Qingtian Li Family

Here I will tell you my own opinion. 1. The title of the book needs to be changed. The current four-character title cannot be used. If you don't have the foundation of God, don't use it. It needs to be changed to the title of a systematic novel, which is concise and easy to understand. Remember, we are writing business novels. Eat well and listen to others' advice. 2. The introduction needs to be changed. Just highlight the core climax content and the role of your golden finger. This is the facade, which is to attract readers to come in and watch. Writing a novel is like opening a store, understand? If it's just for love, just pretend I didn't say it. 3. Writing is for people to read. It must have a positioning and conform to the laws of the market. Don't do it for love. Eat enough first and then survive. Of course, if you are a talented player and I didn't tell you, you can write about what you love.

Overturn and rewrite it. The content of three chapters has been changed to four scenes. Such an endless arrangement will not tell the story well. In fact, old readers can probably guess the purpose of this arrangement, but it just doesn't make it attractive. A bunch of characters appear at the beginning, they are so featureless and messy that I can't remember them at all. There are too many adjectives, adverbs, or adjectives, making it difficult to read smoothly. Slowness is not a problem, the problem is that you don't have the ability to tell stories eloquently.

You can look at what other people's families write about cultivating immortality. At least read seven or eight books, right? Read the first dozen chapters. The wedge in front of you, I think, has no effect at all. And it's baffling. A monster appears out of nowhere. Inexplicably, Yuanshi Tianzun appeared. The key point is that you, Yuanshi Tianzun, are not strong enough. Then you specifically reminded me that this was fiction or something. Whether it's fiction or not actually doesn't matter, it's just that it's really not strong enough, that's all I can say. Then you cite one of their functions, and I know it's a foreshadowing, right? Is this what kind of invasion by this demon? , And then maybe it can be done later, right? How about this Yuanshi Tianzun? And then what kind of plot will come in? Then work together to fight against this demonic invasion. But do you find this attractive? This way of writing is too old. As for your article, as I said in the first three chapters, if you put it in the same period as ordinary people, you might be able to write it. But how many years ago was that? Then the second chapter is also inexplicable. Still suppressing him inexplicably. Anyway, it's a feeling that everyone is targeting, ha, it's a very strange feeling, you know? Then out of nowhere, another wave of immortals came and disturbed this spirit testing conference. Just when you met your protagonist, someone came to disturb you. Then in Chapter 3, why did you keep sharpening your jade pendant? Isn't this jade pendant just a plug-in? Too cliché? Then if you are a cheat, you should pull it out as soon as possible. I know, you have to warm up slowly and you have to pull. Then we might talk about the Black Wind Village next, right? How's it going? What kind of family is going to be destroyed? Ha, and then embark on the path to immortality? Then what is your overall attraction? I also read what one of the authors said in your last chapter. You said that this opening chapter has been changed over and over again, and you don't know how to change it well. I think your wedge chapter can be deleted without affecting subsequent reading at all. You may feel it is important. But is it possible that your first chapter was full of confusion. They immediately persuaded everyone to retreat. Seriously, you can even learn how mortals write. Isn't that slow enough? That opening chapter was also very slow, right? But why can people be retained? There is a sense of expectation and the talk is coming. There is nothing wrong with you trying to raise your level, but your attempts to raise your level are not impressive at all. It is a bit baffling, and I even want to laugh when I look at it. To sum it up, you actually have nothing to look forward to. Slow writing. Why do some people write better slowly? There is something to look forward to. There must be some places where he writes better and some places where he creates the atmosphere better. Like this mortal feeling, right? When you first started writing Like a Mortal , didn't that feeling well established? Isn't it interesting? The main thing is to have an attractive place. I really don't see anything attractive about you, and the scenes keep changing back and forth. Sometimes it's high and sometimes it's low, but overall it's just the same, um, general evaluation, um, I think you haven't read many novels. And I don't think you can hold on for long. You should just suddenly have an inspiration. I think this is good, and then you can write it. Have you ever tried to understand a trend in the novel market? What is the audience for this topic you want to write about? Just like you are selling something. Then you always have to understand the market first, right? How to understand the market direction? How did everyone do it? It's impossible for everyone to start wearing this kind of leather shoes now, casual shoes, it's a mess, you can weave a straw sandal and sell it.