Seeking Immortality from a Poor Family: Starting from the Suspension of School

It can be seen that the author is very ambitious and careful in setting up the world view. But the pace is really too slow. Otherwise, it will be difficult for people to keep watching if you control the pace appropriately. The tip of the 200,000-word iceberg is not even unfolded.

The plot of the money on the shelves is similar to the prologue of the prequel. It's too watery, the protagonist's strength has not improved at all, and the plot has not advanced much. It makes no difference whether you write it or not. It can even be condensed into five chapters. Take a break from school, plug in, gather friends, and fiancée return. Please tell me that you are writing about cultivating immortals. It is not a heterogeneous city or even a high-martial city. The free trial reading before it is released will improve the protagonist's strength.

A poor family is still a family, but it is better than common people

How can I put it? After reading the first chapter, I feel that the whole family is out of tune. Saving others means saving oneself. How come the limit is changed? It's quite ironic. No matter who intentionally harmed me or because of his personality, I really can't stand it. I am an indifferent person. I would rather watch people die in front of me than take risks. I have a good life and a family who loves me. People who have nothing to do with me are not worthy of letting me take care of them. I think it is a great kindness not to take the initiative to harm others. If I really have that much ability, I am a god, I am a billionaire, I will save you, I will give you some money, it is completely OK. I am nothing. Why are you pretending to be there? My family is miserable. They are really like the kind of people who want to save face outside. My wife and children are chewing dirt. Otherwise, they are dead ghosts. The author wrote him to death in the first chapter. It is very reasonable and reasonable.

It's nice to see. The functions and functions of Xiu Xian Bai Yi and Pile Driving are very logically introduced. However, Liu Yuan's character dialogue is a bit too wordy. He is a relatively philistine young man with no evil intentions.

Not bad. Find more girlfriends and make fewer friends.

Are matters in this cave a matter for ordinary disciples to decide? The sect doesn't care about anything and lets the people below do whatever they want? Even Han Li's Foundation Establishment Pill family still needs to make some superficial efforts and give some compensation, and the front line is all poor, there is no one in the sect, and the cave is occupied by others at will. I am speechless.

It's hard to describe in one sentence, the protagonist is in a hurry every day, there is no plot, and there are too many introductions.

The description of the supporting characters is too much. If you spend so much time describing it in the front, how do you do it in the back? Should you just abandon it? ,

The author cannot limit the contradiction to aristocratic families and poor families. Such straightforwardness will greatly affect the diversity of the world. After this plot, the pattern still needs to be opened up... In addition, the combat system should also avoid a single evaluation system. Qi training is compared with the number of cauldrons, and foundation building is compared with computing power... I hope the author will write better and better, and it will be full.

The author is really annoying! Just because a family was in trouble and needed a part-time job, he mentioned it at least five or six times with more than 20 tickets. It felt like he was rushing to ask for immortality!

I read it in one sitting. The writing is very detailed and straightforward. The author is very ambitious. He wants to write a real world with flesh and blood. The world view is very wide. It depends on whether the author can write a complete story from beginning to end. It is a pity for this book.

It's purely a setting for setting's sake! (Dumplings specially made because of the vinegar)

Look, you are making a sound when you look at it

Over 100 chapters in, the whole thing has been suppressed. Although it was a bit exciting in the process, it was very uncomfortable to be suppressed all the time. I can understand that the author's idea is to suppress - the protagonist turns against the wind and crushes him. However, this routine has been used throughout the whole chapter, which can easily make people tired.

Is this a cut? The foreshadowing was all in vain!

It's a bit boring to watch. Is this cultivating immortality? There is no cultivation in dozens of chapters, and there is no feeling of cultivating the world of immortality. It makes me feel like I am reading a time-travel historical novel and all kinds of common things.

I can't stand the first picture, it's a family of fools, the fool gene will be inherited

In fact, it doesn't matter how many new books you open if you haven't finished writing one. Geniuses are always in the minority, and persistence is the norm for ordinary people.

How many can persist in reading the first chapter?

I hope you can give me a lot of advice and thank you for your trouble

After reading 50 chapters, the early pacing was too slow, there were too many narrations, and the storyline was very natural and had too many reflections on reality, but overall it was watchable.

Is Huxinke a woman? I read the feeling of Gong Dou...

The second novel is in the introduction and was updated four days ago. What's going on?

It's well written, why don't you update it?