I Am Wang Zhongyi

I don't know what the author is thinking. The beginning is okay, but the further it goes, the more it drags on. The logic of the characters does not make sense and the author is still stubborn. If he had concentrated on writing about the transition from martial arts to immortality, it would probably be interesting. Unfortunately, the author's writing is too complicated. There are too many descriptions and the plot progress is slow. The characters are not three-dimensional enough. Even the basic skills of character facial expression are not solid enough. It is written purely with passion. So far I don't know if there is a big chapter. The subject matter is good, but it's a pity that the writing is not good.

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Too much nonsense, the same examples are too dramatic

There is a saying that instead of splitting up, it is more compact and refreshing to directly change the map to cultivate immortality by hosting the system to kill everyone and directly gain experience in the world, then hunt down in the temple and upgrade the secrets of the dynasty to fight monsters. So far, I haven't seen anything exciting, and I don't have much desire to subscribe.

I almost laughed when I saw the word "One Side by Side King" in the introduction 🙂

In fact, you can also write like this, when you encounter that kind of unbreakable barrier, what you lack is not yourself, that is, external force. If you have enough knowledge, you can make yourself a biological lightning disaster, which is specifically aimed at destruction and rebirth. Use the power of heaven and earth. Even if the enemy is besieging you at a critical moment, you can also use them to operate the lightning rod. There is no certain step, and the rest is the violent energy that will first blast the opponent into slag, and the energy of heaven and earth will continue to flow.

Introduction to cheating on the upgrade stream, and ended up reading dozens of chapters of human relations and worldliness 🥵

Pursuing four books at the same time, your monthly ticket was thousands to thousands. It's the 5th now, and I only have a few hundred monthly tickets, so I don't want to write a rubbish. The eyes of the masses are sharp.

Qidian's novels are now the ugliest to read. There's nothing wrong with the writing quality, but it's just full of water. There's no way around it. The author makes money based on the number of words.

I need to think carefully about the writing, and there are many Buddhist Zen sayings. If you don't understand, just look it up. It's too embarrassing to just imagine it here. After ten years of experience, the writing and plot ideas are not mature yet!

After it was released, the writing was messy. The plot took a sharp turn and turned into a suture monster. In order to seize the illusory immortality, without external enemies, the temple officials gave up their faith and became Taoists, abandoning the temple team, the people, the base, and the century-old foundation. The war and immortality were written in a mess.

After reading the comments, I thought it was the main character who had a clone and went down the mountain. I thought, what kind of poisonous point is this? The result is that two subroutines are given to others 🙂

It's too stupid. How can you make money by putting it on the shelves? You don't even need to read the content, just look at the chapter names. There is no need to write about your cultivation in such detail, and it is impossible for us to watch your cultivation process and be able to practice it ourselves. I still have to read the story, which is 130,000 words long. It means traveling through time, joining a temple, practicing martial arts, and becoming a little boss.

When I saw Chapter 60, I just wanted to say that not everything can be moved. When writing a novel, you should use some brains to look up information instead of just writing blindly regardless of the scene. In Chapter 60, all the bullshit things in the workplace are moved into the temple. The mood of the character who does not recite sutras and does not understand Buddhism is hilarious.

You can take a look at your imagination, but it is limited to what you can. The biggest problem is not what kind of poisonous points, but that your writing style is still stuck at a not-so-good level after writing a book for so long. The most taboo thing about writing a book is to write in places that shouldn't be written. Most of them are actually not in the water, or they are not capable enough and cannot be precise. Jane, this book is like, from the first chapter to the latest chapter, I basically scrolled all the way through the next 20 chapters. The reading time was no more than 5 minutes. There was too little information available. One title is one chapter. With such a long plot, what kind of people would subscribe for such text? It is recommended that you refine it as much as you can, and complain less in your heart. If you are writing an upgrading article, not a complaint article, if it doesn't work, make a detailed outline, determine what kind of plot to write in a few chapters, and be more concise. For example, if an upgrade can be divided into three chapters at the beginning, then you can write two chapters and one chapter. You can see if it will give people a better reading experience than now. Write less about your martial arts scenes. Your writing is not good in the first place, and your martial arts scenes are even worse. I can't read a paragraph intensively. I feel like I can sum it up in just a few words at a glance. According to the way you write it, the subscription data you can have after it is put on the shelves, I think it is a bit worrying.

It was well-written and suddenly Liu Yifei 😴 was written, and the price dropped immediately. Being beautiful may not be appropriate. Aren't the women from the sect more beautiful? The protagonist suddenly became superficial.

Authors, sometimes they not only have to write about how powerful other people are, but also how powerful the protagonist is. Others have learned magic skills, and they are all so powerful. All kinds of leapfrog fights and escapes. However, after the protagonist learns this magical skill, he seems to be like ordinary people. You can't skip a level, and you have to use your old strength when fighting. No feeling at all. Greatness comes from comparison. The main character is written as such a weakling. It is true that others are very powerful after learning this magical skill, but after the protagonist learns this magical skill, he is not only stronger but also stronger than others. Please refer to Golden Finger for details. Just like Qiao Feng's Eighteen Palms for Subduing the Dragon, you will be the protagonist at first glance. You can't write about people and martial arts so well. However, the protagonist is still a piece of rubbish after learning. A common problem among authors. The plot is poorly controlled. Without being able to control the plot, the protagonist is given a magical costume, and the effect is like a blank slate. Then when someone else learns a magical skill, they can treat the protagonist like a dog. The protagonist also learns this magical skill, but he is still a dog. He only learns the magical skill but does not learn the power of the magical skill. It's unpleasant to watch.

