Immortal Martial Arts: Beginning as the Great Sui’s God of War

This title and description are exactly what I'm talking about. This type of story has existed for a while now, but there was one good one, "Immortal Martial Sui Dynasty," which went up to about 2 million words before stopping. So you're probably imitating that one.

I find your writing very strange, especially the part about Murong Fu. Murong Fu wasn't even confident; he was just an idiot, a complete moron. I find it very strange that he seems to have no brains at all, it's so disjointed.

It starts digging holes from the very first chapter, and it's still digging them even after over a hundred chapters; it kills any desire to read it.

Here's a suggestion: your writing is full of unnecessary details. Take your protagonist's sword strike against that green coconut, for example—it took two whole chapters! It's ridiculous. I don't understand why you always have to explain so much in your writing. You dedicate two or three chapters to explaining a single move. I've read over 30 chapters, and in the past four or five days, there's just a lot of nonsense.

Pinduoduo is not as good as Zhutian Goudao.

This is?

The original story, starting from the Immortal Martial Sui Dynasty, was written by you, right? I followed it to the end and it was a disaster.

Keep it up! 🙂🙂😍😍😍

Every day, Zhang Fei and his crippling wretch will be wiped out once the Hehuan Sect arrives.

It's not bad, but it's too weak. It reminds me of reading novels ten years ago, when everyone was relaxed and writing was very casual.