Reborn, I Short the Korean Peninsula

The first one: Don't be ridiculous, really don't be ridiculous Writing daily life and writing literature are two different things. There are too many unnecessary dialogues. You can write eight chapters to play a game with Li Naling. There are too many running accounts, which is a waste of patience. Will deleting these eight chapters affect the subsequent plot? I don't think it affects her at all. Anyway, I read hundreds of chapters later and she doesn't even have a name. Second: About the career line and popular science I can understand that the author wants to write a "brainful" protagonist. The financial operations are written in detail to appear real and professional, which in itself is a plus. But the crux of the matter is proportions. When readers open the novel, their first request is "what happens next" rather than "what is the logic of this operation". You can write about how the protagonist makes money by taking advantage of the information gap, but the focus should be on the consequences and conflicts brought about by his decisions, rather than explaining the transaction steps step by step. Half of the chapter is seasoning, and one chapter is embellishment. Several chapters in a row become "an instruction manual in a different form." Readers are here to experience the story, not to take the financial qualification certificate test. Third: The problem with the emotional line, to put it bluntly, is that you use too much force in the early stage and abandon it directly in the later stage. When it comes to winning Ji Soo's part, from the endorsement to the tour guide to the scene setting, every step is on the emotional point. It's really silky smooth and I can't help but think that if I were a woman, you would have won it all. But once the relationship is established, there is not even a decent interaction in the next hundreds of chapters. They only mentioned it when eating with Park Chae-young. This is equivalent to destroying the emotional foundation carefully built in the past. What will readers think? Oh, so it turns out that all this effort was just to push down that moment? So what do those delicate foreshadowings before mean? Is it considered a tactical performance? The most taboo thing about the love line is "refrigerate it after the strategy is completed", because readers have already developed expectations for this couple, and if you suddenly cut off the relationship, the disappointment will be stronger than without this line. Since the beginning is so carefully laid out, even if there are one or two quality interactions every dozens of chapters, the relationship can continue and deepen, and even minor frictions and conflicts can make this line come alive. Rather than like now, it is an idol drama in the early stage and becomes a tool in the later stage. These are the three problems I discovered 1: The blurred boundary between daily life and hydrology 2: The imbalance between professional knowledge and plot advancement 3: The emotional line starts and ends In fact, these three problems all point to one problem, which is the failure to control the narrative rhythm. I'm done complaining, I hope it's helpful to you.

There are so many female protagonists that seem quite intimidating, but I found the content extremely boring after watching it.

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It feels quite fragmented. The career line is written in too much detail. Anyway, I don't want to read your career line at all. The instruction-style explanations in several consecutive chapters are a bit boring to me anyway. The emotional line is like playing a dungeon. Whoever's turn it is will have a major plot, but once the plot is over, there will be no plot for a long time. Just like Li Na Kyung in the early stage, and then Mina, Itzy or Kim Ji Soo in the later stage, or even the male protagonist's sister. I almost forgot about these people without looking at the character list. It just gave me the feeling that the author liked a person in a certain period of time, and then wrote a lot of plots about her accordingly, and then after a while, he didn't like her so much and completely forgot about it. The connection is very unnatural, as if you are loading a game while playing a game, and you can continue it whenever you think of it.

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What I wrote in the front is a bit too rambling, I don't know what happens later, but there are a lot of illogical places in the front, which really affects reading.

Looking at the name, I thought it was a financial tycoon who randomly killed a girl group, but it turned out to have a literary taste, which is not my cup of tea.

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Prototype reference: Jang Wonyoung Affiliated company: Starship Entertainment Starship Entertainment ：Zero Gravity Project Basic information Name: Jang Wonyoung / Jang Wonyoung (장원영 / Jang Wonyoung) Identity: Former member of IZ*ONE · Active girl group ive Facade Born: 2004 Character positioning: childhood enemy / "the first trump card" on the capital chessboard Relationship with the protagonist: Acquaintance in childhood, opposing positions as adults, but they were Destiny is repeatedly bound Childhood enemy setting (source of emotion) Appearance and temperament Stage image: Absolutely central physique Natural preference for camera and stage Personal temperament: Bright, elegant, and highly symbolic Having transcended a single "idol" and becoming a "symbolic character" Character setting Surface level: Perfect career Qualities Strong emotional management Core: Extremely sensitive to "position", "height" and "uniqueness" The fear is not of failure, but of being replaced Hidden psychology: She is very aware that she is being shaped by capital into a being who "must always make progress" Relationship with the protagonist Cao Yisen Appearance: Polite business cooperation and impeccable public appearances Privately: Both know each other's ambitions Also know that the other is the only one who can understand "loneliness at high places" ⚠️Key spoilers for the future (main line level)