Taoist Lord Xuanzhen of Shushan Mountain

First, the visual jumps are too frequent, and the often inexplicable narrative visuals change several times; Second, the timeline is confusing, and the present is often used to recall the past, but the memories of the past are mixed with another timeline, and the time information lacks clear transition words; And the following paragraph—— Yuan Qizhen and Shouye Taoist walked out of the Huwei Escort Bureau, looked at each other, and both were silent. Meng Guyan found the two of them and just wanted to ask for help. Xinxiang never responded and the Sword Immortal did not arrive, so Meng Guyan went to gather the warriors in the city to deal with it. He was a top martial artist and had experience in accompanying the Sword Immortal in dealing with demons. The demons fight on their own and do not communicate with each other. Their assassination methods are often effective. Seeing that the situation went better than expected, and Jiang Yuanwai arrived in time to join the battle, Meng Guyan's tense heart relaxed a little. On the third day, a nun with good looks and evil aura suddenly appeared in the wilderness. She pointed her hand and a yellow sword light flew quickly, killing the warriors and fleeing. The upright Sword Immortal has not yet arrived. According to reports from his informants, the demon nun is gathering scattered demons from all directions. It seems that he wants to practice a special demon method. Knowing that it will be more difficult to deal with if it is delayed any longer, Meng Guyan immediately makes a decision and decides to risk beheading. This is not the time to care about face. The more strength you have, the more likely you are to win. Meng Guyan thought of Yuan Qizhen and Shouye Taoist. Although Yuan Qizhen has not mastered the flying sword, he can cut out a sword light and can also compete with the flying sword. Originally, they were worried that he had a shady background and might betray him before the battle, but since Luo Xin trusted him and he saved Jiang Yuanwai, Meng Guyan thought about it again and again and decided to ask for help. Shouye Taoist Luo Xin told him before he left, saying that there might be some differences, but he couldn't tell what the differences were. Meng Guyan knew that Luo Xin had probably heard the female sword fairy mention it occasionally, so she had some impression of it. Powerful demonic arts often require time for sacrifice. Tomorrow is a cloudy day, and the demon nun will definitely start the ritual. While she is distracted, Meng Guyan leads people to surprise and assassinate her. Although this battle is extremely dangerous, it is not without a chance of winning. Although the nun's sword light is fierce, it is not as agile and sharp as the sword immortal that Meng Guyan has seen. Meng Guyan can still compete for a short time with the magic weapon given by the sword immortal. With him restraining him head-on, and gathering the strength of a few people, there is still some chance of victory. Just hearing this, Yuan Qizhen and Taoist Shouye were both silent. Meng Guyan knew that his opponent was a demon with a flying sword after all, but he did not force it. He only asked the two to think carefully and reply as soon as possible. However, he was determined and prepared to burn the boat. Yuan Qizhen himself is not willing to take more risks. After all, his opponent has mastered the flying sword, and he does not know what kind of treacherous magic method he has. Although Meng Guyan has a good idea, it may not be so easy to implement. ———— If you think about it carefully, the plot is very simple, but your writing is extremely messy. Not only is there a lot of visuals, a lot of patch information, unclear time, but also a lot of waste of pen.

After losing Yuanyang in Shushan, what else do you want to cultivate? Find a place to kill him and wait for the next life.

I don't even know who the main character is. . . Brother, if you can read this book, you are like this👍🏻

Shushan literature has picked up recently? I couldn't read a few of them before, but I can often read them recently.

There is no end to becoming a disciple. I have three golden chapters, but you are so verbose and have forty chapters. I have neither become a master, nor have I practiced swordsmanship well. It is long-winded and bland, and I really don't know what to read.

Cut it off, the messy writing is worse than AI

The progress is too slow, I haven't even become a disciple in Chapter 20

I lost my virginity at the beginning and there is no hope of ascension.

