A Slave Girl's Guide to Redemption

The author really wrote serious novels before, but I feel like he was suppressing his own skills when writing this one 🙂🙂

The slavery society under the background of the third natural disaster. It is such a novel novel, and an extraterrestrial demon has also traveled through time 👍

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There are too many bad points, and the eunuch story is one of them. The male protagonist's character is too virginal, and there are too many flaws to count. Moreover, the side stories include eunuchs 😅 and there are all kinds of slap-in-the-face plots that are annoying to watch.

The beginning is very interesting. The interaction with the little slave, the game-like world view, and the system of Sudan's four desires are all very attractive But before and after the first climax - becoming the lord of the city-state, the plot is confusing, the characters collapse, and even the slave cultivation is not written. Can you believe that the first little slave, half of the heroine has no plot at all After that, the process of becoming the Lord of the city-state was even rougher. It started unexpectedly in a hurry, and then I didn't finish 3 chapters. The previous Lord of the City-state was too cowardly, and then inexplicably refreshed some great nobles What impressed me most about this episode was the great nobles, who showed off their power in front of the protagonist, and even wanted to control the protagonist to become a puppet. When they found that they couldn't control it, they would definitely poison the protagonist with a honey trap Although I was very unhappy when I saw it, now that I have summed it up, I find that the novel written by The Great Noble is actually better than the main character. The protagonist, after being poisoned by a noble, did not dare to resist. The reason was that he felt that the noble, who had not been described at all before, had somehow become an important force in maintaining the city-state. But the author had written before that the world is generally more of a game. With raw stones as energy, a large amount of resources can be created, and the nobles have only mastered more raw stone machinery. During the slave era, they didn't even know how to farm As a result, the city-state is now inexplicably inseparable from the great nobles. So, the early slave training (the heroine disappeared) and the first main plot climax (the noble noble became the protagonist inexplicably) all collapsed, and I gave up the book But after all, the beginning was very good, and it gave me an unforgettable memory. Now I will build a grave for him too.

According to the group management, this book has been cut. The reason is that new chapters have been added to the palace, and the change has made the mood explode. The author has returned to work, I hope everyone knows!

Delete the group and run away. If you can't make a living, just do your job with peace of mind. Oh author, but eunuchs will be scolded. I have expected it before.

I have read more than a hundred chapters, and the writing in other places is quite good. However, after moving here, the widow did whatever she wanted to do, such as dealing with education efforts. She made her own decisions without telling the protagonist at all. The protagonist doesn't dare to disobey whatever the widow asks her to do, at least that's how she behaves. Even the widow doesn't object to being kind to her efforts after she sees it improves production efficiency. Now I plan to run away, I am afraid that one day the protagonist will come back, and the widow thinks that Liannu syndrome cannot be cured, so she directly sells the efforts to get close to the mother and daughter, or gives it to the son so that the good-for-nothing son can be used to help his father treat the disease I know that the author cannot write like this, but if there is no author's big hand to control, according to the current shaping, it is entirely possible for the widow to do this after there is no shortage of efforts. Like the mother-in-law who helped her son drive away his daughter-in-law in the Peacock Flying Southeast, or the loyal servant Chen Ma who helped the master kill his wife and child in the game Paperman, she thought she was doing a good deed and did it self-righteously. It is normal to feel that you have been favored by the widow and try your best to meet the widow's requirements in return. However, after several times when the widow made unauthorized processing efforts, such as brainwashing Milia, which affected the score, the protagonist still did not say a word. Tell me before doing anything. The widow was not self-aware either. She thought she was a smart person, but her secret was revealed when she moved here. When you become a hostess, it's normal for you to think about the protagonist. However, there have been several times when you felt that the protagonist's behavior was wrong but the result was right and it turned out to be very right. She still did a lot of things on her own without asking in advance or even notifying her afterwards. The protagonist had to find out by herself. In this world, normal married women have low status and can be beaten casually. Why is she so awesome in this name?

