Shrouding the Heavens: I Created the Heaven-Devouring Demon Art in the Mythological Era

Nowadays, most new fanfics start by going through the Enlightenment Tribulation. There are not so many things in the early stages, so you can watch the protagonist show off. If you can write out the protagonist's strong character, the results should not be too bad. After all, Zhetian fanfics want that kind of energy.

So far, the writing is okay. Don't make things happen suddenly like those previous books, just have a sudden nervous twitch, and don't make a bunch of clones or anything like that. The biggest problem at the moment is that the Dao-proof weapon does not become an immortal weapon. You have been saying that the immortal weapon is not strong enough, but it is not enough for you to design an immortal weapon that is so difficult to become. What is it like when a mirror in the void shows signs of evolving immortal weapons? They don't follow the path of devouring. Their utilization rate is not as high as yours. They don't have that much immortal gold. They don't have as many supreme blood ancient souls as you do. There are only a few. How about you who follow the path of devouring? How many times more blood and bone souls can you swallow than others? Look at what you wrote yourself. All kinds of immortal gold are constantly integrated into the knife according to the formula. There are already duplicates in the knife, and you have to keep integrating them according to the formula. The nine immortal golds are complete, engraved with immortal runes, and the power of faith has been instilled for ten or twenty thousand years. The blood and bone soul of the Supreme has swallowed almost more than thirty people, right? See for yourself, think about it, are you decent? I tell you this, an emperor's body can forge an emperor's weapon, what do you think? It's just a drag, it consumes so many resources, and it doesn't show the power of the knife at all. Co-authored: Is this a gold-eating beast? It's a pure waste. Will the Bronze Immortal Palace be ruined next? It simply consumes the most resources and produces the lowest output. Let's see what you write? After hitting you, you still have to use your fists. Is it wrong? Then why do you plan to eat up the Immortal Palace? Can't you change it? Get him a new soldier soul? Even if you are dissatisfied with the shape, changing it into another shape and recasting it will be better than swallowing gold and breaking the knife! What broken knife? !

There is too much reading comprehension. Don't write in piles. Insert a paragraph from time to time. If you write too much plot in one page, you will be impatient.

It's so speechless, and I don't know what the protagonist Sister Li is doing at all. Torturing the Immortal Emperor, he originally thought it was to get rid of the evil, but instead gave him the scriptures of Tianzun, and then let him transform, killing the sun and taiyin. Immortal gods are similar to flowers, and they also send scriptures to Tianzun inexplicably, but do you have anything to do with them? The character is a cold and ruthless Demon Lord, but he madly sends scriptures to the Dark Lord and kills two human emperors of his own race. He has no idea what the protagonist is doing. For a normal time traveler, even if you don't build a heaven to cultivate talents, you should at least cleanse the Dark Supreme. Bad things like the Immortal Emperor can't just be shot to death. Why are there so many messy plots? I found that since the beginning of The Immortal Emperor, the plot has been extremely ugly. It's like forcibly creating difficulties for the protagonist and then distorting the normal plot. It's not like there are no books like Zhe Tian Wen with an invincible protagonist. I remember there is a copy of it that I have ordered. Don't you know how to copy someone else's template? It's really speechless that you have to do this kind of poisonous thing.

The writing style is a flaw. To be honest, the writing style of an experienced author with tens of millions of words is still like that of a junior high school student. I really am not suitable for this kind of rice!

You didn't even understand the original work and wrote a Jifei fanfic. Where did the divine ruins come from in the mythical era? The ancient heaven has not been established yet, and the Emperor has not yet appeared.

I feel like the protagonist doesn't have the majesty of an emperor, and he always gives his hand away. When he saw this, he looked like a martial arts warrior, and what happened to the protagonist's family, I don't understand. If the protagonist abandoned the protagonist, then the protagonist ran back to help them up, which is a bit..., And when others asked some questions, the protagonist replied yes, and felt that the protagonist did not have any majesty of the emperor, just like an ordinary person.

Does this old body have to be treated like this? Isn't it better to just put it in your own restricted area? Do you have to deal with it? Really, sometimes I think about it. No wonder when I read the book review, even Xiaofeng Residual Blood said that you can't understand the author and the book.

No wonder the results are not good, the method of transforming into the Holy Spirit lasts for a million years. Other fanfics have reached the pinnacle of the Red Dust Immortal, which is simply too weak. If I change to another fanfic and travel to the mythical age, to TM to the World Waves, it is simply too weak. The time traveler knows that the Red Dust Immortal has so many transformation methods, but he insists on choosing the Holy Spirit method, which is not cost-effective. I am also drunk. Is it because I am tired of living and want to take a nap? Anyway, I gave up after seeing this and looked for another book. Ye Fan said that a pig can become an immortal if it lives for a million years. It takes a million years to transform into a lifetime. Haha, everyone knows that there is a plateau and a million years of time can be wasted. The author is really talented.

It was said before that those who could not become the Red Dust Immortal in millions of years are trash. It took more than 1 million years for your fourth life. Isn't it even more useless? It's not because there was no Red Dust Fairy in Ye Fan's time. The grass is really poisonous.