Immortal King Who Guards the Realm

After reading Chapter 300, I saw the author's emotion and wanted to give some suggestions. This book is very similar to ordinary people, whether it is the outline, cultivation process, adventures, etc. (Maybe the author feels that he has spent a lot of time to conceive the outline, various adventures, and the writing is completely different from ordinary people, but the essence of the book is still not much different after reading it.) - However, I personally think that even if it is like an ordinary person, it has little to do with it, and this book has not achieved results comparable to the number of words, which should be due to the failure of details. The outline of a book is fixed, just like a giant tree, always growing upward in the direction of the sun, but it is always the various details and roots that can really supply the nutrients for the upward growth of this big tree and give people the overall image. After reading 300 chapters, the overall feeling is that the details are always unsatisfactory. Whether it is words, deeds or objects, they are all written more narratively, rather than as descriptive as a novel should be. Especially the character description of Pig's Foot. Except for some descriptions when climbing five mountains during the entry test at the beginning, there has been no description in hundreds of chapters. It makes people feel that Pig's Foot has no sense of flesh and blood, and there is no personality that a Pig's Foot should have. Is he greedy or indifferent? Stingy or generous? Is it a blessing for wealth or a good thing? You can't tell from the book... And the same goes for all the supporting characters (except for his master Zhong Yunhai, who makes people think he is a good master with rich flesh and blood). Furthermore, this is a book about cultivating immortals, and the description of realm and state of mind in the book is completely lacking, which is inferior. And in the outline, he started to collect the cauldron's refining materials from the earliest period when he was just practicing qi - this foreshadowing and big line is too big... So big that it is difficult for readers to accept it! In addition, the description of the heroine is too abrupt and far-fetched. In fact, many of the books on immortality can still become sacred texts even without a heroine. Why bother to deliberately rectify the heroine? And each short story paragraph is divided into one... This will make people unappetizing. Cultivation of immortals competes with heaven and earth, and with people. In this general environment, men and women are the same. It is completely possible to have male and female supporting roles, but there is no need to be far-fetched and deliberately shape the male pig's feet and the female pig's feet... Because one more female pig's feet means more writing power to shape. From many novels written by great writers, at least half of them will not waste their writing power on shaping the female protagonist! ——Almost all of the big blood-red books don't have female protagonists. A few humble opinions, I hope they will be helpful to the author.

In fact, there was a loophole in the early stage. Qingquan Sect has a total of thousands of disciples. There are only 32 foundations in total, but there are eight golden elixirs and three Nascent Souls. Do you think they are awesome or not?

As a bookworm who has been reading for more than ten years, I would like to share my thoughts on the work. The author's writing was very poor before, but he has been improving. Now I have read more than 300 chapters, which is not bad, but the author must be a boy. The author's emotional drama is too far-fetched, and his unreasonable affection for the female Taoist friend is too baffling. At least the reason should be written! However, the author's writing skills have been improving, which is good and can pass the time [fn=5_7]

First of all, congratulations on finally reading this book. I also read the VIP chapter. Generally speaking, the plot and world structure of the story are good, but there are still some shortcomings. I hope the author can slowly improve them: 1. There are many adventures in pig's feet, and I also get a lot of treasures. When I first got them, I always said they could be used as a trump card, but later on they didn't play their due role. What's the trump card? It is not something that can be used casually, but something that can make a comeback at the most critical moment, and can fight across levels. There is no difference at all between the effect of a pig's trotter's trump card on someone one level above him and one level above him. 2. The battle scenes are poor and the writing is verbose. Pig Script has strong magic power, two physical and mental rests, and two Nascent Souls. It stands to reason that there is no pressure in the battle of one or two levels higher. However, the author almost always fights like this, and when being besieged, the enemy can still be discussed and treated on the side in the middle of the fight. Is Pig Script watching the show next to him? A battle of life and death (such as Chapters 605 and 606). 3. The skill level is unclear, Pig's Feet encounters many adventures, and the skills obtained are basically top-notch, but I feel that the power of using Mahayana skills is no different from the power of Half-Qiu skills. Pig's Feet has rich experience in fighting techniques, but it cannot move in the correct way when it comes to real competitions. My level is limited, so I appreciate the author's unremitting efforts. I hope the author will understand if I don't say it well!

The author is of good quality, but the themes of the three books are all about faction wars, which weakens the protagonist's personal power and reduces the excitement of online writing. Every time I write about this kind of faction war, I jump to read it.

Author, how are the children? I read about your child's condition from other novels. How is it now?

My first novel, although The Fox has some minor regrets, it is also very good. Come on, author!

It is admirable that the author has persisted in writing until now. There are always few great masters. The male protagonist of a fantasy novel is also an ordinary person when he starts practicing. However, the author is as tough and perseverant as the male protagonist of the fantasy novel. Maybe it is a kind of love! Call for you!

The writing is really poor, wordy, and forced to be sensational.

Brother Canyon, I watched you slowly go from starting a business to now. At that time, many people opened books together, but now, it seems that you are the only one who insists on writing until now. We keep claiming that we are street gangsters, but in fact we are just cowards. I am very envious and admire your brother. Come on. I see different things from you that I lack, and I will work hard to encourage you!