To be honest, the people who clicked on this book were all fans of classical fairy tales or Shushan themes. What they wanted to see was nothing more than flying sword magic weapons. As a result, this book started with more than 20 chapters of monks' palace battles. When I talked about wanting to become a disciple of Wudang in the first few chapters, I thought that the protagonist should remind Shi Yuzhu in advance to make a good relationship with Wudang to achieve the purpose of becoming a disciple. Sure enough, he reminded Shi Yuzhu and formed a good relationship, and made an appointment to take him away the next day. Unexpectedly, the plot was turned around and the protagonist was troubled by other monks. I am really tired after seeing this. I came to read the novel for entertainment, not to suffer. This kind of writing is like ten years ago. At that time, readers were patient and could wait for the protagonist to suffer dozens of chapters and escape from the devil's cave to usher in a new life. But now it is 2026. To sum up my thoughts after watching the game, as of more than 20 chapters, the plot is still in a trivial and trivial situation, with no climax in terms of rhythm. Goldfinger is better than nothing, and I can't see any interesting points. I was too tired to watch it, so I gave up. The above are all my personal reflections. If you have other good Shushan-style or classical Xianxia-style novels, you can recommend them to me. Thank you.

To be honest, I don't understand why so many people don't like Shushan. Anyone who has read the original work will know that compared to so many Shushan fan novels, the Shushan sect in the original work is more worthy of the word Xia.

From Li Xiaoyao's popular point of view, standing on a sword and flying with a sword is too embarrassing. It's better to ride a motorcycle to the sky. Because of this problem, I didn't even read Xianjianyi.

😒 The characters and narrative are a mess

The first 20 chapters are a bit cumbersome, but the later ones get better and better, and the process of refining the mind is very well written 😁

The writing is good, but too slow.

What kind of stuff does Jili Gulu write?

You can have descriptions, but there is only a little bit of plot in one chapter, and filling it all with descriptions will definitely make people tired. The owner of Huanzhu Tower himself is not like this either. I hope the author will consider this carefully.

The beginning is just a school routine. I don't know what it means when I read it. Let's read the original work first and then write.

It's a bit verbose if I can't stop reading at the front, but I can feel it at the back. It's not a complete fanfic. What can Tong not do? Many people talk nonsense without reading a few chapters.

Not on the shelves yet? Niche books are too difficult

Although the plot of Ciyun Temple progresses slowly at the beginning, the story is quite exciting. Later, when you join Wudang, it becomes a simple story. It is all about the guidance of one master to seize the treasure, and the other master's guidance to seize the treasure. I have read more than a hundred chapters of the story of bears breaking sticks 😅

If you want to not be afraid of cause and effect in Shushan, then you have to introduce golden fingers from other heaven systems to reduce your power for ten times without fighting you according to these rules. Otherwise, Wulun, the protagonist who traveled to Shushan, has to pretend to be a grandson no matter how hard he struggles.

The Sword Immortal of the Manchu and Qing Dynasties is boring, meaningless

I'm currently reading the second volume: Flying across with the light of my sword. It feels like it's all about treasure hunting, and the protagonist is really against the sky. Practice is like drinking water, and I just passed it in a hurry. It feels like there is no substantive plot. There is always a sense that the protagonist is a player, and then leads a group of large or small NPCs to search for treasures. It is meaningless. The plot feels not as good as the heart-training process in the first volume, and does not reflect the growth process. Looking back, now it is really repetitive, and there is no character development. It is all a "mission entrustment" type plot. It's not exciting but very repetitive and boring. Everything, whether it's good or bad, is a chess piece in the hands of the protagonist (player). You can take it when you want to use it, and put it aside when you don't need it. I feel that the protagonist's sense of superiority as a time traveler is too heavy, and there is no game process between calculating and being calculated by others.

I don't know why the author's writing style feels stiff.

After entering Wudang, my progress was too slow. I was among the women.

What you started with is the world of cultivating immortals, so that's not interesting.

After charging, it is obvious that the text starts to drag.

Tall buildings rise from the ground. How can you know the sky until you grow old? I wish the author a great success in making this book a success. Polite borrowing: Meeting is fate, guest, do you want to come and see me, "Nirvana Immortal Tribe", group portraits, big background Family cultivation, power plot, delicate writing, emotions of each character Online, non-routine, original story, if you think it is still interesting, please comment and support.

The author has been finishing a chapter at four or five o'clock lately! Too unhappy

Are the masters of the Buddhist sect in Shushan much higher than the Taoist sect? Is Tianmeng Zunsheng more powerful than Ji Le Zhenren?