Peninsula: No Dating Your Idols

Happy Puppy

Nomenclature

Is this purely fan fiction? It's been over a hundred chapters, and the male protagonist has yet to fall in love, and his career is just doing odd jobs. Are all heroines in purely spiritual love?

Dragon's Dream

It's like you're going crazy. If I write a separate thing for each chapter, I can't connect it at all.

Pig Snake

At first glance, it is quite comfortable, the setting is novel, and the heroine does not violate the rules. But looking at the back, it may be that there is no outline problem. The male protagonist cannot see the growth line. He just shoots this and that every day. It has the atmosphere of a social animal. The more boring it looks, the career line is weird. Then there's the love line. Except for Xiu'er's love line, which is very natural, the others are just like her who fell in love in the dream. I don't remember the point where I like the male protagonist.

The golden finger that helps the heroine develop her career is relatively new, but there is a lack of feedback for the protagonist. The starting idea is good. The shortcomings of the golden finger can also be made up for by upgrading the dungeon or achieving certain achievements. However, the author obviously does not have this idea. As a result, the protagonist can only make extra money by fishing for side jobs for a long time in the early stage. The bond of Goldfinger can enhance the chances of contact between the male and female protagonists, but without sufficient capital, everything is in vain, especially many of the female protagonists are rich in wealth. This is not a sign of being snobbish or snobbish, but a fundamental gap in the values ​​of different classes. Don't talk about the true love between the male and female protagonists. It has already been written about Korean entertainment, and it is also a harem. I guess the author himself cannot lie to himself. Compared to the fact that the protagonist needs to increase contact opportunities through fetters, those agents and assistants are the ones that the heroines get along with day and night. It is really unreasonable for the protagonist to rely on his photography skills to attract top actresses. The author repeatedly emphasizes that strength is not important in this era. Top status is almost always the result of marketing. A few photos may not be as important as strength itself. Marketing>Strength>Image materials, this order should not be a big problem. Will the heroines stalk the male protagonists because of a few photos? There is one last problem. The author seems to have no outline, and it feels like he has just finished writing. There is a lack of planning for the arrangement of Goldfinger and the advancement of the plot. As a result, there will be a large amount of writing when there is no idea, and a good deck of cards will be beaten to pieces in the end. Making an outline before writing can avoid the situation of being stuck. When you don't feel a certain plot, use a vague way to foreshadow the key events and continue writing later. When inspiration comes after the foreshadowing, expand on it. On the contrary, it will connect the plot and make the work more vivid. A straightforward narrative is inherently uninteresting, and coupled with the large hydrology, it is too boring.

I have been saving up for a long time to finish reading it. Overall, the recent plot is pretty good. Apart from being a bit dull, the rest is good. Just write it at your own pace. Here is a suggestion for the author. To be honest, it is almost 300,000 words so far. The protagonist has always unfolded the plot from the perspective of a fan. At most, he is a photographer, which is seriously inconsistent with those idols. I have also seen that the author is working hard to eliminate this identity gap and let Kim Ji-soo arrange the career plan of the protagonist. So far, everything is fine. What I want to say is, does the author feel that the emotional line is too plain so far? All the emotional interactions between the protagonist and the heroine are basically in dreams. He is a pure dream male player. In reality, no matter which idol he faces, he will abide by his duty, be his own fan honestly, and never step beyond the boundaries. I have seen comments from readers criticizing the protagonist as a eunuch. Although it is inappropriate, you can still see the reason. I personally think that while writing at your own pace, can you lay some foreshadowing and introductions appropriately? Does it show the change in the heroine's feelings for the protagonist in real life, or the change in the protagonist's mentality towards the heroines? After all, we all come to see the protagonist and the heroine fall in love. We cannot be fans forever. You can write the rhythm a little slower, but it is best to write clearly about things like signs. So far, Xiu Xiu has the most scenes. If you have doubts about the protagonist It seems to be a tendency to be jealous, but whether it is because of the fans and the main owner, or because of emotional factors, it is not clear at all. If it is a bit vague, it is actually possible to do both. This kind of thing must have a reason for us to daydream. We can't be so unclear, we have to point it out. As for the other heroines, I can only say that dreams are dreams and reality is reality. Some heroines make gratifying progress in their dreams, but they are illusory after all, and there is no actual progress at all. If there is no plot supplement in this aspect, the heroine may treat the protagonist as a business partner. After all, the heroine is too subjective about what she thinks about dreams. In general, the line in the dream has achieved gratifying results, but in reality it is a blank. The two sides are too unequal. The line in reality needs to be supplemented.

The author must not do what he did in the last book, where the male protagonist shaves his head like a psychopath. In terms of relationships, don't make the male protagonist so devoid of emotional intelligence that he suddenly cheats on her.