Infinity: from Rumor Detective to Memory Star God

Typesetting... There is still a lot of room for improvement. It is best to use long and short paragraphs alternately. You can compress the number of words in each chapter to about 2000 to 2500 words.

Maybe the introduction could be more concise, and could the title of the book be changed? I wouldn't have clicked in without reading the introduction. I shouldn't have voted for a suspenseful and supernatural book, but a light novel.

I would like to give you a suggestion. You can delete all the experience memories, the total number of gods, and the flaws in the first page. These settings that are likely to be unused in the first ten chapters are unnecessary at the beginning and will only slow down the pace. Moreover, it is not necessary to set the protagonist to have just gained a new ability. Although the process of exploring abilities with the protagonist will be very immersive once it is written, it requires the patience of the reader and the author's writing power. Currently, the writing power is limited. You can directly set the protagonist to start the game and you will already understand the purpose of the ability. This starts with a small scene of the protagonist playing with an old man. The protagonist feeds a cat but gets caught, so he makes the cat jump and do a backflip to demonstrate the protagonist's obsessive-compulsive disorder ability. Then, some examples are used to demonstrate the limitations of the ability. In this way, the first two chapters can be merged into one chapter, and at the end, a situation that requires the protagonist's ability to be used is used as a hook. This structure is imitated from the opening structure of "My Super Powers Refreshed Every Week".

After reading four chapters, I would like to give you some suggestions (what I think) First, even if there are two protagonists, the first chapter of the story will focus on one of them. For example, the case investigation at the beginning of the chapter focuses on the perspective of the master. It is not necessary to cut the perspective several times in one or two chapters, which will greatly affect the sense of immersion. I know you want to create two characters at the same time, but with all due respect, if you don't have enough writing power at the moment, it's better to start with the simplest one and clearly portray one person. Two, many interactions are redundant. The interaction between the apprentice and the master for a few pages is just daily interaction, and there is almost no useful information at the moment. This is okay after the plot develops, but at the beginning of the plot, I think many readers came for the anomalies and detectives in the title and introduction of your book. As a result, what they saw was two unfamiliar characters playing tricks on each other. The readers' expectations and the author's selling point are misaligned. Third, online novels have formatting requirements. If it is a short paragraph of one or two sentences and only one line, then make a simple information point clear. For example: "Shen Que is a detective who has just been released on bail." If it is a long paragraph of several lines, it should be introduced in detail around a core important information point, or use a logical chain to string together several simple information points. If it doesn't work, just break it into several paragraphs. For example: "With the recent reform, the detective profession has become increasingly difficult. In the past, we were investigating murder cases, but now we are all helping the financial owners to investigate extramarital affairs, and even the commission to investigate extramarital affairs has to be robbed! Hmph, Shen Que sneered at this. The detective's face has been lost by these colleagues br> Fortunately, yesterday, he finally received another case of missing children. Shen Que was very happy. He wanted to go to see the client that day, but he peeked at the hostess while investigating the affair, and was reported by the sponsor. He was detained for a day before he came out. "Bless me, don't let the client be robbed again. "Shen Que murmured and rang the doorbell.