Cooking the Sea Zhenjun

The plot is reasonable, the writing is smooth, the characters are three-dimensional, and the lines are quite ancient. However, the people in it occasionally use ancient sentences when speaking, and occasionally use modern vernacular to create sentences, which seems nondescript. I suggest that it be better to use unified words and sentences. I have read most of it now, and I feel that it is quite good-looking. It is not like what the three hot reviews said. I suggest you read it yourself.

If you have the conditions, you still stay in the Gu family as a slave. It's too petty. If you switch to another sect, your starting performance will definitely be much better. Most young writers have pretty good writing skills, but they are prone to getting sick.

The first part is fine, but the second part is unreadable if you pretend to be dead and don't escape. It's a bit similar to the plot of a book I read last month about becoming a demon and cultivating immortality in one hundred generations, but the story was about keeping the family in check and collecting resources, and finally had a fight with the people of the blood-sacrificing family, and it became a story. You are pretending to be dead. You are a little person like a slave. You come back to show your loyalty to your fallen master. Why don't you think that the internal fighting in the family is not messy enough and disgusting? There are golden fingers, there are travel expenses, there is a pot of gold,

It's well written and eloquently told, but it's a pity that the current environment has destined that this kind of book must be written alone in the early stage. If the author has the patience to write a million words, he will most likely have something to say.

Why don't you write about one person and the same person? It's such a pity that the five blessings come to our door

The writing and narration are pretty good, but the plot is a bit cliche. I wish you success.

I feel that this tripod has too many golden finger abilities. Only one divination is enough, and it also needs to strengthen itself 😥. This may be because the golden finger is enlarged and the readability is reduced.

I'm not happy about it. It's really not popular before it's released. It's slow to win readers.

What the book review section said is actually not unreasonable. This way of writing is a bit old-fashioned. It is like a routine that I have seen 10,000 times. It seems that everyone knows what plot will happen later. If the quality can be maintained, it is actually good to use it to supplement the salary. In all aspects, it cannot beat people who have been indulging in this for a long time, but then again

Chapter 18: Persuading people to quit, an unlucky thing

I think this book has the potential to become a big hit or even become a god The content is eloquently told, and it is not a holy mother but also very logical The most important thing is that it is in line with objective facts and does not say that it is domineering or brainless Even until the end I thought it was a new book or a vest by some great god.

Let's learn from Wu Gui's Zifu Jindan Dao and improve your book potential. Sometimes trends are important. Nowadays, those who watch Xianxia prefer Wu Gui's 🐢 settings.

Your writing style is very good, but you can't keep it consistent, and there are some problems with polishing the plot. But the plot is actually not very damaging. The main problem is that it cannot be completed consistently. Even if it is a bad ending, it is still good. The eunuch is intolerable.

Don't hide your flaws, poor grades are normal

There are some flaws in the details. For example, calling him Third Young Master is what others call him. Shouldn't the positive description include his name? A person has many identities, including son, father, and master. When talking to different people, the title will have to change.

I feel that if the third young master is replaced by a female, it will be better for readers to treat him as the female protagonist. Then, in the starting background, it is assumed that the two are close friends in life and death. The protagonist has saved his life, and he will share his resources with the protagonist. Then the psychological description clearly emphasizes that the resources he gives are the reason for the protagonist to return. Instead of going back now without clear reasons.

The writing is okay, but it's not fun to read as I'm always clinging to the third young master.

The beginning was very good, but after getting the dragon corpse and running to Tianwufang City, I felt that the entire plot was not in the right state. The writing and description are still there, but the overall story progression lacks soul, and the author must have felt it. There is a hammer in the east and a stick in the west, and all kinds of spiritual food and persuasion are used to make up the numbers. This is also the reason why the author has stopped updating in the past two days.

What kind of garbage is a slave addicted to?

I recommend the follow-up novel "Eternal Life: Step by Step to Immortality", which has a positive outlook on life, a smooth plot, and a grand world view. No traffic, please support me 🙏

After reading about a hundred chapters, I feel uncomfortable with the protagonist's identity as a servant. It seems that he is serving a little fairy. Shouldn't I quickly stand up and take charge? In fact, the writing is okay, but this status point makes me uncomfortable. I keep calling others young master and young master. Do you want me to be a servant? 🙂

Could it be that chapter reviews are also included ...

🤣🤣🤣After all, there is no one named Li Feiyu in the work, and this book is not about ordinary people. There will be a feeling that the sense of substitution is suddenly broken.

It was okay in the beginning, but it started to fail once we got to Fangshi. The plot and logic didn't match up, it was just weak and boring, and I had no desire to continue watching it.

In some places, I feel like I'm having a bad breath.

Young man write well to support you

What's going on? It looks pretty. Did you cut it?

Is there any curse attached to this category?