My Folk Game Machine

It seems to be an improvement compared to the previous edition, but the old problems are still unresolved. One is that Che Zulu talks too much, seems to have a sloppy word count, and his writing seems sloppy. Second, there is a problem with the pacing of the dungeon. The three major nodes of the Sewing Corpse chapter focus on early development, and the ancient corpse of the alchemist and the Yellow River demon corpse that have been prepared for a long time are briefly mentioned. It means that the protagonist has accumulated a lot of experience, and the climax should be there in the later stage. Otherwise, these two elite monsters will be hastily ended. Where can readers make up for the lack of real sense of growth and pretentiousness of the protagonist? This is a bit top-heavy and anticlimactic, right? Of course, the second question is just my personal opinion. It's understandable that you have your own rhythm.

If a huge crisis such as the Yellow River Monster can only be solved by the corpse stitcher in the end, and if the solution is not solved, life will be ruined, then the corpse stitcher should not be able to barely make ends meet. The protagonist's master gives his own food to his apprentice, and only eats a little when he goes to the restaurant. There is a deep relationship between master and apprentice, but I always feel disconnected.

To put it bluntly, the thunder is loud and the rain is small. The leader of the evil cult in the Ancient Tomb of Gods and the Dragon Corpse Reveals Immortals in the Yellow River is so awesome that it actually doesn't cause any trouble at all, and it's not harmful to a small county town. Not to mention the county magistrate, the petty officials can solve the problem without even having to step forward. Learning magic and magical powers is worse than taking the public exam.

I feel that the more I write this book, the better it gets. The writing style of the first book seems to be very immature, especially the early copies. I was inspired to write about gastric juice in the future. I wrote about customs from all over the world, especially Nanyang Shengxie. The following words are too stream-of-consciousness, and it feels like a stone hitting your head. It is so uncomfortable to read. The second book Yongzhen. I have to say that it really captures the true meaning of local characteristics, especially Yongzhen's words, "As long as I live, I am compassionate." The plot along the way is like a real Bodhisattva. I feel that the three books currently written are the best. To be honest, from the beginning of the third book, I can tell that it is not based on the previous book, and it still has that flavor. Then the strength has taken a big step forward. This is the fastest improvement among the three recent books. It did collapse later, which I have to say is a bit of a pity. This is the fourth book of . It can be seen that the author's writing style has been integrated and it will not be as uncomfortable to read as the previous books. It is also the only one that I can read in one sitting, and the plot is just right. It makes me want to stop reading, and I wait for updates every day. In particular, the protagonist's abilities are directly reflected, unlike the previous ones which were basically a bit too mysterious, resulting in the feeling of being both strong and weak. There is no specific division. Generally speaking, this book is full of creativity and charm based on the experience of the previous three books. The only pity is that it's not very popular. You can tell that the author is really serious about writing a book. After all, no one would write such a stream of consciousness. Each edition is full of creativity, and the author's improvements can also be seen.

This guy has so many books, but he's still talking about the same stream of consciousness, skipping lines at every turn.

This was compiled a few years ago for reference. If you want to write about internal revision in the future, you can refer to this But I didn't fill in the details because it was too troublesome. I will add it later if there is anything you need to know. I don't know if I will write about heaven and hell later, so I will post it here just to supplement everyone's knowledge Finally, there are the levels of Taoist gods This is compiled by me, not generally accepted. After reading this, you can say that you have an understanding of the Taoist world of gods and immortals.

I feel so-so. Che Zulu talks a lot and can't explain things clearly. And the angle of view is often changed very deeply. In short, it is not as exciting as the previous books.

This is the third book of "Chasing the Boss". The first book "Arcana" was good in the early and middle stages, but it became more and more difficult to understand in the later stages. The two or three hundred chapters before the end felt like reading comprehension, so I had to abandon it. The second "Nuo Opera" inherited the obscurity and difficulty of "Arcana" and "The Riddler". It was not as good as "Arcana", so I abandoned it in the middle. I caught up on the latest new books in one go, and they gave me a good feeling. Even the beginning gave me a better feeling than the Mystic Realm. I hope to maintain this rhythm, and don't write and write like reading comprehension.

I don't know if it's just poor writing or a deliberate nonsensical style, but it's quite tiring to watch anyway. The information gap between the author and the readers is not dealt with well, and the deliberate abbreviations and flashbacks are even more irritating. The mood is cut off as soon as it's in place.

The first copy looked like it was about to run into millions of words, but it ended up being anticlimactic, and the rest of it was rushed through. There is no feeling of pleasure at all. I can see the black man's question mark face! You are really not suitable for writing infinite copy streams, give up. A copy is well written. The copy flow is short, flat and fast. You always write millions of words in one stroke.

