The King's Avatar: A Sword of Wind and Thunder

I can't bear it anymore! I have been reading novels with Qimao for almost four years. I logged in for the first time just for this newbie! (The following opinions are addressed to the author): From an objective point of view, the idea of ​​fanfiction is very good, and the number of words is about the same. Half of the early stage is basically borrowed from TV series, and the urban cool stories are interspersed with plots. It is okay to take the NBA as an example. It can be understood as loving basketball. There is nothing wrong with liking the NBA. It is not good to criticize CP. Everyone has what they like to read. Some people may think that e-sports articles should not be It doesn't matter if there should be CP, and some people just want CP. At the same time, the author also said that fan fiction is about realizing dreams. These can be highlighted, and the above is understandable. After all, fan fiction is about the word "joy". Just explain your ideas clearly and someone will feel happy watching it. To put it in the most unpleasant words, when you write fan fiction, the pen is in your hand, you can write whatever you want. However, what follows is a question of the author's character and subconscious quality. 1. Professional e-sports player, author, do you understand the meaning of these words? Wu Chen cheated, which was adapted from the TV series, but you said that you have never read the original work, but only read the anime and fan fiction written in the TV series. I won't say anything, but in the chapter of Baihua, several professional players surrendered directly when they couldn't beat the game? Don't you use your brain when writing an article? Let's not talk about whether to be punished or not, whether to retire or not? Let's just talk about the e-sports article "The Master". What kind of brain did you use to write that professional e-sports players simply surrendered because they were afraid of losing face? If you like watching the NBA, you will understand the meaning of this sportsmanship better. You can never give up until the last moment. Even though I know I am losing, I have to lose with dignity and die standing! This is the spirit of sportsmanship. Write something exciting in life, with a plot of Dragon King. Fans of second-generation creations can understand it, but don't forget that you are basing your work on an e-sports novel that emphasizes sportsmanship and fighting spirit. 2. Besides, Tang Rou spoke out against three people because of her arrogance. I would like to ask the author, have you really read the original work? Tang Rou is arrogant, she is a very proud person at heart, but in the portrayal of Phalaenopsis, she is a person who dares to love and hate, and can win and lose. She will not accept other people's pity and disrespect for her. For her, going all out is the best respect for her. Even if she loses, she will find the reason from herself. Look at what you wrote? The fifth match within five games was against Team Yi Zhan, who was an old friend of Team Xingxin. Tang Rou knew about this before she threatened to challenge three. Why, Yi Zhan gave her a break? I can tell you clearly that Tang Rou is not this kind of person, and she doesn't even bother to do such things. You can't even understand the most basic character of a character despite being so smart, and yet you've written a novel? Come on, let's take a step back. Even if Tang Rou really did such a thing, the protagonist, in order to protect Tang Rou, bribed Loulan Zhan with skill points and guides to make people let him go. Do you know what this concept is? In professional competitions, this is called match-fixing. Ye Xiu is a person who values ​​glory as much as his life. How can he allow his team and his team members to do such a thing? You are not writing a fanfic, you are insulting the book "The Master". You do not understand the word "professional e-sports" at all. You and the book you wrote are difficult to evaluate and extremely disgusting! 3. Finally, a summary is that I have no brains. I think I should watch some TV series and read some interesting articles, and then I just make up the word count and plagiarize the ideas. If you create a second fanfic, you will either realize your dream based on some regrets of the original work, or you will fill in the pits and create based on the magically modified parts of the TV series and animation. You have no ideas at all, and you have nothing of your own. You just make up the word count and plagiarize it, just to eat this bowl. Novel writers, if you get this dead royalties, there is no lower limit, no shame at all, you really owe the original author Phalaenopsis to give you a lawyer's letter, suing you for insulting the character image, magically changing the original work, insulting sports and e-sports. There is nothing wrong with the number of words. It is not shameful to earn rice, but to insult a literary work for the sake of rice is really disgusting, disgusting, disgusting, late in the morning, foreign things!

Let's make a fair evaluation. When it comes to reading fan fiction, the main thing is to enjoy it. Don't keep emphasizing on comparing it with the original work. If you want to compare it with the original work, then don't read the fan fiction. In fact, the author's writing is generally pretty good. The biggest problem is It's the author's fault for the word count. There are indeed some places where things like names are too repetitive. Overall, it's good. I hope the author will continue to work hard. If it doesn't work, you can consider writing fanfics like (Versatile Mage) or some long anime.

From a fan perspective, I personally think it looks great, but there is also a shortcoming in that a lot of the battles are just mentioned in one stroke. However, if I really had to write it, I would not have to write more than 5 million words. I feel that what is missing is the details of the battles, and the competition for rewards after the Honor event. I think I can also focus on describing it, but the advantage is that there are quite a lot of them in daily life. It is worthy of praise. Like many fairy tales that end after becoming invincible, I still prefer the description of returning to normality after becoming invincible. Although this book is a cool text with a system, you can still see the growth trajectory. You did not become invincible at the beginning. Through growth, you slowly competed with the great gods and finally broke away from Ye Shen and led the team to win the championship. Compared with other full-time fan follow-ups, this book is considered a masterpiece, but it would be better if the confrontation battles such as the World Invitational Tournament could be described in more detail. Anyway, thank you for accompanying me.

