The Heavens Began to Forge Swords from the Ancient Dragon World

The more I read, the more boring it becomes. The protagonist often talks about famous swords from other worlds in front of the ancient dragon characters, or about some unborn ancient dragon characters. He feels that others don't know about it, and his face is filled with regret, and he doesn't know what the author is thinking.

First, the protagonist is the time traveler. My family is a blacksmith and swordsman, but the protagonist doesn't look like a time traveler at all. . . . . . The protagonist traveled through time and space into Gu Long's novel, instead of the protagonist becoming a character in the novel written by Gu Long!       ，      ， The first Tears Sword, the sword owner will kill relatives and friends after using it The second Golden Snake Sword, ordinary people cannot use it The third Yitian Sword, the sword owner will be ruthless and loving It is just a sharp weapon, how can people not survive? ? ? ? ?

Anyone who doesn't kill Lin Xian'er when encountering the plum blossom thief is disgusting, and anyone who doesn't kill Long Xiaoyun is not a good person either

The writing is good, the plot is average, but the style is too different to match the writing style. The swordsmith wants to fight and kill, actively pretending to be cool, no, it should be said to follow the plot, there are plum blossom thieves, and all kinds of awkward things. There was no famous swordsmith who had not been begged by someone else to provide materials, and none of Inuyasha's swordsmiths were so outrageous. A protagonist who is tough on others. The protagonist has the strength to stay out of the situation and look down from afar. He must have the kind of disregard for the world, play with the world with his works, and be pursued by others, and be demanding. It's a bit annoying to watch the movie run after being ranked first in the rankings, and the swords made are not allowed to be used. It's a pity that the selling point, the writing style, the plot and the excitement are so vulgar. It is two extremes from the book The Mingyue Sword of the Qin Dynasty. There is no furnace or process for making the sword. The sword is made casually and given away casually without any compensation. It is speechless and has too many logical loopholes. This book is much better, but it's not even close to the standard. How can I order a base of two thousand for the first time when the standard is higher? It makes me feel uncomfortable, tasteless, and a pity to abandon it.

Jumping and watching, there is a feeling that the king wants to show off in front of the indigenous people but finds that his eloquence and wisdom are not enough. He can only communicate by force, which makes the ceiling of the indigenous people vulgar.

The protagonist has forged so many swords, and his sword moves should have been otherworldly, and they are also blessed by the character's internal power, but his performance is too useless. He just made a set of thirteen deadly swords over and over again, and he was possessed by a demon.

The beginning is like this, you can think of the ending 😒😒 Let me tell you who is in favor and who is against based on the reply.

Don't stick to Gu Long's style all the time. You are Zhu Tianwen, and other worlds are not suitable for this style of writing. This style of writing seems to have a large audience. In fact, most of the best-selling martial arts fans do not have this style.

You might as well use nuclear radiation materials to make a Lord-Eating Demon Soldier for Jianghu to play with.

The way of speaking and the author's description are all just to show off! I couldn't stand the first chapter! The sword was tempered just above! In the next section, two or three passers-by appeared to talk to him, but he was pretending to be cold! Then it was forged again! Isn't it true that your normal forging sequence is to forge the sword into shape, then quench and harden it, and then sharpen it? After polishing is completed, if you want to increase the toughness, turn back on the fire! The protagonist pretends for the sake of pretending!

The title of your book is suitable for writing a semi-group portrait. Don't just pick up the sword and kill people when there is nothing wrong. The first world looks okay, but the second world feels much less hopeful. You are a sword maker, and you have strong martial arts. Once or twice is enough. Just let some people stop messing with you. Mainly, it is better to have some people who have the protagonist's sword to promote the story, such as Sword appreciation conferences and the like, or some supporting characters use special materials, money or power to let some people get the protagonist's sword and let them push it, and then use various sword characteristics and martial arts to highlight the awesomeness of the sword. There is no need to do it yourself. For big events that cannot be solved, someone will ask the protagonist to solve it, and they don't know how to pick it up. There is no need to pretend to be cool

Every time Broken Void is actually in Gu Long's world, and in the changed world, everyone in Wulin knows the master of the sword-making building, but I won't write about the old people I know. I can only say that the changed world is like a parallel universe, and the parallel universe also has the protagonist's experience.

In the first dozen chapters, you can see that he is looking for trouble and seeking death. The protagonist also has a full taunting halo?

Let me complain, each of your worlds seems to be traveling through time. In fact, they are still connected, but the time is different. Sometimes, it seems that each world is independent. You are traveling to different worlds. If you are traveling through time, you should do it in chronological order. You always jump Jumping back and forth, running to the front, running to the back, the timeline is all messed up, or you are in a different world, then you have no trace of yourself, and there is no impact. A completely new world has passed, and it seems like you have been here before. The new world is the previous world slowly passing by. Come, and then the problem is that you jump around again. If you can't write about the timeline, don't write about the timeline. If you can't control it, don't control it. Moreover, you are not very good at writing about innovation in the first place. You have left so many swords and weapons, but they have been passed down later. It seems that it has no impact on the world. , And the span of each world is only a few decades, which is more than 10 years. It is as if you have left a century, and there is no legend about you in society. You can either simply treat each new world as a new world, and don't leave so many behind-the-scenes, as if you have been here before.

