Annual Order

After reading it all, your writing style is good, and the wording in various sentences is good. But it is very tiring to read, and it is difficult for ordinary readers to persist through it. I think there may be three problems: The first is that the text is very dense, and there are many moves in the battle, but the description sentences are short and fast, and the words in the online text should be clearer. The second is that the plot is too flat and lacks a sense of ups and downs. For example, fighting with Ma San, suppressing ghost corpses, and killing boatmen. Although the graphics are strong, they are relatively monotonous. The enemies are fierce in their moves, and the protagonist is downright polite. The fighting process is very simple, and each fight is similar. The third is that the motivation of the protagonist is not obvious. In these chapters, the protagonist has been on the road of fighting. However, I don't quite understand what the motivation of the protagonist is. He was kicked out by the villagers, and his motivation to stop the secular sect was not strong at all. He felt that there was a lack of foreshadowing and explanation. I am just a reader. I have tried to write a book these days, and the opinions I put forward are only superficial. The author can just read it casually.

The editor will definitely sign it after seeing it.

Very well written, keep it up