Conan: the Winery Prince's Game of Science

How should I put it? I have read more than twenty chapters. According to my personal taste, I said it is a personal preference, but you can also refer to it. The first is that it is too easy to get bored in daily life. The second point is more important to me, which is the issue of world view. Top agents make up for childhood. It is okay, but how can you pay attention to the sadness, and it is also used as a seed of redemption. Then there is strong vs strong, which makes me feel like the female channel a few years ago, and the so-called old enemy you made is too crude. Your loneliness is also very false. You want to emphasize the "miserable" too much, which makes the character very hypocritical. You exist for her, but you are extremely narcissistic. Do you love her or not? What about yourself who loves her? Did you write that the lonely are strong, or that the strong are inherently lonely? If it's the second point, then you take your natural talent too seriously. This is also the reason why I don't like the dragon worldview. It's because of the setting of Blood Mourning, this little bourgeois fantasy, no Guo Yang Zhi is very good. For these things, he writes in contradictory language. He fights and conflicts with his own language. You can try to learn it. I think this is the most attractive part of Jiangnan's writing style. However, in this regard, the setting of your protagonist has completely failed. It's up to you. In the end, the biggest problem is the emotion between the characters. You take it more for granted. You should be moved here, angry here, and sad here. Narratives should all be like this. There are no miracles and accidents, and there are no emotions beyond the standard narrative. This is very common in novels in the past, such as many female channels and male channels. Frequent masterpieces, but if it's love, I hope it can explore love. Didn't you leave a comment on my book list? You can read the few books I recommend, especially My Girlfriend is from the Future In short, don't be too attached to the setting. The character is reflected in your story, not what you say.

Do you want to write traditional literature? Is it preparing for publication? But this is a light novel and it was first published on Qidian! You have to be seen first, come on!

When I read the introduction, a familiar name appeared, and I thought it looked like a fanfic, but I haven't read Conan very much, and I've never written a fanfic. I read other reviews and said it was a light novel, so I'm going to review it as a light novel, but in fact I don't watch male videos, so I don't understand much, so if I say anything wrong, just treat it as nonsense. (●'◡'●)

If I open a book without thinking about the harem and just drive, will anyone read it?🙂🙂

Just finished reading two chapters. Keep the rest for chewing. Current thoughts: Oh, I can actually see a book with elegant writing in Conan fandom... Keep up the good work. I'm quite looking forward to it. However, since it is a fan, you may need to consider that readers have different levels of understanding of the original work. It may be helpful to add some explanatory content appropriately.

Are they all raising books or am I single-player 🙂

After reading the various private devices in Chapter 2, various deputy commanders and the like, I couldn't stand it any longer. Besides, what kind of money was there in Southeast Asia at that time... Could I sell goods at that time? Will the boss meet offline? Are you kidding me? Rye can see the boss and Karasuma's name, so the organization is gone. 😅 There are too many loopholes. The 18-year-old heir. Regardless of whether Rum is convinced or not, the boss will not give way because the theme is immortality.

After reading five chapters, the writing is OK, the description is OK, but there are problems with the narrative and the subject matter does not match well. The problem with narrative is that too much emphasis is placed on description. The environment, character expressions, tone, and behavior are all embellishments in the narrative. How to allow readers to quickly understand and see the development of the story is the focus of narrative, especially in the field of online novels. The author should have written some literary works, or imitated literary works, but it is difficult for online readers to appreciate such delicate things. Or, it's the difference between movies and TV series. The movie pays close attention to every frame, the changes in the expressions of the characters, the changes in the environment, and the changes in the atmosphere. The TV series simply allows readers to watch a story. Even if the writing style of Squid is slow, it is because of the slow pace of the story rather than the narrative problem. To put it bluntly, he slowed down the pace in a plot and talked a lot about "who does what" and various considerations, instead of putting a lot of descriptions into "who does what". Character expressions are needed, but not all plots require them. For example, during dialogue, readers can directly perceive the changes in character expressions through the dialogue itself. There is no need to write everything out. This is not writing a script. Let's talk about actions and behaviors. Currently, there are indeed very few writers who write long actions. One is that it is difficult to write well, and the other is that it is difficult for today's readers to read such details. Consider simplifying them appropriately. It is definitely not accurate to say that you are watery, because this type of narrative is not watery, but the amount of description makes it difficult for readers to read. The above is about narrative. As for the subject matter, the subject matter does not match well. The original painting style of Conan is light novel and childish. The dark organization in the original work is responsible for the main plot and "conflict". Even so, the dark organization in the original work is written in a light novel style. So there is a bit of a drama, and coupled with the narrative problem, it will not be included. I would rather see the author write an original subject matter, the writing style is really good, the narrative and rhythm adapt to the style of online writing, and the story written is not too bad. For reference, can you look at the human arsenal? This is also an example of transformation. His writing style is also slow and his writing skills are good, but his narrative rhythm is very powerful. There are also some great writers, such as Yuantong and Squid, you can refer to them so that your description will not affect your narrative.

I just watched the time when Hattori appeared in episode 49🙂🙂 It was so outrageous that I didn't know whether to use and or not 🙂🙂

Writing a book is not easy, so stay with me!

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Is there a typo in the introduction? Shiho Miyano seems to be one year older than Shin Kudo👀

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How should I put it? It's a pity that this is a fan of Conan. Even if you put aside the bad things in the original work, this kind of content and subject matter is not suitable for writing about Conan. The plot of Conan's story is too small. The essence of the dark organization is just a detective line that Aoyama has always hung there, and what you want to write is closer to military espionage and intelligence lines. This kind of thing is set in Conan, and the background of Conan cannot accommodate such a large content. Although the original work is about the Japanese police, the CIA and the FBI, the structure is actually small, and the thunder is loud and the rain is small. What you want to write about is actually not "Detective Conan" but "Ghost in the Shell". The writing style and content of Conan are like putting the core of a hard-core pseudo-documentary into a popcorn action movie. You can watch it, but it's very strange. Conan can only write more about criminal investigation, which is why fans generally write about the red side and rarely write about the black side. Because as a detective animation, the united story of solving crimes and solving puzzles is the charm of this kind of work. It is not important who the murderer is, but how he committed the murder is important. How to know how the murderer committed the murder is the highlight. So basically the red square is written, and the black square is actually written as mostly red. It's so rare that a book like this one contains pure black, and it turns out that the look and feel is really strange.

After reading the introduction, I blindly guessed that the author is a woman.

After Koizumi Anko appears, I will become a weekly editor 🙂 I have prepared the first draft of 45 chapters of the new book, and I will revise it and start publishing it.

I've reached episode 41 of the anime, and I found materials for two episodes 🙂 One episode will be used immediately, but the other episode has not found a place to use it.

Four heroines! Belmod appears in the first chapter Miyano Shiho appears in the fifth chapter Koizumi Anko appears in the 85th chapter Ooka Momiji appears around the 500th chapter The first three will be collected, Koizumi Anko is the first, Miyano Shiho is the second, and Miyano Shiho is the third. The red leaves of Ooka are not yet certain

Teacher, what's the main line? I've seen the latest one and it feels like it's very popular except for the literary youth.

1,784 Words have been deleted from Chapter 1 of the new version 670 words have been deleted from Chapter 2 of the new version 789 words have been deleted from Chapter 3 of the new version 462 words have been deleted from Chapter 4 of the new version 116 words have been deleted from Chapter 21 of the new version

I feel that after chapter 89 is revised, the total number of words can be reduced by 40,000 to 50,000 😥😥

I want to set up a flag🙂