I Am Addicted to Cultivating Immortals, so I End My Worldly Fate and Buy a Card Pack

After reading a few chapters for the first time, the author's writing is very literary and youthful. Is she an ancient style author of female videos? The setting is very good, and the side plot is also very good, but it feels uncomfortable to watch and feels too fragmented. Shen Hui is obsessed with Bai Lian. The protagonist sets up a test to test Shen Hui and indirectly tests Bai Lian. This routine is a common routine in legends and folk novels. Gods test the sincerity of rich people, and some use tests to help them see their love clearly, find their destination, etc. Although these are cliche, they are also highlights. But it feels like it just enriches the plot of the branch lines, which doesn't make people feel very happy, and it's not well integrated. It feels inexplicable to waste such a large part of the plot, and there is so much foreshadowing. In the end, it feels like what good does it do to the protagonist? It's good to read "Zhiguai Zhiguai", but if it's a cool novel, it's not enough to upgrade.

The writing method is a bit old-fashioned, and the setting is good, but some places are really awkward.

The first chapter of this novel shocked me. The protagonist is a mortal, and his father is not a powerful person. He worked hard on his own and became the richest man in the capital at such a young age! There is also a nickname called Chen Bancheng! This is a feudal dynasty! Who dares to call it "Half City" in Beijing? And the reason why there is a food shortage in the capital is because businessmen manipulate food prices! Which businessman dares to manipulate grain prices in the capital? The price of grain is so high that one hundred taels of silver can't buy half a bag of rice! Which businessman can be so brave? During the food shortage, the protagonist stepped forward to provide disaster relief? Who dares to personally spend money for disaster relief at the emperor's feet? Isn't this a slap in the face of the imperial court? What's even more outrageous is that the protagonist works for relief, and 90% of the people in the capital work for the protagonist! Is this a plot that anyone can come up with?

In Chapter 5, the protagonist buys a woman from a brothel. In the same chapter, this woman becomes the protagonist's sister. Chapter 16 A cultivator fell from the sky and discovered that she had spiritual roots and accepted her as his disciple. No matter how you evaluate this plot, I personally feel it is not as good as Xiao Xun'er fifteen years ago.

1. Female channel short drama, the plot is blunt, the cause and effect relationship is unclear, and it is full of love and love. 2. In the late stage of literary youth, I want to write about strange things but have no experience, I want to tell stories but it is boring, my writing is empty, my language is weak, and my three views are at odds with me. 3. Selling dog meat over sheep's heads, writing about seeking immortality has no ambition to seek immortality, and writing about lottery card packages is better than nothing. I haven't read much, just these three points. Because a common problem among young literary writers is that they have a lofty ideal and do not listen to advice, so I won't say more.

It feels like the female video author is pretending to be a man

I transferred it from a female channel. I just like to write details, plot settings, and the data is not reasonable

A female author writes a male channel Classic true love emerges from a brothel Classic fox demon is ♀ Classic supporting character cares about the world and wants to save the common people, but he can only save my common people, other people's rain girls have nothing to worry about Too many buufs 💀

Plug-ins are released as soon as they come out, and a limit is added at a time. It is okay to enhance the explorability of plug-ins, but it can be concentrated in one stage, instead of riding a bicycle and forcibly braking, which is not smooth. Moreover, the restrictions appear suddenly, not by the protagonist.

Grinding and chirping, literary youth It has a kind of brain-deformation like "the junior Qi practitioner framed the God of Transformation for stealing the Foundation Establishment Pill"... Started from scratch, and dances back and forth on the red line of imperial power from time to time... It's so awesome. If I were the emperor, this protagonist would not survive the next day.

This book has a serious logic bug. In Chapter 11, the protagonist received a total of nine orbs in public. These nine orbs can greatly extend the life of mortals. The news was bound to leak out in public. So the question is, why hasn't the emperor asked the protagonist for the orb after so long? Don't you regard ancient people as moral models? Even though the protagonist is called Chen Bancheng, he is not the most powerful person in the world. Then why didn't the emperor send someone to ask for the orb? The logic bug at this point is very serious.

Prices in this book refer to the inflation version of Tiandi Bank.

It's just a few hundred thousand taels casually. I feel the price is cheaper than iron ore.

The author's writing on economic prices feels strange. Is one tael of silver regarded as one piece? In ancient times, when the price of silver was the lowest, one hundred thousand taels could sell the ownership of a house. At that time, one tael of silver was the living expenses of an ordinary family of three for more than half a month.

Running away after reading Bai Lian is also a way of screening readers.

I really can't watch Bai Lian. I don't have a good opportunity to cut off my relationship, but I still have to save her. Have I watched too many female videos by dragging the author back and forth? Or is it a female video writer? It's really not fun at all

I previously scolded the author for writing a story about a brothel girl who was first innocent and then cheated on her. It was lagging and dragging, and the text that lost all the fairy spirit was missing. Did the author delete it?

Many of the plots written are meaningless, they cannot advance the plot, and they do not enhance the strength. They are forced to be touching but not touching, and they are trying to be pretentious and fairy-like. It is all in vain.

Let's not talk about the extremely poisonous part of Bai Lian's pimping. What is the purpose of the updated chapters now that they are on the shelves? Stitching various myths? You have to write your own stuff!

Don't miss it if you pass by, it's such a good book

This book is so-so. Many plots can be said to be a battle between the left and right brains. The descriptions are too deliberate and some do not fit the characters.

If cultivating an immortal means breaking off the fate of the mortal world, wouldn't the cultivation of the immortal be in vain? If a general of a country enters the Tao and defends his country and kills the enemy, he will die violently. If a great doctor enters the Tao and saves people, he will die suddenly. Then what is the point of cultivating immortals?

After a quick look, you are probably a woman. There is no logic in anything.

No, you can find a classmate. If you can't eat this food, there is no need to force it.

When I get to the paid content, I feel that the details are different from before. Has someone changed? It's just boring

I hope you can give me a lot of advice and thank you for your trouble

The writing is very good. Is the author probably majoring in Chinese? Why are my grades so bad? Three monthly passes will give me a boost.

It's a good book, but it's a pity that it's unfinished. Let it sit on my unfinished bookshelf until it's revived, and I'll resubscribe it later.

I felt a little bit depressed when I saw it later. The combat power increased too quickly. As expected, the author ran away.