My Wealthy Era

Chapter 23 The protagonist has to play with women. Even if he was a killer in his previous life and hung his head on his belt all day long, it will not change the fact that the protagonist is not serious about relationships and is a loyal man. He has become a scumbag in the eyes of many girls. The author will lose a large number of book fans! Tsk, scumbag! A person that every girl hates, even if he is very talented!

Let me tell you, old scumbag, I spent three hours reading this book carefully last night. Overall, it is good. I originally wanted to tell you today, but you are not online. After thinking about it, I will leave you a long comment. First of all, the first point is that the first ten or so chapters feel too rushed. I know that your writing style is good. It can be seen from "Heng Ji" that you deliberately lost your writing style in writing this book, and you also pursued a sense of rhythm in this book. It can be seen that you put great care into writing this book. Entertainment articles are currently popular in urban areas. This is a big trend. Entertainment articles are becoming popular one after another. They are fast-paced and more exciting. This is the main reason for their popularity. Let me also talk about my feelings after reading your book. In the first ten chapters, your article is indeed fast-paced, but it is almost too much. You do not handle the linking of the novel well. It is a bit like keeping a running account. To put it in layman's terms, it means that the sense of immersion is not good. It seems boring and boring, and it cannot lead you into the identity of the pig's feet. To be honest, the first few chapters are very bad and fail to arouse the readers' emotions. Even if you force it in, it still feels awkward. The first few chapters of a book are particularly important. In your book, the first few chapters are not handled well, and the sense of rhythm is not adequate. On the contrary, the following dozens of chapters are not bad. I suggest you revise it a little, change the following, deal with the plot, add more psychological descriptions of the characters, and slow down the overall rhythm. The second point is that your sense of conflict is not strong enough, which is also a problem in the early stage. The novel has a main line, and the main line talks about what the pig's feet are going to do and what they want to get. The novel moves from Wenchuan to the city and then to Beijing. The overall contradiction is not strong enough. This is not a big problem. You can add a little more of this type of element later. The third point is the issue of descriptive techniques. Maybe you want to speed up the pace of the plot. In the early stage of the novel, the entire plot screen jumps are hard to follow, and the thinking is a bit sluggish. It's like the Wenchuan address, and suddenly the opening of the good voice is opened. In this regard, it is a bit confusing, and there is not even a transition period in the middle. This is a flaw in the first three chapters. It is estimated that a lot of readers are lost at this point. Regarding this point, we can deal with it, for example, after the plot scene jumps, add pig's feet's psychological description, narrate memories or something. Or maybe give a little emotional description of the character of Pig's Foot, and some of Pig's Foot's inner feelings during this half-month period. This not only strengthens the characterization, but also gives readers a sense of involvement. Fourth, in fact, the readability of the entire novel is quite good, especially in the later stages, but it is still a scumbag. You can still strengthen and deal with this aspect! How to strengthen? How to deal with it? It's simple, suspenseful. The suspense technique is to leave the suspense of the next chapter at the end of the chapter. After reading a chapter, a reader's whole brain and eyesight will take a break and think about the content of the next chapter. If this technique is added, the reader's sense of expectation can be enhanced! This is also an effective technique for first-class authors to retain many readers. Fifth, regarding the overall problem of the novel, I read this novel very carefully yesterday, and there were no minor flaws or newcomer problems. However, some personal habits appear in the novel. The momentum of the entire novel has not been created. How can I say this? For example, many people have read "The Immortal Rebellion". From the very beginning, the entire novel creates a feeling that all living beings want to become immortals, and everyone is working hard for this goal. Therefore, when readers have the courage to enter, a kind of aura of becoming an immortal and defying heaven comes out. Of course, I am talking about the general aspect. The problem with your novel is that the vaginal area cannot stir emotions! Take the urban entertainment article "Entertaining All Mankind" as an example. He really describes the protagonist's dazzling movements on the stage. He does not show much. He mainly describes the emotions of the audience. When he competes, he compares the performance of other players and the opponents who improvise pig feet. This All the foreshadowing is just for the protagonist to crush his opponent directly after the game. The ending is clear to all readers, and the author also writes it very clearly. Everyone can see it, but this way it can bring out the readers' feelings and mobilize the readers' emotions.

This book is the most enjoyable book I have ever read, bar none.