It's still okay in the early stage, but there are stitching monsters later on, and such a good start was wasted. The author is an old author, and he still doesn't understand. You can add water, but you must not add other things to it. This book is written as it was at the beginning. It shouldn't be difficult to add martial arts to the system to become a high-quality book!

I've been writing about Liu Yifei coming out, are you running out of things to write? If you keep doing this, you might as well just be a eunuch.

I suspect that the author is not good at writing at all. Some things are described so strangely that I don't even know what the protagonist's current world is. There is also a protagonist and what is the style of this sect. The protagonist practices martial arts, but you added a temple to it, but I don't see any temple characteristics in the protagonist's actions and methods. At least it is worthy of praise (to be honest, any martial arts sect in the first 20 chapters can be brought in) Also, what is your practice of martial arts? Traditional martial arts can still break the void with force, and it is based on the basics of zhenqi. The description of the text is really embarrassing, and the plot also has a poor sense of substitution. I think the first three chapters should be supplemented with the life story of the protagonist and popular science world view. What is this temple like? A few hundred words can be enough without being too detailed The behavior of the monks. Is it necessary to have some typical characters of the temple? You wrote the monk with a broken arm (what kind of template is he? Although the Mahayana Buddhism has a broken arm, the potential strength is still there? A person who simply sends exercises? If you are not proficient in Buddhism, you have no strength) Are there some sects in temple firework? The character in it is Wei Guangzheng? Or a sinister one? Or duplicity? It is recommended that the author read some Buddhist books or learn from other people's books, sort out your skills and realms, and the strength positioning of each level. Don't come up with true energy. How do I know what these realms of yours are like, and where did you practice?

I have been a fake fan for ten years and it came out. I used to like reading the book Starting from the Soul of Chess, but it was still a pirated version. Later, I saw that Pigfoot actually developed the Bigu Pill to break through the Pill, and the follow-up was suddenly discontinued. It still feels like a pity. In the past two years, I occasionally thought of this book and read it again to give me three monthly passes

Your introduction says that the fourth volume is considered a new book, but it is charged directly... Is it reasonable?

What the hell did it become after it was put on the shelves? Now Liu Yifei has appeared? Then do you want to read what you wrote in these chapters? What about the style you had at the beginning?

No wonder you keep rushing to the street, Liu Yifei shows up and force-feeds you shit

From ranking list to monthly ticket 0, the author perfectly explains how money cannot be grasped

The front part is pretty good. The development of the protagonist is explained in detail, and the setting and background are also unfolded little by little, until the climax of passing on the power and passing away. The following words are not concise enough. There are too many conversations between two people written at once, which slows down the pace. It is not obvious in a big chapter of 10,000 words. But in a small chapter, it is like two people talking to each other for two chapters. To put it simply, it is just water. Maybe the setting introduces too much at once, which is a bit like cramming. Readers can't absorb it in a short time and want to skip it. This is equivalent to reading it in just a few times in a day, and it is easy to save more for reading again. Perhaps when the author is writing the dialogue, it would be better to try to change the scene and stop at the superficial level. It would be better to go in depth later when he can write a chapter of 10,000 words? Just like answering questions in normal times, Yingwuhuasheng will not be so boring if you change the questions...

After roughly reading Chapter 70 or 80, and comparing it to what the introduction said, I actually didn't feel like I had a quick breakthrough at all. Basically there is nothing exciting about it, just the worldliness. Furthermore, the foreshadowing laid before and after is not reflected as it should be, such as what are the benefits of a long test time. After entering the kitchen, there was only pressure and hardship. And the first person to enter the kitchen is nothing. Then I wrote about the comparison of the French generation. The problem is that they all have cheats and plug-ins in their hands. As a result, they are no faster than the indigenous geniuses. The last thing is the issue of realm. I always want to blur the realm, and then mix in all kinds of personal things. Finally, no matter how the author says that the protagonist is powerful, it will always make people feel baffled.

It's okay in the front, but I gave it up as soon as the clone came out in the back.

I saw the chapter about the teleportation array in this book, and then looked at the table of contents. Damn it, I wrote whatever I dreamed about 😵

The more you write, the better. The rigidity of the secret realm can imitate the real world. The dissatisfaction in people's hearts will give birth to a force. This force will become stronger and stronger. Only those who want to change the current situation and implement it can resonate with this force, and their practice will soar to the sky. At the same time, this power can deceive the heavens, causing calamity to spread all over the world, and the situation of the universe will be repeated. It's similar to the calamity in prehistoric novels. The dissatisfaction in the hearts of all living beings is the one that escapes. Only the Great Dao 50 and Tianyan 49 have infinite variables and infinite information. Omniscience is omnipotence.