don't even believe the words.) The second one, "These two women told me this, is it because of their friendship two months ago? Then when we meet in the future, we will be just passers-by..." It is a bit inexplicable to be arrogant at the front, but then start to talk about their friendship later, even if the transition is not smooth enough. There is also a sect that I don't know why it is described. I suddenly saw a feeling of a small sect. The description of this sect gives people this feeling. Another thing is that the realm is not obvious enough. The gap between the protagonist and them and so on. What is the difference between this realm and this realm? I don't want to say these things, and I don't need to say a lot. Just talk about the previous realm. Also, when writing a novel, it is best to have a complete plan, so that it is easier to write. Don't just write whatever you want. This way, you have a plan.

This author is not good. Before chapter 50, it was a masterpiece, before chapter 100, it was good, but after chapter 130, it was completely useless. Martial arts relies on writing and pays more attention to detailed descriptions. The author does this very well. Xianxia, ​​on the other hand, relies on setting, and requires a macro-feeling. Of course, the details cannot be ignored. Author, the Xianxia written by you is like a fantasy novel.

So far it's pretty good, except for some weird places, overall it's good and very appetizing😯

Come on, come on, come on

Come on, come on, come on