My Little Sister Can't Possibly Be the Evil God's Chosen One

I was a little disappointed when I saw Chapter 99. It has the shortcomings of Riqing's lack of focus, but it doesn't have the delicate emotions of Riqing. Moreover, the domestic novel audience is more interested in plot. As a different world novel, you have no driving force for the development of the plot. Obviously, the characters in the background have a lot of room for development. There is no complete main line in the plot, and I don't know if there is an outline. At any rate, I can establish a main line and a branch line. I can learn how to do single-player canned games, and at least try to see how other better novels are done. Biga, Whispering Poems, although I gave up on it long ago because of the many mistakes, but I made the main branch line, taking into account water characters, plot and emotions. What you wrote is a love adventure in a different world, not an urban love. At least you have built a good world view. The story of the princess at the beginning is very good, and the protagonist is not smart, but I don't understand why three heroines are introduced in one go. In such a small narrative space, without high-quality villains or supporting characters, and without major events, how to develop the plot and emotions? It's just general talk, the development of the plot of the classic.        ，，，，，，， Oh, when I saw the beginning, I thought I would be pleasantly surprised. It's really hard to find any good works in the harem of another world. You start with a very standard world view, saving the big shot and setting up a foreshadowing plot. It's very good, but you can obviously investigate the source of the family curse later. The main line, and then lead to various adventures for self-rescue, and then who is saved and protected along the way, encounters a big villain organization, deepens the relationship between crises, etc., Follow the traditional jrpg, or you can modify it yourself, at least lead to the main line, and have some inner drive. Didn't you find that You Yue's portrayal was very empty and abrupt? Didn't the protagonist suddenly lose his wits later on (suddenly helping You Yue, inexplicably afraid of the king and not looking for the royal family, and the king inexplicably protects his daughter and wants to settle the score with the protagonist (you know he is playing the old ghost fire plot) and does not help the protagonist, etc., This Tai Ri Qingdian Okay, I know it is to suppress the protagonist's level and avoid developing too fast, but why can't it be more profound or real, such as the protagonist's cursed family has problems, the king has problems, etc. You can even write down the influence of the royal family at the beginning, with the big nobles in power or write down the status of the princess) And why are there three heroines written in one go? It can be clearly divided into saving Iluna first, then adventuring for a while, letting Luvia appear, making her vigilant, and then experiencing the major events of the cult. After the resolution, the relationship heats up, and then You Yue appears. Besides, You Yue's label is also unknown, foodie? Obviously, you can learn from the creation of broken heroines such as Pancreas, Four Lies or CL, which makes people feel loved and want to help, so that the feeling of relief can be deeply rooted in people's hearts. Moreover, emotional stimulation is not just about crying and laughing. You can describe the swing and twist of the little feet, the changes in clothes, the sight of the eyes, words alone (for example: diary), communication with trusted people (for example: talking to the deceased mother), communication with people around you, etc. It is unreal to just cry or laugh. In the final analysis, I still hope that the book can be better. The shortage of books is really serious. I finally found a subject that I like, but the writing style and plot structure are not satisfactory. Alas, I hope the author can read some traditional literary novels or copy some writing routines, so that he can write better novels. Of course, if it is just for fun, treat it as if I didn't say it. Happiness is the most important thing, and focus on what you value more at the moment.

It doesn't look like a newcomer. At the beginning, I thought it was another classic sacrificial cultist and then started to make things happen. Unexpectedly, it was also a redemption and development story. The writing style and rhythm are not bad. I will reserve a place for you. I will update it well and I will not supervise it.

Investigation report: "Number"-593 Investigation target: "My sister cannot be the chosen one of the evil god" - the male protagonist - [Yaheng Katya] Investigation result: [Reincarnation (Awakening of Suhui)] Judgment basis: Abnormal traits: A time-travel investigator, as the name suggests, is a profession that investigates and records the time-travel situations of time-travelers. It aims to let observers (that is, readers) in all the worlds know in advance the time-travel situations of time-travelers in this world, and volunteers to provide observers with fast time-travel information query services If there are any fallacies, I hope to correct them ——All Souls Feast Zhenjun Stay on March 25, 2026

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When the relationship between the protagonist and the heroine was warming up, he suddenly went to find the sister. When the relationship between the sister and the sister was warming up, he said he would go back to the heroine. The plot felt very disconnected. The first half and the second half of the plot were just like watching a unit drama, and there was no connection at all.

The classic sacrifice starts, and the classic attracts the evil god's physique. The characters are very childish, and it's hard to imagine that the protagonist was a social animal before.

I feel like the author went crazy when writing about younger sisters, infantilizing all the characters. The protagonist was a social beast in his previous life and now behaves like a childish little boy. The female protagonists also behaved more childishly than the set age. They were all brought down by the two younger sisters.

Don't make the male protagonist look like a brainless fool just for the sake of a simple Shura field. He can't see anything and doesn't take the initiative.

Just like the title, I saw that the time in the forest jumped to half a month and a half. After so long, the princess was lost and no one found her.

It's this kind of nonsensical way of writing. The inner activities seem to be humorous, but it looks really vulgar.