The Magical Blacksmith's Shop

As a 12-year-old bookworm, I couldn't help myself and came over to complain. The front is not bad, it has a sense of familiarity with the "Gourmet Supplier" system. It's a pity that in the future, if you don't work hard, you have to wander around. I feel broken. I think this kind of article should be kept in the store, and occasionally go shopping to expand your horizons and map, and stop there. From blacksmithing, I see all kinds of things, and upgrade with peace of mind. From a small blacksmith, I slowly become famous, to become famous all over the world, and then to the top again. This is the mainstream and the focus. Reach the top with authority in the industry. It is no longer popular for system writers to forcefully slap people in the face. Tsundere and pretentiousness are the mainstream. Systematic writing is now more auxiliary. The protagonist keeps learning, practicing, and making progress. This is the right way. The system should be more like a mentor. I feel like I'm ruined by spending all day doing fantasy without doing my job. I hope the author will consider the plot issues carefully. Stop using such old routines, dragging first-rate creativity into second-rate plots, and then developing into third-rate routines through desperate means.

The transformation from human to immortality is due to military merit. The transformation from immortality to golden immortality is probably due to the merits of this reform? What happens after that? Is it a larger-scale battle between immortals and Buddhas to gain war wealth and accumulate forging experience? Or is there some kind of big crisis in the immortal mansion that requires the protagonist to increase the favorability of his father-in-law? This is not to say that such a plot is not good to watch. For example (without advertising, the popularity of this book is not needed), the plot of "The Strongest Gene" next door keeps reversing and reversing. Readers will applaud after each chapter, but when a big stage passes, they find that Jing has talked about some ways to solve the problem, and the character of the protagonist has not been shaped at all. , In retrospect, I will only feel that the protagonist has no other characteristics besides being smart, but "smart" applies to almost everyone with a brain. If Zhang Ye does not solve this crisis, there must be other Li Ye and Wang Ye who solve it. It is difficult for such a protagonist to impress readers, and it is easy to be confused with the plots in other novels. It is better to write something that only Zhang Ye can do, do well, and surprise readers. It is best to combine it with the unique setting of this book. Forging + alchemy can create an automatic alchemy cauldron. What about forging + formation? Is it possible to build a home monitoring security system that can automatically identify ourselves and the enemy, and show no mercy to the enemy and even seize and bury corpses? Just under the previous settings, artificial intelligence Jarvis and the like were mass-produced in minutes. What about forging + communication? At least get a liaison device to save Su Jin from getting married. The protagonist doesn't know it yet, and in the end he has to confront the heroine's power. It's like Qin Yu and Jiang Li in "Star Change"... There are also forging + entertainment, forging + mecha, and forging + Internet (Hey (⊙o⊙) it seems like something strange has gotten in). In short, it is slightly better than leaving the system aside to write a workplace drama in Tianjie. Of course, if there are other arrangements for the author's outline, forget it, it's just a suggestion. Don't criticize if you don't like it, forget it, it's okay if you want to criticize, I won't care anyway, I wish this book will get better and better. It has the same development potential as "The Library of Heaven's Path", at least in terms of name and setting, right? !

Cultivators can treat ordinary people as ants, but can such people also cultivate? If you practice the law without cultivating your mind, you will die from three disasters and five calamities without a burial place.

Give up decisively. Too stupid, serious signs of plagiarism

It's so poisonous... I'm about to vomit blood, red warning

Let's brainstorm together and come up with some suggestions for the author. Be open-minded!

For me personally, the first three chapters encourage me to quit.

By Chapter 61, I can't stand it anymore. The creativity is okay, the protagonist is not cool at all, there are many bugs in the whole text, and the description of the heroine and supporting characters is extremely weak and brainless.

After reading three chapters, I really can't stand it anymore. The author is just mindless and unhappy.

It is extremely poisonous, I have been poisoned to death, and I will burn the paper if necessary.