Showbiz: A Door to the Future

This is rambling, incoherent, and tedious—it's so cringeworthy it's almost unbearable. Is it really necessary to bring people through time in a parallel world setting? It doesn't change history anyway, is it just a forced attempt to show off? They can travel back and forth all the time, and all they do is trade gold? And in batches at that? Do they think they're so smart?

Leaving aside the plagiarism of the subject matter, and the author's own interpretation, the problem is that you ramble on and on without advancing the plot, just indulging in self-indulgence. The ostensible point is to make money, but then you hesitate to do this, find that that's too much trouble, and even a health permit for opening a shop becomes an obstacle.

The author is really just copying other people's ideas, doesn't he have any original thoughts at all? The plot is unclear at the moment, but the author is also delaying updates, does he really have no drafts at all? What are you going to do after it's published?

You're the worst of the worst, buddy. You made me want to throw up first thing in the morning.

As a history student, all I can say is, this is history.

This book is giving me a headache. Every chapter is either an explanation or on its way to one. The main world is 2013, and the parallel world is 2025. The author writes that the protagonist uses information from the parallel world of 2025 to develop his career in the entertainment industry of the main world, taking advantage of the 12-year information gap. But look at what happens next!

Can you please stop writing about K-pop? If you really like those sophisticated PR tactics from South Korea, you might as well write a new book about them.

This is so badly written, you should just abandon it already.

Your setup is the same as Old White's; both use a future portal, and the future self is also dead. 🙂

Here's a suggestion: the focus of this kind of book isn't on your various money-making schemes, but on the back-and-forth between 2013 and 2025. Making money won't attract readers, especially with a science-oriented approach like yours. What readers want to see is two versions of themselves from different time periods arguing and debating—that's what makes it interesting.