Sherlock Holmes

Very good subject matter and creativity. It's a pity that it's just a headline, and I didn't see where the great detective is. In addition, the steampunk worldview depicts the spirit of Gengjin and Ma Xian, which is really interesting. But this is not a big problem.

What does the Steam World Mouse book have to do with you?

The first is the plot. After reading the first tens of thousands of words, I didn't know what the protagonist was going to do. Let alone the kidnapping case, it has something to do with the protagonist, and it would be too much to treat it as a branch plot. The second is the characterization. The image of Shushu is more vivid, but the human image is not well written. How can a girl be transferred to the priesthood all of a sudden? Is this a male protagonist or a female protagonist, and the same is true for priests. The character is too low, and it feels like a soy sauce. The third is the power system. Can you really grasp the fantasy and fantasy author? The author also contains too many private goods. No one cares whether the villain is a squid, which greatly affects the reader's sense of immersion. Generally speaking, it's pretty good for newcomers to write to this level. I suggest you take this book to practice. Later, you should focus on the career development of the protagonist and his Shushu, and weaken Jeanne's plot. You can use her as a tool in the early stage to promote the plot. People who come here come to see Detective Shushu. No one wants to read the history of the struggle of a little girl from the slums to counterattack and turn around. If you want to write this, I suggest you go to the female channel next door. After talking about the shortcomings, let's talk about the advantages The protagonist's image of Mouse is quite vivid, and the text description is quite vivid, that's all.

Well written, I have another learning target, follow the author, come on! ! ! ! ! ! ! 😁😁😁 Recommended book: "Old Things in the Wind", this is my first work, I hope you can support it, thank you all

Dare to pretend to be a goddess as soon as you arrive? Are you too brave to be killed?

The subject matter and introduction are excellent, and it looks like a god. The protagonist appears to be somewhat mentally retarded and single-threaded. Perhaps this can be explained by the inability of Mouse's brain to support complex thinking? Incense and Zhiduoxing are somewhat inconsistent in Western fantasy works. The author is very capable of telling hooks, and the plot is quite gripping. There are more and more typos and incorrect sentences, which is not a good trend. The author should proofread it carefully.

Can you not write Chinese-style things? There is a lot of interest in watching fantasy, and it is so inconsistent to say that there is a fairy 🙂

Coming from Baicao Garden, I felt it was too twisted. The plot is just like spreading fire after the kidnapping case, but the main line is not clear. There is no detective in this detective story. Talking about class issues and collecting mice here are not like mushroom dungeons. The heroine's setting is a bit dull after all, it is necessary for the plot.

Only when you pick up a pen do you realize that writing is difficult, so come on, author. I have an idea. Criminal investigation is not easy to write anyway, and no one would like to read it. Why not write the protagonist to kill all the suspects, and then everyone will think that Shushu is a detective?

The protagonist travels to a squirrel, but is equipped with a pretty good gold finger. If the subsequent plot is not too overwhelming, it can be regarded as food and fodder.