Author, I think your setting is a bit abnormal. The protagonist is a swordsmith who sells weapons and swords. It would be better for you to make the borrowed sword protagonist forge and acquire those magical weapons with the martial arts of the original owner. His mission has been accomplished. It should be sold instead. The protagonist is the master. Others can only use it, it does not belong to people. Moreover, the protagonist is not the original owner, so how can he use the weapon to its fullest potential? Moreover, the sword and the sword are spiritual. He will go to the master to set it up by himself. Only the protagonist is the only master of the weapon. The forged sword. What's the point?

The writing is okay, but the sword is made to cause trouble in the world without being released, and the confrontation between good and evil is not interesting. Is it just to watch the protagonist entertain himself and show off? Who doesn't love the magical weapon Jianghu (refer to Heaven Slaying the Dragon, Qin Shiming Yue Luo Yu), and it is very suitable to write about thunderbolts or golden light, Jianghu people come one after another, blood flows into rivers. Refresh at zero point

1. Imitate Gu Long's writing style, but the character is not charming enough. If readers only want to see Gu Long's style, why don't we read Gu Long's original work? There is a starting point 2. I know Jin Yong and Gu Long through TV series. I just want to ask, Huang Shang Jiuyin Zhenjing and Yitian Sword, aren't these from Jin Yong's books? 3. The protagonist has traveled through time and has the profession of a swordsmith. These two settings are too hard. He has traveled through time, but apart from the fact that he knows the general direction of the plot, he feels no different from the aboriginal people. He has no morals (lawlessness or acting for heaven are both the same direction), nor his own ideas (if he wants to become stronger, or just a simple liver emperor, he wants to do the liver mission), or he is a pure fun person, these are all the protagonist's own ideas. The protagonist should follow his own ideas and implement them (otherwise, what novel would he be reading). Now I feel that the protagonist is purely a system tool and follows the system. The protagonist himself has no ideas Swordsmith. It should be a profession closely related to martial arts to facilitate the development of the protagonist. It gave him a golden finger to learn martial arts, but the martial arts was activated too fast. It has already moved in the direction of Invincible, but the book still wants to maintain the gloomy style of Gu Long. If it wants to suppress the protagonist's combat power, it starts to contradict itself 4. It is equivalent to repeating the third point. The protagonist caused by these problems is unattractive and uncomfortable to read. This is an online article. Even if the author does not want to have a good meal, he will still want to find some colleagues, but the way you write it seems that few people will like it. The fact that I imitate Gu Long's writing style is a bonus, not a decisive factor. Nowadays, everyone just likes to read cool articles. If readers enjoy reading cool articles, and you have the novel style of Gu Long or Jin Yong, they will think it is more flavorful. It is not because you imitate Gu Long's writing style, and everyone will fall into the trap just because of this.

The more I read, the more familiar I become. This is not Wen Chao Gong's first "Wulin Banxia Biography". The plot of Zhutianliu protagonist Fang Ming in Li Xunhuan. The general template of the plot at the beginning is almost exactly the same. This...

Still: You're here, I'm here, you shouldn't do that. It's just Tu Yile, no one really likes to read this kind of dialogue instead of reading a novel!

The more I read, the more verbose I feel, with a lot of adjectives thrown in at every turn (1️⃣"Smiling bitterly like a fox who was caught secretly drinking.", 2️⃣"In Huo Tianqing's yard, the air seemed to have solidified into ice. He stared at Xiao Zhu, his eyes like venom-quenched daggers"). Most of the time, there are only a few sentences in each chapter, and then they are all adjectives. The male protagonist's appearance and temperament alone are complimented every time he meets a newcomer, and every time he talks a hundred words of nonsense

Your writing on Peerless Double Pride is terrible.

I can't resist half of the first chapter. I have never seen an author with such a useless name. My eyes are opened. If the author sees this, you will have to pay me the mental damage fee for those few hundred words.

I've read a few chapters, but the writing is really not that good. The author used this book to practice his writing. I'll come back when you write the next book.

Why don't you, Mr. Zheng, update your posts twice?

What is the grade of the Tears Sword? Can the protagonist's early sword surpass Xie Xiaofeng's?

Fire Lin has appeared, is the 40-meter sword still far away?

The Sword of the Wrath of Heaven has its own wrathful heart, and the compassion of the Heaven and the Humans Dragon Sword, Heavenly Sword, Golden Snake Sword, and Pili Puppet Show have many faces Sword of the Sky, Ziwei Ruanjian in Dugu Qiubai, Zhongjian In the Storm, Qilin Sword, Bu Jingyun's Sword, Sword God's Heroic Sword , the face of the Sword Master, Fengyun and other magic weapons also have swords, The Seven Princesses of Martial Arts all use swords, that is the era of demons The Undead Evil Sword, Lin Luoshi's Golden Plum Vase World, the Four Famous Catchers The Tianmo Qin World also uses swords, the sword in Tianzi Legend

The Eighteen Dragon Subduing Palms, this is recognized as the best palm technique among martial arts in the world Every time traveler does not have this palm technique. If he does not practice his own palm technique, it will be a disgrace to the identity of the time traveler.

I remember there was a movie where a sword can transform into a phoenix