Entry Copying, Starting from the Abduction of Wang Yuyan

Your Huang Mao entry is too weak. The real Huang Mao entries are stronger than what you wrote. I suggest you change it. The favorability of good girls will be increased by 30% at the initial meeting, the bad girls will be increased by 80%, the widows will be increased by 200%, and the physical strength will be increased by 150%.

It all relies on a yellow-haired entry to drive the plot, just like a poison. In terms of martial arts training, I also made an entry and then upgraded it, which felt very empty. I feel like there isn't much development in the plot.

Emm, I don't mind having a harem, but it's really poisonous to accept one after another and basically don't need to develop feelings. No wonder there is a pornographic entry at the beginning, so that you don't have to consider feelings when recruiting girls, and you don't have to consider whether it is reasonable for the plot of every girl to like the protagonist, because all unreasonable things can be explained by the pornographic entry.

This kind of lunacy is necessary. He pretends to be a genius and a waste even though he has the strength. He also forcibly turns someone into a virgin. That person is Wang Yuyan's mother! ! ! ! I originally wrote it very well, but I couldn't bear it anymore.

I feel like I have to wear a mask behind me. I don't like to see this kind of thing.

Don't know what to do at all? I don't even know whether to subscribe or not. There is no main plot at all. Either dominate the martial arts world or dominate the world. It's too mixed martial arts. The plot is too confusing. I don't know what the author is thinking.

Who taught you to ride on a horse and blend into the wind and clouds?

It's mixed martial arts again, a dead end...

The harem also has its limits. If you don't even look at the character of each person you meet, you're like a bulldozer!

It's okay to accept female protagonists and start a harem, but don't treat the female protagonists as if they were just dusty and brainless, as they have no original distinctive personality at all! If the characterization is more detailed, don't be stereotyped and fall in love with the protagonist when you meet him. That kind of brainless plot will not look too fake even if it has a pornographic effect.

As long as you don't go to the world of comprehensive transportation and do business in person like the previous book (and it's still a world with broken layers), it's simply putting the cart before the horse. As a time traveler, if you know history, you should clearly realize that if you have fists, you have power. When you have fists and power, you will naturally have money.

... Author, I just have a question, is the Huangmao entry an aphrodisiac? There is not a single man in Mantuo Villa, and anyone who accidentally intrudes will be chopped into pieces to grow flowers. A'Zhu has no sweetheart, but they only left after being with each other for a while. Li Qingluo loves Prince Duan deeply. Why does she feel like she's falling in love with him after just one look at him?

The front was okay, but some kind of natural disaster appeared in the back. It's similar to the catastrophes of several eras in fantasy (many people die), I can't stand it anyway. Slipped away

Shennong is urgently needed. Are pig's feet eunuchs? Are you pushing diligently or not?

After reading Chapter 34, I suddenly no longer had the desire to read any more.

In order to avoid criticism, the author next door, Wei Qianqian picked up Xuanjian and was still a virgin a year ago. If Zhou Zhiruo could have been born more than ten years earlier, why don't you learn from the author?

You must at least let us know what the protagonist's goal is and what he is going to do. This kind of hammer and stick makes people completely lose interest in reading.

As a time-traveler, create martial arts and integrate the characteristics of martial arts There are also novels, fantasies, and the whims of the predecessors of time-travelers Don't the protagonists know how to use electromagnetism, for example, I think this achievement is very high.

Is it possible that I can't find any serious books to read? Want you to write? Since you are publishing a book on a serious website, you must write a serious book! It's really putting the cart before the horse and missing the point.

Come on, push the plot, you're too cool

We all know his talent for donkey carts and poisons. Huang Mao went to engage in the Southern Tang Dynasty and Zhou Dynasty. He was the chess master who also overturned the table even when he played chess.

The plot is too weak to write so much. How many harems have you opened? You want to record all the female students in Jingu Nianhua

Or a new book I discovered on my own

It's quite interesting. Although some of the story backgrounds may not be rigorous, I think it's harmless. It's just comfortable to read online.

I read the first 3 chapters This book should be ntr but the main character is Lu Murong Murong Fu came back and found that all his cousins ​​and maids had been abducted by Huang Mao

Without a system, I wouldn't be able to write novels now.

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When I see someone falling in love with someone else, and the emotional drama has not yet been laid, I suddenly grab the woman's hand and say something like "I want you." The entry is yellowish, the character shouldn't be like this, I can't stand it...

A total of 29 chapters have been written, including Aju Abi, Wang Yuyan and her daughter, Yao Yue, Lian Xin InIn Tianyin Sect's phonemes, how many more do I expect?

The progress is too fast, whether it is martial arts or recruiting girls. The most serious thing is that there are only a few chapters of recruiting girls. I see you one after another. I guess you can't remember who is behind you. Especially Li Qingluo changed the background. It's really speechless Martial arts is even more ridiculous. I have done it to the point of innateness in a few chapters. What can I write after doing this?