The Cthulhu Panel: One Organ Mutates Every Day

Most of the recent novels are either sisters or sisters-in-law. Damn it, is the orphanage pornographic?

The writing is good, but there is a problem, that is, those abilities have nothing to do with each other. They seem to have grown six different organs and have no connection with each other. Especially the ability to eat, which seems to have only one function left. Does eating bring energy reserves? It can still strengthen the body. There is no display. I just keep eating and watch the progress bar go up.

I have to explain in advance that this novel has nothing to do with the fundamental Cthulhu novels, or as long as I still write online articles, it probably won't have anything to do with it. This is determined by the foundation of online articles. If there are no plug-ins and ups and downs of the plot, you will definitely not be able to survive with just one online novel. First of all, the author's writing style in this book is not very good. Most of the time, it is between the lower and middle levels. Occasionally, some of the descriptions can be considered as the upper middle level, which means that in most cases you can read it. But even if you read it quickly, you will be held back by the stiffness and obscurity of some of the writing. Occasionally, you can write some plots that can give people a certain sense of immersion. This is barely qualified for a novice writer, but if you can't upgrade your writing style, I'm afraid it will be difficult to attract too many people in the future. My suggestion is to write the things out a few days in advance, and wait until the day you are going to publish them to read them carefully in conjunction with the previous chapters. This is very helpful for refining the text and sorting out the plot. A big help, which can effectively alleviate the problem of immature writing Secondly, as for the setting of plug-ins, this is the author's own setting, but I still want to say that the proportion of plug-ins is too high, and the author's protagonist has almost no connection with abilities other than plug-ins that make people feel involved. In other words, a cheat in a novel is definitely more than just cheats. The system capabilities that come with the worldview and the sparks between them and plug-ins are also worthy of a close-up. Your golden finger setting is very basic, that is to say, for now, it helps the protagonist to tell the story. It is very different from the conventional system text that all-inclusively relies on the system from exercises to equipment. Your plug-in is highly similar to the book on the occult panel. From the most traditional all-inclusive system text, to the kind written by Shennan, to the one written by the author, It is a kind of downgrade, but also a kind of freedom. It can better exert the subjective initiative of the protagonist, and can also better shape the world view, shape the villain, and shape the character image. In this regard, you can read more about the book on the occult panel, including the plot world view I will mention next. You can refer to it. Don't be too limited. The novel is to be unconstrained. Third, regarding plot development and worldview issues, the plot has not developed yet. From what I have seen, I would like to mention that there has been no rampage (in fact, it is quite difficult to rampage in the early stage). There is a lot of preparation for the subsequent development, and the main line is advanced very well. This is good for newcomers. It seems that there is an outline and no random play. The problem of worldview, or the problem of worldview presentation, is a very serious problem. For people who come here for the sake of graminess, it is not enough. Sometimes the environment and plot described can make people feel weird and mysterious, but how can a worldview appear to be graminess? To put it crudely and arbitrarily, it is "desperation", yes, and it is a double unfolding of the protagonist's despair and the world's despair. For example, the first volume of the Lord of Mysteries, which I like very much, is very complicated. It outlines a person and thing closely related to the protagonist in detail. It describes a small society that is visible and tangible. It is filled with everything that everyone is familiar with, dragging the readers and Xiao Ke out of the confused time-travel bit by bit, mixed with some unknown mysticism. With a little golden finger, everything seems to be thriving. Suddenly, a force majeure strikes, and everything is turned upside down in an instant. The protagonist is helpless or even dies. All the familiar and beloved things are burned to the ground. This is undoubtedly desperate. This incident pulls Xiaoke and the readers out of the novice village in an instant, and they have a glimpse of the truth about a corner of the world. This is the truth about Kewei. The first chapter of the book is the best, and the rest of the book still does not deviate from the clichés, and is very similar to regular online articles. I mention this not to mean that you must write the protagonist to death, but that the protagonist integrates easily as if he has not traveled through time. I have no memory of the environment around him, chatting and laughing. Without the protagonist observing the world and integrating into the world, it is impossible for readers to see the customs and customs of another world and the world view you have constructed. No matter how grand the narrative is, it cannot be reduced to small things, it will be empty and imaginary. The same goes for the people around the protagonist. There are no memory points and the character arcs are flat. Of course, this is a common problem of most authors, but if you want to truly write a book, you have to think about it yourself. Everything is from small to large, especially this kind of world view. Finally, the characters, I will focus on the protagonist. The protagonist is too arrogant. This is not a derogatory term. If the protagonist of a cool novel is not arrogant, no one will buy it. Author, you are obviously bringing yourself into the protagonist. I can't see the protagonist's habitual personality. I only see you in a trance. You have no description or construction of these. You must not have conceived the plot from his perspective. This is a kind of default. You haven't noticed it yourself. , You bring yourself in, and all actions happen by default. I can hardly see the protagonist thinking and weighing the pros and cons. You almost write with a default attitude and tendency at the beginning of every event. The so-called psychological activity is more like explaining, it is not thinking. I can't see the protagonist's personality and thinking characteristics. Everything seems to go with the flow. The problem is that following the protagonist becomes "flat", and he becomes a tool instead of the protagonist. Generally speaking, the writing is unsatisfactory, the plot is relatively smooth and smooth at the moment, and the world view is insufficiently displayed, but I can feel the author's planning. Character creation is a big problem, but this is a common problem for new authors. If you don't write, you will never make progress. The description of the picture has a bit of that feeling, but the protagonist's sense of relaxation and the world view are too little to cover up this point. You have to think about how to write a loose and flat protagonist, a world that does not feel oppressive, and cannot show the weird daily life. If you just write it like this, of course it can be written as a traditional cool novel, just upgrade to fight monsters, but they have no sense of restraint. The writing is too obscure and it is impossible for anyone to read it. One muscle becomes two ends. It depends on the author's grasp of this degree.

It has a strong flavor and has no special drawbacks so far.

Why are there so many "loading panel" themed novels lately?

Does the author have any other works? Not enough.

If you don't have a background and you're being forced to leave, if you have a background and you're being forced to leave, why should you give the protagonist an awesome background? I'm speechless.

It's very touching👍

This novel is really well written and full of flavor. After I finished reading it, I decided to read more and support it. I won't read this book to death (

Brother, please give me one more episode. I'm dying. Please, brother. I feel like there are ants crawling on me. I feel like I'm shaking all over. I can't breathe. Please, brother, just give me one more episode. Just one more episode. I'll never touch it again. Please, brother. Really, just one episode. I swear I'll never touch this thing again. I really can't bear it anymore.