Because of this very attractive setting, I have been following the update until now, but the recent plot makes me feel weird. After reading the update today, I probably figured out some of the things that I felt were inconsistent. Of course, this is just my family's opinion, you don't necessarily have to listen to me. 1. The character description is not well developed. At the beginning, the first slave girl was obviously trying to portray a three-dimensional image, but this caused the story to be delayed. Later, after following the main line, countless character sheets were revealed, basically all of them were shaped like masks. I'm not saying that you can't use masks to create characters. In a story that is not a group portrait but a male protagonist, using masks to create a character is a very effective technique for portraying a new character in a short period of time and deepening the memory. However, in the process of chasing the progress of the main plot, it is inevitable that people feel that the portrayal of the characters is very superficial and the character settings are very arbitrary. 2. The setting of the supporting characters is a bit "white", which sometimes makes the classic and refreshing passages not enjoyable. As a villain, it would definitely be much more satisfying for readers to defeat Sima Yi on behalf of the male protagonist than to defeat the village king Sledgehammer, because everyone in this era has long been immune to the similar pleasures. As a helper, it seems that the setting of the wife is basically very "white" except for opening a revelation and giving start-up funds to the protagonist. At the beginning, she said that she was very resourceful and did not want to be a puppet, but her excessive love and indulgence towards the male protagonist beyond logic, her ability to easily provoke dissension when she had the ability to foresee, and her "management incompetence" after taking out new money-making cheats were harmful to the character's original high IQ setting. It is equivalent to a game in which more than 80 chapters are composed of the protagonist and novice supporting characters. We often see book friends in other books praising "the villain's IQ has not dropped off the line", which shows that if it can be done, it will also be a very classic and exciting point. To add some details, the idea that the male protagonist wanted to replace him was exposed a bit too early. It would be like anyone with a good relationship would tell the other person if asked, keeping things secret to reveal the truth. If it is too casual, it will look like playing house. 3. In addition to the growth of numerical values ​​on the surface, there is also a hidden line that is the growth of the protagonist's personality. Without this thing, it would be easy to write the fourth natural disaster that relies on omniscience and omnipotence to let oneself go, and the protagonist will not be able to truly integrate into this world. So far I haven't seen any tendency in this regard. Of course, being "white" is not a fault. Being able to write novels that are both "white" and enjoyable is also a classic track. However, I think this is the same group of user portraits as the readers who are competing for hegemony? As the author said before, he found that if he wrote more about the edges, he could attract more readers. If he was facing such attracted readers, "white" might also be the right choice. The above are personal opinions and are for reference only, but as I said in my last book friend circle, no matter what you think, I feel that you should maintain the current rhythm and writing method. First write a small climax of the volume and then see if you need to adjust.

: The first few chapters after it was released were too streamlined, and there was no detailed description at all.

Can Meldia be killed by the plot? Not only is she dictating the protagonist, but she is also not allowed to talk to Miliya. It seems that she can't tell the difference between the big and small kings. Of course, there is another point that is too old-fashioned, and even privately trains Miliya

It's very uncomfortable. You just took those dozens of female slaves who can't be disciplined and brought them back to the territory? Not afraid of rebellion? If they don't listen to your white flowers and a thousand origin stones? Their loyal master is not you, and you don't control their master. I really don't understand. It just happened here. I'm speechless.

Hateful! With such good results, it's a eunuch! 😭😭😭

To clarify, the author is blocked by review every day and becomes a fool. He crashes and deletes the group.

The book group was immediately disbanded, and the author said more than once in the group that he would not write this book after finishing it. The last few chapters have been rectified in a small dark room.

Self-recommended book of the same type, "Becoming a Talent by the Demon Girl's Side", nod to jump, even if the data is poor, you won't be a eunuch, feel free to read it! You can read a few chapters to taste it. If you like it, you are welcome to read it!

The updates are too slow, and they don't let me read the content behind it. It's extremely toxic.

Rt, after all, it was still a bit fresh when I first watched it, but after too many descriptions, it began to become superficial and repetitive. Now that I see Mediya, I know that I must bring up the bra wrap. Marina is horny as soon as she comes out. Miliya is better: not too many edges but more keywords. In this context, other people's slaves are mentioned as "painful", "screaming", "empty", "walking dead" and abused. This can be explained by reasons such as being consistent with the actual situation and enhanced rendering. However, do the people around the protagonist really have to keep using superficial and vulgar descriptions? The entry "Bedtime Etiquette" repeatedly emphasizes +1 which is a bit boring. After all, it is a character who appears frequently, so always writing it like this will cause aesthetic fatigue. Is this kind of description too common nowadays? At least my threshold has been raised again and again, and I no longer have the surprise of "This is the starting point?!"

I think this should be a problem that every author will encounter. I think the author's rhythm and skills are enough to make a living in online writing, but he lacks some opportunities. In reality, I gave up writing online articles when I encountered a better choice, and I couldn't see the end of the online articles at a glance. If you, the author, can see it, I sincerely hope you can complete this work in the future and welcome you back.

I'm really speechless. I should have known better if I didn't watch it 😡

Although I knew it would die sooner or later, I didn't expect it to be so soon 😭

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630,000 Words... Nowadays, even top-notch authors from Qidian just run away after working full time for three months? I don't know if this book has been on the shelves for 3 months.

"It'll be a little later", it's almost time to enter the palace

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