Many of the original characters have gone astray. How could Ye Busha take the Thousand Chance Umbrella and attack Su Mucheng all over again for the sake of his old friend? The protagonist is also written as a dick/silk without any system, just a passerby. After watching dozens of pictures, I couldn't stand it. I skipped to the All-Star story. Half of the plot was about people talking in the waterway. Let's watch the World Championship later.

I feel that the writing is not as good as the original work, and I have to steal Ye Xiu's role, and I don't have any opportunities to create by myself. Moreover, you are not a Sanren. The weapon you use is just left to transform. Are all other clubs useless? They won't be able to make a weapon that can change forms in 10 years. Even if others can't make an artifact like the Thousand Planes Umbrella, they can at least change one form. You're stupid if you change one form. Not only do you look stupid, but those clubs are also stupid.

Most of the article is just water, with useless dialogue, forced pretentiousness, forced humor and forced sensationalism. It has no nutrition but is embarrassing at the same time. It's not like a second creation of a novel, but more like it was written along the lines of a TV series. As the protagonist, if he doesn't have a system, he has almost no chance to do his own thing. To be honest, the system's sense of presence is not very high, with dozens or even a hundred pictures only appearing once. Next is the character design. I just scribbled out some of the details in front of it. I really can't stand it when I try to forcefully round it out after the character design is broken. Wu Chen has written it like that before, and it is completely inconsistent with the original work. You can just continue writing your character. It is normal for the second creator to have his own ideas. It is not unacceptable to make changes to some original characters that are not very important. If he turns back, he can still be cleared and forced to come back. No matter how good Ye Xiu's character is, he must have a bottom line. The author also knew that his writing was broken. When he turned around, he immediately asked Wu Chen to tell Ye Xiu to wake up. I laughed when I saw it.

The two protagonists look strange, and their family background has been so improved... It's just wealthy young men who don't want to inherit the family fortune and go to Internet cafes to experience life... The first impression of the male protagonist's emotional line is that of a shy and innocent big boy. The more you look at it later, the more he smells like a licking dog... If Ye Xiu didn't have a family beauty, with the male protagonist's performance, state, and conversation, he was hiding his body... Does he look like a loser who only knows how to play games? And it was Ye Xiu who helped Tang Rou more. Ye Xiu also understood Tang Rou's character and spoke naturally, which shocked her more and left the deepest impression. If you want to NTR... It's useless for the male protagonist to have a system...

Hydrology, hydrology, hydrology, it's so serious. Nonsense conversations that have nothing to do with the plot can go on for several chapters. Even chatting over a meal can lead to several chapters. The plot copied from the original work can be copied and forcibly stuffed with a bunch of hydrology. Wow, this book actually comes with a mobile phone for Ye Xiu! ! ! The protagonist's system can give rewards both in real life and in online games. In the Honor game, rewards are sent directly to the backpack. The author said that he would change the plot and so on, which is understandable as a fanfic. After reading it, I found out that part of the plot of the original Ye Xiu was imposed on the protagonist, making Ye Xiu seem to be stupid. Then the protagonist is still not as good as the original Ye Xiu, and he has to rely on Ye Xiu to save the day. I have only read novels and anime, so after reading the commentary, I realized that some of the plots were adapted from TV series... I heard that the filming of the TV series was terrible... The plot of the All-Star Game, including Ye Xiulong's raising his head, was written in the same way as Shi. It didn't ignite at all. This section was not as good as copying the original work or anime, it was too different. In order to highlight the protagonist's powerful combo skills, Damo Guyan, who secretly learned two combo skills, killed Lord Grim in the first fight with the Sanren... This is equivalent to greatly weakening the flexibility of the perverted Sanren in the original work. It is too much to say that he did not suffer a disadvantage in the first encounter. The character settings have also been modified. I have read the original work, and some of the characters in this book have been changed so that they do not match the settings in the original work. The setting of Chen Guo in the original work is not like someone who loses a bet and makes excuses for cheating, but the description in this book is like this. Although he didn't cheat in the end, he still added conditions. Even if he used the reason of not reasoning with women, it was too far-fetched. The setting of Tang Rou has also been changed. She is also a rebellious character who ran away from home. In the original novel, her father supports her in everything and she is free to do whatever she wants. Moreover, Tang Rou has become an unreliable person, and has acted like letting go of things after agreeing to something. The protagonist is still licking and forgiving without thinking, and the characters are all distorted...

I think this book is very good

The first part: discovering talents, forming a team, and making the jungle area look good. The middle part: establishing a team is a bit complicated (professional player introduction, historical grievances, city history and culture, game map introduction, etc.). The end: The World Invitational Tournament is fast and detailed. Although many of them are passed by in one stroke, there are still exciting things to see. Finally, a five-time championship team is created (10, 12.13.14, 16), And the love and honor of most great gods have been fulfilled.