Immortal Longevity for My Clan, Starting with Writing the Family Genealogy

The development is natural, without so many routines and coincidences. In terms of family description, each character also reflects his own role and value, rather than a simple name and identity.

The pace is too slow. People who watch it at first can absorb it, but when it comes to the follow-up stage, it becomes very torturous.

The writing is okay, but you need to read it more calmly. The progress is slow, mainly because this cultivation of immortality is treated as if there is no cultivation at all. Goldfinger also disappears after the protagonist practices.

Your book is well written. Really. It's called slow-burning. It's definitely a high-quality book.

It looks very comfortable, but the pace is too slow. After practicing Qi, I feel no different from ordinary people. There are no spells and no need for spiritual stones.

The 3 monthly tickets are actually the sponsors of this month?

It's pretty good, but the pace has sped up a bit. My health is still not good now. I have to write about when I will retire.

Zhujiao has not written about his family's spiritual practice since he officially started practicing spiritual practice. The family members also did not mention feeling qi. I guess they don't have any spiritual qualifications. I hope they don't suddenly become geniuses again! Life is really passing day by day, right? Is this pace too slow?

Very well written! A small suggestion is to explain where the paper in the protagonist's home comes from. Because I always use paper to write down things, I have to write down everything. It feels like I can't run out of paper. I haven't seen any mention of buying paper, and there is no reason for it in the article. It feels like it just appeared out of thin air. Considering the protagonist's family background and ancient cultivation background, pens, ink, paper and inkstones should be quite expensive for the current family. According to the usage of "Keeping Notes" in the article, the protagonist's family may not be able to afford it. If the paper is purchased, it should be written down in the expenses. If the protagonist's father keeps it, then he should also explain it. There will be a time when it is used up, rather than always being available, which makes people feel like it is never used up. Because the bits and pieces of daily income and expenses you wrote are quite detailed, I have questions about this.

This introduction is written too much like a cool article. In fact, it seems that the days are passing by and getting better little by little.