There are still the same problems as before. The writing is dry and lacks a sense of excitement. It is often written in one stroke. The plot is poorly foreshadowed. The progress is slow and has no stages. It makes people have no desire to follow up. I also read hundreds of chapters at a time in the last book.

I feel that the author is more suitable for writing a long novel with a single world view. The ending of "The Sewing Man" is too abrupt. There are three stages in the game. The first is to learn the art of sewing corpses, the second is to deal with the Earth and Fire Cult, and the third is to deal with the Yellow River Demonic Corpse. The first two are very interesting, but in the end, it suddenly fast-forwards and disappears in two chapters, which is very uncomfortable for the viewer. Even if it is a crushing game, you can also write about the methods and procedures used by the protagonist to collide with the Yellow River demon corpse. If you can pull out the Taoist Master Panlong to help when you clear the mysterious forest, wouldn't it be better to deal with the demon corpse and add some new characters or plot? After all is written, it will be enough to write a chapter dedicated to the book written by Shen Jing. Now the ending looks really uncomfortable.

The plot so far is very good, it feels similar to My Weird Life, but the writing is a bit problematic, which is a pity, if the writing was better it would be Ambrosia. Another point is that I don't know if the author did it for the sake of word count. There are a lot of words that affect the perception.

It's a bit interesting, but it's a headache to read the words and sentences. To put it bluntly, the text is not smooth, and it feels like it's stuck after reading, and there are a lot of double quotation marks 😒

All the popular folklore authors have cut off their own meridians as if they were possessed by evil spirits. Now they are relying on you as their mainstay.

I have written forty or fifty chapters for a task, but I haven't finished it yet. I have to insert countless branch lines in the middle, and there are other branches interspersed within the branch lines. It's a shame.

Do works with goals and tasks seem easier to write? One of the two works, Xiangxi Blood God and Secret Academy Cultivation, is a game console and has tasks and goals. Secret Academy has human skin and missions. However, when it comes to Nuo opera, it seems that there are no tasks and goals, so it is difficult to control?

It's been a long time since I've seen such a well-written method of adding a weird and infinite flow to the real-world main line. There are very few that write interesting occupations and have a sense of design about folklore. Many times I don't know where you learned those unorthodox things. It's well written, but I have a few comments: The first copy of Chapter 1 or 200 is not even finished. Is there only one cartridge in the game console? This is because the explorable content is rated as small and the cassette is so long. Wouldn't your next copy be a copy and a book? The core point of Infinite Streaming is that every time the protagonist enters the instance at the climax of the event, many boring parts are skipped. But to be honest, your writing is a bit overwhelming. 2. I skipped it for no apparent reason when I reached the climax, and then turned it over in the following paragraphs to explain what I experienced during the climax. I actually don't quite understand this way of writing. The climax of the plot is obviously the most interesting part, so what does it mean that you insist on skipping it? Everyone can actually infer what happened in the climax plot from the context, but knowing it does not mean feeling it. The most important thing in a novel is experience, and the climax plot should be well written. 3. Writing style, we are not here to do reading comprehension, but to be honest, it does affect reading. But you are an old author, and your sense of language is probably the same. If you can improve this, it will be very popular 4. Compared with the design of the copy, the sense of reality is really thin. The act of writing a copy can indirectly affect the actual design or what inheritance can be brought out from the copy. It would be better to have a little connection with real people and hang on to the thread

It's so flat, and the frame setting is so narrow. The author's writing skills haven't improved at all over the years. He's always been writing single-player games.

This author always liked to write half of the plot, cut off the plot before reaching the climax, and then fast forward to the conclusion. It's over with a quick recollection of what happened before. It was so painful to watch. Is it the same later? It's better not to watch this all the time, it's annoying😡

The writing level of these two recent chapters is very poor. It's not as good as the copy. It feels like you want to show off but don't show off. You should just write normally. Forcibly catering to book friends will only lower your level.

The author's writing is really good, but the punctuation marks and some incomprehensible words really affect reading. Sometimes I really can't understand what to say if I don't read it several times 😥

To be honest, old readers know that the author has stopped working. If I really continue writing, I'm afraid I'll accidentally write five or six hundred pages. There are more than a dozen branch lines, and then I can't hold it back anymore, so I can only become an immortal immediately and then end it. Instead of infinite flow expansion like now.

I want to cum😍😍😍

In reality, the protagonist is like a man made of mud. How much money can a migrant worker earn by selling his life and consumables to make it clear that he won't let him go? How much money can he earn even after being threatened personally?

Just right, the author writes so well! 9 Tickets for you, please add some details

The reality is too watery, just like Tang Monk's nagging, it's uncomfortable to chase

AI kills one round, more than 20 on the fantasy monthly ticket list

Open a new dungeon quickly. Realistic plots don't seem to be your strong point. Use your strengths and avoid weaknesses.

The first dungeon is very nice, and I feel like I still have something to say. It's really Zhao San's perfect life.