Asking About Taoist Stories

How should I put it? It feels like there is no sense of immersion and it is just chaotic. I feel like I want to write it in reverse order, and prepare to explain everything slowly later, but this kind of thing has no name or strength to put it bluntly, and it is difficult to attract people to read later, especially for online novels. You know, it's chapter 20 now, and I don't know anything except that the protagonist is a time traveler and that he was a Taoist college student before. Is the place where the protagonist was before traveling through time a normal version of Earth or a cultivating version? There are descriptions such as "I traveled back in time and practiced a sword according to what was taught in the academy." These descriptions give people the feeling of a version of the earth for cultivating immortals. It is also possible that the earth is at the end of the law and cannot cultivate immortals, but the things are real. I haven't said which one. How the protagonist traveled through time is not mentioned. There is no such thing as how long it has been since the protagonist traveled through time, how he mastered the sword, or how he restrained his spirit and dispatched his generals. What I was given was that there was a lot missing from the front.

The writing is okay, but it is too scattered and flat, the main plot is too weak, the origin and cultivation system of the protagonist are not explained, the world background is unclear, the conflicts in the plot are not obvious, the protagonist is too strong, there are no ups and downs, the starting point of the protagonist is too high, and the plot cannot be written later. When you first start writing, you still need to carefully write down an outline. The clearer your ideas, the easier it will be to write.

It smells like a child's video. Excuse me.

The main plot is weak, but the writing is good. It feels a bit like a female writer. I don't know why there are no comments. In fact, the writing is quite good. Come on! Must stick to it

I didn't quite understand it, but the scene when Jiaolong got married was quite impressive, like a realistic style.