The Killer Girl’s Severe Dependency

I think this plot is inexplicable. The male protagonist said that he fell in love with the female shopkeeper because of the kindness of a stranger, and then the secret love was shattered because the female shopkeeper already had a fiancé This is normal, there is nothing wrong with the plot But the problem comes later The fiancé is a bastard, planning to defraud the female shopkeeper of her money and people, and runs away after a while, and happens to be surrounded by the police during the wedding (to be honest, the police were blatantly surrounded At the wedding scene, isn't it just giving hostages to the gangsters?) The male protagonist saves The female shopkeeper succeeds and has a crush on the male protagonist because of the suspension bridge effect What does the male protagonist do at this time? First, refuse, second, match up with the woman The shop owner and her childhood sweetheart Although I think it's a bit of a stud to just accept it, this kind of plot is too disgusting Why don't we just end it at the wedding I'm telling you the truth, I'm telling you the truth

The first 20 have basically nothing to do with the title of the novel. I can't see the protagonist picking up this gambling dog that would be of any help to the protagonist. He stole all the protagonist's property and put the protagonist on a wanted list for rescuing him. Although it is excusable. But it just feels very disgusting. You've wiped out the loan shark companies. Not taking any money was really something I never expected. The protagonist lets others know his name after finishing the fight, without even a hint of disguise. As a spy, he's still wanted. It was frustrating to watch. Everything the protagonist encounters has a conspiracy behind it. So far, we haven't seen the heroine in Chapter 28. I can't stand it anymore. (The above statements only represent my personal views and were made out of anger. Please do not go into details. If there is any offense, I am really sorry. I am as timid as a mouse and the reality is that I am a sb. Please do not insult me ​​and my language is not good. If there are any mistakes, feel free to correct them. Thank you.)

Miss Killer is heavily dependent on you, but what about your Miss Killer? Why is there only a small oil bottle and a married female NPC on the side of the road?

For those who have a little knowledge of related industries, this setting will immediately kill you. A top intelligence officer who has outstanding appearance, is not wary of strangers, and even takes a bath in the same room with you and can't trick him out. Why don't you perform magic tricks on the street? There is also a top killer trained by a country with normal intelligence but no common sense in life. I don't know, I thought he was a bed partner and thug raised by a small organization.

The title character has almost no role. Yes, it's 36,000 words long and the title character has basically never appeared. The author himself said in his post that he didn't want the book to dry up. In fact, he just wanted to whet people's appetites. No, he accidentally killed himself. He laughed to death. Will he still commit suicide when writing books in the future?

After reading it, I was a little annoyed. The lady in the title of the book has appeared for so long. There is no big adventure or ups and downs. Let's just have a dry plot. The heroine is forced to go offline and maliciously makes readers who read the title of the book come in. Akaashi, if you write the heroine first and then the female characters after you have written it. We like other characters, so I think your writing is good and your character creation is good. I have been reading it for so long. The heroine has been hidden for a few chapters, but when it comes to the main chapter, she is still in a state of death. It's crazy. This heroine's chapter is purely depressing and gives people a faint feeling of death. The hero seems to be a fool in this section. Doesn't he know what will happen if he reports it to the police? Like a scumbag who took out the whole process, Mark asked you where the heroine was, and you gave a meaningful wry smile. You smiled wryly and you are blessed. I love you from the inside and you are blessed. To be honest, I don't hate the policewoman, but I hate your malicious way of dealing with the heroine. The premise of your internal love is not to internally hate other characters. You can just write the killer to death. I directly regard the male protagonist as a useless scumbag. I personally pushed the female protagonist into this situation. Don't tell me what to do in this situation. This situation is also the author's own environment. He wanted to remove the female protagonist in this way and give a disgusting reader an offline environment. The male protagonist is portrayed as a scumbag who escapes reality and has not taken on the responsibility. And his inexplicable high opinion of the female police officer makes me feel that the author is maliciously targeting the character.

What kind of Goba stuff have you written recently? Did the author put himself in the role of the male protagonist? The characters he wrote were broken and he was purely self-excited and moved. Readers will only think that the male protagonist you wrote is mentally ill, and he is very ill. Moreover, the illness started from the moment the male protagonist returned to China. I have never understood it. Why does the male protagonist like that B organization so much? Your male protagonist is not a local aboriginal but a time traveler! Why do you have to go back to country b when you're on the run? Can't you take Lao Wu and Lao Ni to country C with you when you run away? If you were a local aborigine and you said you couldn't guess how the heroine of the book would be treated after returning to China, how could you, a time-traveler, not guess it? ! As a time traveler, don't you know whether you will be sent out on a dangerous mission again after returning to your country? ! You, a time-traveler, bring a character like Lao Ni, who the protagonist regards as his younger sister, back to country B. What are you going to do? Did you deliberately put a hostage in Organization B to prevent your protagonist from escaping later? Really, for the sake of my own preferences and self-motivation, I even ignored the most basic logic! No wonder the book review section has been full of people scolding you recently. I couldn't hold it in when I saw this, it's so outrageous! If you like to entertain yourself so much, write it for yourself and don't harm us readers! 🙂

The latest chapter is really breathtaking to read. The two chapters describe the actions of the protagonist in order to achieve the goal, but fall short in the end. For me, this is a poisonous point. You can write about the protagonist being frustrated, but really don't let the protagonist fail at the last moment when he is about to achieve his goal after making a lot of efforts. It will only make people very irritated.

After reading more than a dozen chapters, I really have to complain about some flaws. The first is the identity of the male protagonist. As a spy who has been hiding for many years, it is not a mistake to be given a relaxing drug by an ordinary person. It is true that he is retired. After retirement, he has forgotten all his spy experience. It's all over the place. It might be better if you set it up as if the male protagonist has just time traveled to this spy. The problem is that you have traveled through time for many years and have not made any progress at all. The male protagonist in this description can only be said to be a reckless college student with a bit of force. He just goes through everything. , It doesn't look like a spy at all, and the psychology of the male protagonist is like the left and right brains fighting each other. He wants to retire, but at the same time he is crazy and causing trouble. It is similar to the male protagonist in a funny anime, but the male protagonist in the anime has a bad spot and just laughs at the scene. Then this is a novel. Novels require readers to make assumptions based on the story. It is completely impossible to understand that a spy who has been engaged in covert work for many years would have such a character. Otherwise, just add a nonsensical label. You write it as a joke, and I will read it as a joke.

I can't stand it anymore when I read the fourth volume. I write whatever I dream about. There is almost no title. The internal love is too serious. Nicole was just created in the previous chapter. The reader has just fallen in love with this character and you have to wait for a whole volume. Can you look back at the visit in the third volume and find any attractive points? Is there a reason why readers like these two police officers? To put it bluntly, it is not even as lovable as the one in the bakery. After all, people are considerate and can make the protagonist fall in love at first sight and the readers fall in love at first sight. If I just repeat it and say that I am conservative and prohibit sex before marriage, it can still be used. But from the reader's perspective, what is the charm of the policewoman? Just remember to hold grudges, be coy, and stingy. Everyone gives in to her, and the plot also gives way to her. She pretends to be a couple to perform tasks the day after they met, and she is just a child in a high position. No readers said sweet in the comment area, right? Just because she is the heroine? Why should she become the heroine without any plot foreshadowing? If the internal love is so serious, why don't you change the title of the book to "The Two or Three Things Between Undercover Me and the Police Beauty". Let those who like reading read it. Those who want to read the original title can go ahead.