Joyful Reverence

Ambiguity with too many female characters, too many emotional dramas

Why should Luo Qing be written like an idiot... It is not so easy to write an unruly and willful character...

It's a summary, but it can also be regarded as a suggestion. I hope the author can take a look: First, after watching it for so long, I found that there are very few fighting scenes, and I feel that the protagonist is just a quick shooter. He either misses the key moments or ends it quickly. The fighting scenes are not attractive at all. Is this still a cultivation novel? This is a farming article! When I read the introduction, I was really looking forward to what it would be like when the protagonist uses the music of the earth to fight. But after watching it for so long, there were only two fights, and each one disappeared after a while. . . (There are so many songs out there, the only one that feels new to me is Caiyun Chasing the Moon, which became Shenfa Song. The rest are not new at all... It feels no different from reading urban entertainment articles.) This disappears for a while because every time I see GC, when I am about to destroy the enemy, the enemy is not destroyed (in the first fight, the villain escaped because he couldn't beat it) or is not destroyed by the protagonist (in the second time, Brother Lu was swallowed by the space crack). It feels like you are enjoying yourself, but someone pours a basin of cold water on you, and the excitement disappears immediately. Secondly, every time when new music is to be released, how do you lay the groundwork in front of it, including all kinds of high-end music, fairy music, divine music, heavenly music, etc., And finally come out with something like Little Apple? It doesn't match the previous foreshadowing at all, okay? It's like before a blind date, the introducer keeps praising the other person for how beautiful and good-looking they are, but when they meet, they are all fat and round! ! ! It doesn't require a lot of high-end music, and there's no need to make such a vulgar one either, okay! Although it is to foreshadow Zuyinguo's love for being flattered, but for a fruit that is bound to be eaten, is it necessary to foreshadow so much? Isn't the foreshadowing result just to show that the Zuyin Fruit is different, or that this fruit is spiritual? But what about the result? Wasn't it eaten up by the protagonist and the old man in one bite! Even if it doesn't turn into excrement, this kind of preparation is completely unnecessary! (A strong feeling of trying to make up the word count!) Unless the protagonist digs out the Zuyin fruit tree and takes it away, and then he turns into a human form! ! When you eat, do you use various descriptions of rice? In the end, it's not about eating it in your stomach! Even on food shows, all kinds of adjectives appear only after you eat something! Third, after reading the latest two chapters, the protagonist entered the human world and met the little girl. I had a feeling in my heart just after reading these two chapters. I deeply felt that the protagonist was a fool! That little girl is also a fool! This is not a curse! I really feel this way. Especially when I saw that the protagonist wanted to take the little girl away at the end, but the little girl was like a nerd, struggling with the fate of her destiny. I just want to say one thing, the author, your portrayal of this little girl was such a failure! The author probably wanted to portray an eccentric and cute little girl, right? But after I finished reading, I only had a nerdy little girl in my mind who was not very flexible, dull, and a little unreasonable... It was like a robot AI that had just appeared! And the protagonist who has all kinds of entanglements with such NPCs also looks stupid... Fourth, the fourth problem is something I just discovered. Previously, because most of the plot was reasonable and the characterization was okay, I covered up this problem. However, as soon as I saw the little girl and the conversation between her and the protagonist that was obviously for the sake of dialogue, this problem was exposed: There are so many things going on in the protagonist's mind every time he chooses a song! Basically it takes up half of the content, and the rest is dialogue... The previous dialogue was relatively normal, so it didn't highlight this point. The dialogue in the latest two chapters really feels too deliberate! This problem immediately became apparent. I finished reading these two chapters in less than two minutes. I can imagine that the author must have spent a lot of time coding out these four thousand to five thousand words. However, I basically just skimmed over the protagonist's mental activities when choosing songs or other times. I didn't jump to read it, but when I saw the first sentence, I almost knew what was going to follow. So I watched it very quickly, which meant that it didn't give me any sense of expectation at all. The above are all the complaints I have read for nearly half a month. If the author can accept it, then accept it. If you can't, just give the essence. Please comfort me and code it out.

That music you wrote? I won't watch it if it's about Western and modern music, but the subject matter is good

By Chapter 9.10, I felt like I couldn't stand it anymore. It was so cliche. . Shit!

It feels like there are a lot of fighting scenes, and I always use right-angle bars Jump

There are too many supporting female characters, and the few supporting male characters are bad guys.

Does music have five notes and six rhythms? Author, you can go to Baidu... I haven't started reading yet, but I feel that the introduction is too unfriendly. In fact, if you can't write an introduction, then don't write it. It's a waste... Forget it, give it a try first. Who calls Shu Huang...

The dialogue between these characters is so idiotic! The writer's characterization, situation description, and character dialogue are extremely poor. It's extremely boring to watch.

The main character of the design is unpleasant to watch.