After I Went Bankrupt, I Worked in Love Games to Pay Off My Debts

Let me witness the rise and fall of a newbie again

I read ten chapters... The author's writing style is good, but... In an online novel, golden fingers are just spices, patchwork to the plot, and gimmicks. The core of online articles is stories. Remove the cheat part, and the rest is the main text. This book, if you remove the golden finger part, will give people a weird feeling. ...... The core story is: A rich second-generation pig's feet play love games! ... Looking at it this way, you can imagine that the audience of this book is very [narrow]. When reading online articles, readers like to read them as pig's feet. Rich second generation... The readers who can be substituted for this character should belong to the "minority". After all, people who have experienced the second generation of rich people are in the minority, and the second generation of rich people or those who are highly exposed to the second generation of rich people in life are also in the minority. Then playing love games... Another wave of "minority" screening of readers... There are even fewer people who like to watch others play love games. ... So, just for this subject matter and this idea, the audience is very, very narrow, and the results will naturally be very poor.

Come on, I personally feel that the protagonist in front of me gives me a conflicting feeling. At first glance, I looked like a college student, buying a car and spending money to transfer money. He looked like a middle-aged person, but he turned out to be a high school student. I think there is a very abnormal point. The protagonist has money to buy a luxury car. Que repeatedly said that his family is bankrupt and has no medical expenses. He can also borrow the car as a mortgage to the company. Although I understand it is to introduce this system to cash back. In short, the background of the character creation is not very good One thing is that since the currency has been eliminated, the brand of the mobile phone should be ignored. A vivo used by a rich second generation who is suspected of being bankrupt gave me the illusion that I am also a rich second generation 🙂 After all, this brand of mobile phones is usually more affordable and durable Finally, if there are more updates, nothing can be seen in the new book, and the details can only be deducted. As long as there are enough updates, the details are irrelevant.

The first draft of Chapter 93 has not been revised yet.

Brother, have you signed a contract with Power Generation for Love?

The language dialogue is a bit stiff, the sense of expectation is a bit lacking, the description is okay, more than 99% of new writers, but it is recommended to use more verbs when describing, and use less adjectives and too many attributive modifications. Also, the confession in front of the love system is too abrupt, it is recommended to narrate it before narrating it, that's it. I hope it can help you, come on, I wish you to become a god soon 🙂🙂🙂

Everyone has a time when they are young

If possible, I will start editing Chapter 2 🙂